Two boys are transported to a different world and they even have powers but when Dark Magic grows and mysterious object are coming out of nowhere it's up to a boy who can transform into a speedy animal to save Equestia. Over time he devops a crush but will he ever tell her? will he fail?
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Dude, NEVER put this in your description. NEVER. EVER. It's like walking up to a platoon of Marines, shooting 5 of them in the face, and asking the rest of the dead guys' buddies to not hurt you in any way.
aka, the organic fecal matter will strike the Aperture Rotating Air-Circulation Device.
Now, I've gone through a few too many orbital drops today, so I'm gonna give you the short and not-so-sweet version.
This is stereotyped beyond belief. Humans in Equestria, sent through dark magic, both have OP magical abilities, and they fall in love with the ponies almost instantly.
Blocks of unformatted text, incorrect capitalization, total lack of grammar, more excuses INSIDE THE STORY ITSELF. What the flying fuck. REALLY? YOU'RE GOING TO MAKE EXCUSES FOR THESE INSIDE THE DAMNED STORY? Wow, that last one really hit me hard. Gonna need some biofoam on that.
At this point, I'm ready to call in some UNSC arial assets to carpet-bomb the whole thing.
So, you randomly jump ahead in time, with no explanation whatsoever, the character has a ridiculous name (guess which one). Now, what? THey've turned into Sonic and his buddy? Can we have an explanation other than "hurr durr, its magic". Only Pinkie gets to pull that shit. What the hell is a "classic Sonic"? Is he wearing a monocle and a top hat or something?
And the rest of the story? I'm sorry, but my position is getting overrun here. I need to bug out, now.
"All Under Heaven, this is Lt. Anderson. The flaws are outnumbering my squad, we need immediate evac!"
"Roger that, lieutenant. Echo-479 is inbound, ETA two minutes."
"We're not gonna last one minute! Is there any orbital support available?"
" We have the frigates Grafton, Belfast, and Meriwether Lewis on station. "
"Fire now!"
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Thanks for the assist.
-Winter Storm
TWE's Resident ASST
Author Support Shock Trooper
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*reads description*
*reads 1670604's comment*
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1670937 "Hold up, we have another trooper that needs pickup!"
*Pelican dropship lands*
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"Get on board, now!"
Hey man STOP!!! its bad enough there r trolls an rants from others who hate the show but here if u have nothing to say nice don't say anything just go to another Story>>1670604
big wall of text, needs spacing.
just because you can write a small sentence out doesn't mean you should press enter to skip to make another line. that's just acting as filler, add some more stuff to the single sentence, or what I assumed it was supposed to be.
Alright, same problem as before. Grammar, punctuation, spelling errors, spacing and all that good stuff. I would advise you get a proofreader before this ends up in the Trainwreck Group. Just saying.
You need an editor. I vlounteer my services