Can you tell that the "Epilogue" was actually two tiny chapters smooshed together?
Also, there is one chapter, "Distractions", still unpublished, but it has no sex and isn't part of the main plot. I don't know when I'll get around to putting it up; I seriously need a break.
I can't believe this story is still in the feature box. I'll probably be known as a clopfic author forever now.
Oh my god, this was so good, and it ended so fast ;( lame you have to write more! something else, not even this ship. just more. You're a really good writer
yess but your fic is still good you may not be a complete clop writer like bronystory's but you're a pretty damn good writer. cheers O and loved the ending. did rainbow really figure out who twi was doing or was that just a joke?
1696934 Be honest with yourself. This was a respectful and enjoyable take on incestuous relationships. It dealt with the issues with a mature eye, did not linger on the sex or jump into it too easily, and was a refreshing read. I would honestly say I would like more, but I don't see how this fic can continue and keep the gloss it has gained.
I can't believe this story is still in the feature box. I'll probably be known as a clopfic author forever now.
Yep that might be a case. Considering that this story has 12.685 times views than all your other fics together. No worry though. Clop authors are a funny and jolly bunch.
Naww. Just roll her eyes and say "oh, come on, Rainbow! Shining Armor is a married stallion! Do you *really* think Cadence would be okay with something like that?"
Or, if she was *really* sneaky, say "oh, shucks, you figured it out. Yeah, me and Shining go way back, and now Cadence joins us too!" And then Rainbow would start guffawing and say "good one, Twi!" and they'd all go on with their merry business.
1697198 This is TWILIGHT we're talking about. As bad as AJ at lying? Yeeeeaaaaaah, if RD really said that, she is now blushing, stammering and trying to plan four alternate routes of escape to the library (in case teleportation fails), what exactly she needs to pack, how to get Spike with her, and what the train schedule is back to Canterlot ... as well as how to inform Shining and Cadence that the jig is up and don't they have a kingdom to run or something they can flee to?
I can't believe this story is still in the feature box. I'll probably be known as a clopfic author forever now.
Yeah, that's probably the case. It's not exactly the sort of reputation that comes out with soap and a stern scrubbing.
You'll just have to live up to it now and slowly buckle under the endless avalanche of comments asking "when are you going to write more incest fics? I demand no less than fifty thousand words of Twilight taking it long and hard from her brother. Please please please instantly gratify me!" Because that's totally what they're going to say.
1696934 Don't rush it, but whenever you've got it ready, I'd love to read that chapter, cloppy or not. (Does it have to do with Cadance's comment that she knew what was going on, or was that all love-sense?)
1696588 tumor? In that case it is very benign and looks totally awesome! Like a growth that looks like something else cool.... Kinda lost my train of thought.
I can't believe this story is still in the feature box. I'll probably be known as a clopfic author forever now.
write it like you wrote this story and it won't matter. you made everything feel natural and didn't write clop for clop's sake. and sorry, I got to ask: any ideas for continuation of this? If not, I await your next fic (while reading your others of course), whatever it may be
"“Fluttershy’s right, though,” Dash risked poking at the topic again. “Kinda makes me wonder if visiting your brother was the real reason you decided to spend your vacation there.” She waggled her eyebrows suggestively, ignoring Rarity’s murderous stare.
“I can honestly say that it was, Rainbow Dash,” Twilight replied, calmly but firmly."
Normal people can already start summing 2 and 2 here
"“Ooooh, of course! Now I get it!” Rainbow announced. “All this time, Twilight's been doing her brother!"" I bursted laughing out loud
1696934 three things to say here: 1st - Please, post the "distractions" chapter 2nd - You probably will, and I will keep readind your clopfics 3rd - Andpeaking of clopfics, I still think you would do a great apple-dash fic
I liked it. A good take, even though I wish it had been longer.
And what of the before? seeing everything during the wedding, Twilight and Shining's first time... how Twilight was a catalyst for bringing them together... when Cadence figured out what the siblings were doing....
Okay, I am not into clop fics, but just like everyone here, when I saw it in the feature box, I decided to give it a look and I have this say.
