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Nine ponies have been kidnapped and forced to take part in a game called the Nonary Game. With no memory of their past lives the nine must work together to try to piece together their past and beat this game. But who can you trust in a game of deception, betrayal, and death. Where the very pony who you are working with could be the very one who brought you here in the first place.

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YES! FIRST COMMENTER!!! DIS GONNA BE GOOD! :) :P
:pinkiehappy:

Yes, yes, YES! I'm not going to lie; I was thinking about writing my own story which is 999: The Pony Version. This looks like sort of a mixture between 999 and Virtue's Last Reward (the superior sequel). Nice!

I'm curious to see who the characters will be, besides for the Mane 6. I'm also curious to see how you'll deal with their personalities. Do they act the way they do on the show, or do they act like Virtue's Last Reward characters (for example, Pinkie Pie being Clover), or a combination of both? Is Twilight the only pony with amnesia? Are we going to learn that the 9th Man was secretly a pony all along?

As for constructive criticism, I would recommend splitting up some of the humongous paragraphs into smaller paragraphs. Sometimes, it's hard to read a huge block of text, just because it's easy to lose your place in the paragraph if you scroll down. On the other hand, the Zero Escape games are certainly guilty of having massive exposition overloads, so it feels rather authentic to have a ton of non-dialogue text.

1681037 Ok thanks for the feed back. I'll be sure to fix that in the next chapters. As for the questions you have other than the main 6 Luna Celestia and Trixe will be there too. As for the amnesia all of the 9 ponies will have amnesia. I did this because since they all know each other they would just ally with each other and it would make for a very boring story. I was thinking since they all have amnesia that they would act kind of like themselves but not really. Like pinkie pie not being as hyperactive as she is on the show since she has no memory of the sonic rainboom. I don't really want to tell you that much more because of spoilers so again thanks for the feed back

Hmmmm.... this seems promising! :trixieshiftright::rainbowhuh:

So the "I" is Twilight?




FIRST!

Yes when it says I that is when twilight is talking/thinking

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