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TwilightCircle


It seems I'm not capable of writing a bio without sounding really pretentious, so I'll keep it simple.I write pony-fanfiction. That is all.

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Five years after Twilight's relocation to the city of Ponyville, the young dragon Spike has matured greatly. His childish crush on the mare Rarity having blossomed into true love, Spike resolves to share his feelings at last. But a dark new force gathers in the shadows, threatening the rarely disturbed peace in the land of Equestria. Will Spike be able to make his dreams come true before it's too late, or will Rarity be lost to him forever? There's only one way to find out.

Initially conceived as a simple love story, this piece of fan fiction has grown from its original intended word count of 10,000 to more than 16,000, with less than a third of the story completed. Though Spike and Rarity will be a great part of the focus, don't be fooled: the story itself is action packed and will leave no reader unsatisfied, neither romantic nor warrior.

Chapters will be released at minimum on a Wednesday/Sunday basis, more often if possible. Please feel free to contact me with questions and suggestions.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 15 )

This is pretty good :) Can't wait for more :D

Oooh, colour me intrigued. Two very promising chapters indeed. Tracked and favourited.

First chapter: Very well written! 4 Stars
Second chapter: OK, not as good as the first. 3.5 stars
Third chapter: Mediocre. 3 stars

Hi there, Alan. Thanks very much for sharing your opinion.
Not writing is perfect, which clearly you understand. I'm always trying to improve my writing style and stories to make them more enjoyable for the reader, so do tell, what did you find mediocre about the third chapter?

No writing, my apologies.

Okay, was I just imagining things or ... No, there was a third chapter here. It's gone now. What happened?

Hi, Ospero.

No, you're no imagining anything. There are certain portions of chapter three that I viewed as below my par even while writing them, but l left them the way they were for lack of a better option. While brainstorming yesterday, I decided on several elements that will help improve flow and story line. I'm going to re-post chapter three when I post chapter four soon.

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Well, the third chapter wasn't necessarily BAD, it was just poorly paced. The fight scenes were a little frustrating to follow, and the main villain's dialogue was predictable. What I liked about the first chapter was how deep you delved into Spike's love for Rarity. That made it interesting to read, and made me curious as to what you will do next with the story.

Well... how very interesting. An interesting group for the villains... I like how deep you are going with Spike and Rarity, though I hope the others are remembered as well.

Tracking this.

if you can wait until weekend, i can make you a pimp-ass cover art...

i like it i hope you dont mind but when i write my fanfic u inspried me in certain ideas so thank you very much. hope to read more soon.

SO any chance of this getting of hitaus any time soon :fluttercry:

damn she laid into him pretty hard.

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