You sir, had somehow combined clop and love scenes together (trust me there's a difference) and added a hint of hilarity as well in the mixture, not many authors have that kind of talent like you. Also with that ending, I just laughed so hard, that I am sure that my heart stopped for a few seconds, great job on your first time doing something like this, but I suggest that there shouldn't be any sequels to this, because it would ruin this fine piece of work.
I started reading this as a joke because of something I said a couple days before, thinking that it was written as a joke and would be able to just laugh at the quality of writing and concept. Instead I must congratulate you on excellent writing and making this idea plausible and tasteful. Though I fear I will never be able to listen to BBBFF the same way again.
It's seldom that one finds a clopfic that is both tasteful and feels true to the characters - let alone an incest/threesome fic like this one. Well done, sir. Quality writing all around.
1696934 This goes beyond clopfic soft. This is romance. With some sex. At the least you'll be known as a romance author. This will only be a problem if you plan to release a gore fic in the near future.
Can you tell that the "Epilogue" was actually two tiny chapters smooshed together?
Also, there is one chapter, "Distractions", still unpublished, but it has no sex and isn't part of the main plot. I don't know when I'll get around to putting it up; I seriously need a break.
I can't believe this story is still in the feature box. I'll probably be known as a clopfic author forever now.
...Damn it Rain!
1696934 any thoughts on a sequal?
AMAZING
I LOVE IT
YOU SIR
A MUSTAHCE
ALL OF THEM
DAT ENDING
Oh my god, this was so good, and it ended so fast ;(
lame
you have to write more! something else, not even this ship. just more. You're a really good writer
yess but your fic is still good you may not be a complete clop writer like bronystory's but you're a pretty damn good writer. cheers O and loved the ending. did rainbow really figure out who twi was doing or was that just a joke?
Rainbow's outburst at the end made me go...
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That ending...
Well looks like Twilight will be deploying the memory eraser spell... again.
1696934 Now I want an Epilogue to the Epilogue so that I can find out just how the hell the rest of the Mane 6 react... Lol. Great ending!
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Be honest with yourself. This was a respectful and enjoyable take on incestuous relationships. It dealt with the issues with a mature eye, did not linger on the sex or jump into it too easily, and was a refreshing read. I would honestly say I would like more, but I don't see how this fic can continue and keep the gloss it has gained.
This fic has all my love. It isn't even about the clop, although that's fantastic
So... when's the sequel cumming out? (Get it? Cumming? 'Cuz it's a clopfic? Nah, you get it.)
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YES PLEASE
Or at least another chapter with her friends reactions
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Yep that might be a case. Considering that this story has 12.685 times views than all your other fics together.
No worry though. Clop authors are a funny and jolly bunch.
Also what 1697085 said.
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FUCKING SECOND THIS.
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Absolutely fantastic story. Thank you for writing it.
LOL Twilight should so bring her new Mare friend next time!!
*Whispers* Its Rainbow
I like how this is not marked as complete.
calling it now rainbow dash is a wizard
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Naww. Just roll her eyes and say "oh, come on, Rainbow! Shining Armor is a married stallion! Do you *really* think Cadence would be okay with something like that?"
Or, if she was *really* sneaky, say "oh, shucks, you figured it out. Yeah, me and Shining go way back, and now Cadence joins us too!" And then Rainbow would start guffawing and say "good one, Twi!" and they'd all go on with their merry business.
This has the single greatest ending of every fic I ever read. I fell out of my chair laughing. TWICE. Well done, my good man.
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This is TWILIGHT we're talking about. As bad as AJ at lying? Yeeeeaaaaaah, if RD really said that, she is now blushing, stammering and trying to plan four alternate routes of escape to the library (in case teleportation fails), what exactly she needs to pack, how to get Spike with her, and what the train schedule is back to Canterlot ... as well as how to inform Shining and Cadence that the jig is up and don't they have a kingdom to run or something they can flee to?
Yeah, that's probably the case. It's not exactly the sort of reputation that comes out with soap and a stern scrubbing.
You'll just have to live up to it now and slowly buckle under the endless avalanche of comments asking "when are you going to write more incest fics? I demand no less than fifty thousand words of Twilight taking it long and hard from her brother. Please please please instantly gratify me!" Because that's totally what they're going to say.
Wow, Sherlock, figure that one out all your own?
