"Maybe she even appreciated it," Fluttershy said, settling back into her seat. "I think Celestia does have a big sense of humor, if that's alright with you."
Fluttershy doesn't tend to use "if that's alright with you" as a verbal tic; she only says it when she's actually asking something or wanting someone to do something. In this case it doesn't really make sense.
Moonshine huh? do you made that up or took it from the fic Moonshine anyways that couldnt be moonshine, moonshine can get drunk the princesses in ten gasses or so
Well this was a ride, indeed. I should go drink some water. Or maybe some moonshine. My stomach hurts from all the laughter. Scratch that, I'm reading another chapter!
3298166 Er. I think in both this case and the use you're thinking of, it's short for "it ain't." (Apropos of nothing, I've heard "ain't" is corrupted from "am not." So... whatever.)
I stopped reading somewhere in the middle of the first chapter. Too damn wordy.
Rarity fucking talked too much, Twilight also took up a lot of air time, and Fluttershy blushed for absolutely no reason. I'm sorry if a negative comment was said on such a highly rated story (And I congratulate you for doing so), but this story, in my opinion, was too talky and never built up into anything.
I'm sorry if I missed something with the whole Fluttershy blushing thing, but I didn't find any thing good with this story judging from the dialogue in the first chapter. However I still up-voted your story because I like seeing Pinkie being involved with sex. Good day to you.
4511604 Thanks for giving it a try, and for speaking up. Sorry it wasn't to your tastes. It's about those conversations — it's primarily a story about exploring their characters. Things start getting out of control mid-Chapter 2 and the craziness just escalates from there, but if you didn't get anything out of Chapter 1's discussions, it's going to be awfully dull in between the fight scenes.
Fluttershy's blushing sets up one of the big payoffs in chapter 5.
I just recommended this to a friend. Every time I do that, I end up rereading bits of it. Hmm.. It's so heavily focused on the dialogue. With a little tweaking, this could be a really cool radio play! Hmm...
I laughed many times, but this absolutely took the cake:
Dewy Grass Decimal System
Also, this is one of the best inclusions of Pinkie in a mane six group setting I've seen - she's obviously Pinkie, and talking just as much as the rest, but she's not being wacky and dominating the whole scene with silly antics.
*Grins* Nice cliffhanger there. I was hoping you were going to do something big with Aj's fidgeting.
Pet names!
Well I'm interested. DON'T DISAPPOINT ME
I dunno Twi, that sounds like 'taking it well' to me.
"Equestria to Twilight," Dash said. "We've kissed, like, in front of you."
"We're dating!" Pinkie added.
"Sorta dating."
"Sorta dating!"
Classic Pinkie Pie.
Fluttershy doesn't tend to use "if that's alright with you" as a verbal tic; she only says it when she's actually asking something or wanting someone to do something. In this case it doesn't really make sense.
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Twilight … may not be an objective source of information here.
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Glad you liked it! This is an example of one of the great exchanges that was added during the editing process.
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Thanks for the feedback. Fixed.
Does it irritate nopony else that this gives absolutely no indication as to whom Rainbow Dash is speaking to?
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I appreciate the feedback. I had hoped it was clear enough from context:
"I am tryin' to be tolerant," Applejack shouted, "but you will not use that word in my presence."
Yessss
Only a chapter in, totally favoriting this though.
Twilight Sparkle - the mare prepared for everything
Fluttershy made me d'aww Even when she says "fuck" it's adorable.
Scrolls From Last Night?
Moonshine huh?
do you made that up or took it from the fic Moonshine anyways that couldnt be moonshine, moonshine can get drunk the princesses in ten gasses or so
Well this was a ride, indeed. I should go drink some water. Or maybe some moonshine. My stomach hurts from all the laughter.
Scratch that, I'm reading another chapter!
"Et tú, Twilight?" was that Julius Caesar reference intetional to show a since of betral? If so well played sir
3298166 Er. I think in both this case and the use you're thinking of, it's short for "it ain't." (Apropos of nothing, I've heard "ain't" is corrupted from "am not." So... whatever.)
I stopped reading somewhere in the middle of the first chapter. Too damn wordy.
Rarity fucking talked too much, Twilight also took up a lot of air time, and Fluttershy blushed for absolutely no reason. I'm sorry if a negative comment was said on such a highly rated story (And I congratulate you for doing so), but this story, in my opinion, was too talky and never built up into anything.
I'm sorry if I missed something with the whole Fluttershy blushing thing, but I didn't find any thing good with this story judging from the dialogue in the first chapter. However I still up-voted your story because I like seeing Pinkie being involved with sex. Good day to you.
4511604
Thanks for giving it a try, and for speaking up. Sorry it wasn't to your tastes. It's about those conversations — it's primarily a story about exploring their characters. Things start getting out of control mid-Chapter 2 and the craziness just escalates from there, but if you didn't get anything out of Chapter 1's discussions, it's going to be awfully dull in between the fight scenes.
Fluttershy's blushing sets up one of the big payoffs in chapter 5.
I just recommended this to a friend. Every time I do that, I end up rereading bits of it. Hmm.. It's so heavily focused on the dialogue. With a little tweaking, this could be a really cool radio play! Hmm...
Oh Applejack just shut the buck up...
I laughed many times, but this absolutely took the cake:
Also, this is one of the best inclusions of Pinkie in a mane six group setting I've seen - she's obviously Pinkie, and talking just as much as the rest, but she's not being wacky and dominating the whole scene with silly antics.
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