Sometimes unexpected change can be hard to cope with.
Especially if it's on a personal level.
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Just to hold my position ill edit it later
Edit: Hmmm. I feel that there is a lot more potential as a story than just this one chapter, but It can stand on its own fairly easy. Good story man.
EDIT2: Also,
Wouldn't that sound better as "She was so furious, that she started fighting you." ? The way it is phrased just seems... strange.
The romance and sad tags look nice together don't they?
It would be cool if this was continued.
…A bit odd, but all the same interesting.
only one chapter awwwww
Huh. That was random.
Something seems extremly wrong with this story, even though i can't point my hoof at it... Maybe it's bacause the whole thing seems kind of ultra-rushed...
So random... and only ONE chapter
uh. why only htis chapter for 1? and for 2. I don't see chrysallis going: hmm, I can't kick her ass fairly. I KNOW! i'll kill myself and make her the queen of my entire species! that'll show 'er!
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It's because Vival is a lying jerk, and is mind-controlling Fluttershy into remembering things that didn't happen. He also probably did something horrible to Big Mac.
I likey! Why don't you make morey?
I do like it, but it would be better as a series.
Oh hi again
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Hi.
Interesting how you compressed what would probably be an 8k fic (at the least) to 1.5k words. It comes at the cost of a lot of exposition, though. And far too rushed for the romance to not just feel like it’s fleeting.
But... why?
Didn't Chrysalis try to stop Fluttershy?
This way she even paved Fluttershy's path.
Also, I don't get the tags.
"Sad", maybe. But why "Romance"?
Was it like 2216218 said?