Hmm, Rainbow Dash is clever
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Don't rush it, but whenever you've got it ready, I'd love to read that chapter, cloppy or not. (Does it have to do with Cadance's comment that she knew what was going on, or was that all love-sense?)
Thanks so much for an excellent story.
1696588 tumor? In that case it is very benign and looks totally awesome! Like a growth that looks like something else cool.... Kinda lost my train of thought.
...Not a bad logic leap rainbow...not bad at all...haha. Sad this is ended. Loved it!
On chapter 3. I wanted to see Spike in the Hallway with that "Da Fuk?" face on.
Oh, sweet Celestia, this story was a good read.
dat ending...
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write it like you wrote this story and it won't matter. you made everything feel natural and didn't write clop for clop's sake. and sorry, I got to ask: any ideas for continuation of this? If not, I await your next fic (while reading your others of course), whatever it may be
"“Fluttershy’s right, though,” Dash risked poking at the topic again. “Kinda makes me wonder if visiting your brother was the real reason you decided to spend your vacation there.” She waggled her eyebrows suggestively, ignoring Rarity’s murderous stare.
“I can honestly say that it was, Rainbow Dash,” Twilight replied, calmly but firmly."
Normal people can already start summing 2 and 2 here
"“Ooooh, of course! Now I get it!” Rainbow announced. “All this time, Twilight's been doing her brother!""
I bursted laughing out loud
1696934 three things to say here:
1st - Please, post the "distractions" chapter
2nd - You probably will, and I will keep readind your clopfics
3rd - Andpeaking of clopfics, I still think you would do a great apple-dash fic
Why do I feel the need to kill Rainbow and Rarity?
THOSE TWO ARE SUCH GOOD FRIENDS
I liked it. A good take, even though I wish it had been longer.
And what of the before? seeing everything during the wedding, Twilight and Shining's first time... how Twilight was a catalyst for bringing them together... when Cadence figured out what the siblings were doing....
There's so much you can do with this, still...
“Ooooh, of course! Now I get it!” Rainbow announced. “All this time, Twilight's been doing her brother!"
Face, meet wall. Wall, meet face.
Seriously. I. Can't. Stop. Laughing.
Twilight froze for a moment, before relaxing again.
"And what if I was Dash? What's it to you?"
Okay, I am not into clop fics, but just like everyone here, when I saw it in the feature box, I decided to give it a look and I have this say.
You sir, had somehow combined clop and love scenes together (trust me there's a difference) and added a hint of hilarity as well in the mixture, not many authors have that kind of talent like you. Also with that ending, I just laughed so hard, that I am sure that my heart stopped for a few seconds, great job on your first time doing something like this, but I suggest that there shouldn't be any sequels to this, because it would ruin this fine piece of work.
I really like this story, and it's not even for the clop. I'm starting to wonder if there will be a sequel.
Not sure why but this line was probably my favorite line in this chapter. Just for fun you may have this gif.
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I started reading this as a joke because of something I said a couple days before, thinking that it was written as a joke and would be able to just laugh at the quality of writing and concept. Instead I must congratulate you on excellent writing and making this idea plausible and tasteful. Though I fear I will never be able to listen to BBBFF the same way again.
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>Last chapter titled "Epilogue"
>Story marked incomplete
Bro, what are you trying here?
DAMN IT DASH! WE ALL KNOW YOU'RE SCREWING FLUTTERSHY BUT WE DON'T SAY ANYTHING OUT LOUD!
I bet Rarity bitch-slaps Rainbow after that.
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god damn it, read the last bit and laughed hard enough to wake several people up..fuckin' brilliant line
This. Fic. Need. More. Likes.
I would've bitch slapped RD so hard she'd be forced into an atomic rain boom. STILL! Funny as hell my friend!
Damn, this was good
It's seldom that one finds a clopfic that is both tasteful and feels true to the characters - let alone an incest/threesome fic like this one. Well done, sir. Quality writing all around.
Now to read some of your other stories. . .
Welcome to the clop side of fimfiction authors
1696934 This goes beyond clopfic soft. This is romance. With some sex. At the least you'll be known as a romance author. This will only be a problem if you plan to release a gore fic in the near future.