Applejack never left Aunt and Uncle Orange in Canterlot, and became a highly refined mare with a taste for the wild when she isn't attending one of many, many dinner parties. Between such, she has a penpal, a mare named 'Rainbow Dash'. Rainbow Dash sent her some tickets to the Wonderbolts' show in town, in the best seat in the house. When she attends, she's amazed to see Rainbow Dash is the star. They meet for dinner, and things accelerate from there until her aunt and uncle find out. The thought of a highly refined mare with "a show-offish ruffian" is simply outlandish to them. Oh, and the fact that their daughter is a fillyfooler could get her on the streets. Just sayin'.
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Chapters (1)
By any chance you have read "Lost Apples"? A very close in thought work, but takes it in a different spin.
Speed of light? A bit silly
But yay, you expanded on this! Can't wait to see what else you have planned for it :)
edit: it could use a tad more description, when Dash breaks the speed of light. It seems like she does it, then she's suddenly accosted by the unicorn, and we're told what happen. Could use more of Dash's reaction, her thoughts to what's happening, and some directional input. As in, if she's going down, why isn't she a crater in the ground? Or any direction, she'd be really far away at that speed XD
(sorry for attempting to poke holes in this!)
A few things:
First, its Manehattan, not Canterlot, where Applejack's aunt and uncle are. (also, shortly before the memory, you referred to AJ's uncle as her father. might want to fix.)
Second, I think this story should've started at an earlier point, perhaps when Applejack writes RD for the first time. You thrust us right into it, which is alright, but it would mean more to the reader if they got to experience the love between them grow and gain more symptahy for Applejack as they observe her living conditions. You could use this time to really up the story development, and then you'd REALLY have a yarn to spin. start the story waayy before the show, at the very least.
Third, SWEET CELESTIA, SPEED. You need to slow down in your writing, give the readers time to breathe. It adds a bit more drama and is better writing-wise. It also gives the reader time to really get into the story, instead of whizzing by them faster than they can comprehend.
Overall, 4.5/5 concept
but 3/5 execution. I'd recommend getting a pre-reader or an editor, because while this story is flawed, it could turn out ridiculously well. I'll give it a track, because I AM very interested to see where this goes, but I'm not going to give it any sort of vote yet. Keep at it, bucko!
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This. Admittedly, the first half is for a game where one writes 500 words for a prompt, so it was a quick expansion on that, but the idea and concept is sound, just needs somewhat more work!
Thank you everypony! Like most of my stories, I end up rewriting the first chapter a lot. Hopefully by the end of today, this will be rewritten to a better standpoint. I like your idea of starting with the first letters, since I tend not to start at the beginning at all.
THE YELLOW! IT BURNSSSSSSSSSSSSSS
You have no idea how hard it was to quote that... The writing was okay but the colors... IT TOOK TO LONG
Yes! It has begun!
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I was waiting for someone to say something.
1663975 W-w-what happened to the other chapter...
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I rewrote it
So... Now my other comment looks like a random thing... Lovely...
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Nah...
not much xD
YEESSSS!!!!! I've been waiting for someone to approach an Appledash from this angle.
God speed in your writing.
Ummm... Just so ya know, Aunt and Uncle Orange live in Manehatten, not Canterlot
... But other than that, pretty good!
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I knew they lived somewhere fancy
Finally got around to reading this and now I want more.
That damn uncle Orange
Interesting... Very interesting...
I'm apparently getting to this post-rewrite, and while this chapter has rough spots and is quite short, I can see a whole world of potential in it. Angst, pathos, empathy—you have the building blocks of a solid emotional piece.
If you still want/need help putting it together, I may just be available for editing/prereading. Please feel free to check out my work to see if you think I can help you out, and my PM box is always open.
write moar
I'd love to see Apllejack slowly but surely telling Dash what her Uncle did/does and Dash encouraging her to get out.
Hey! And *gasp!*
You changed it! If you need any help (mostly for editing) let me know 
Applejack wouldn't mind if i don't know KILL HER FREAKIN UNCLE! ugh i hated that guy even if he had a short scene in the show he still gave off that i am a rich douchebag vibe.Rainbow save Applejack and give uncle orange what he deserves.
i havent read it yet so i probally shouldnt say anything but in the description thing it says aunt and uncle orange then u call applejack their daughter so which is it?
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that'll be explained later, it's actually a fun story.
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now im have got to read.
so interested.
Are you still working on this?
Liked where the story was going, hope it gets continued