11. Convergence
Chapter 11 – Convergence
Derpy left the post office with renewed vigor, ready to tackle the day and begin her weekend, and even more excited to visit Twilight later that evening. Today she intended to completely finish her rounds before stopping over; usually when she went over to the library, it was for short calls or for talks when she was feeling a bit low for the day. Last night, though, she had such a moving time with Twilight that she wanted to make sure they had as much time as possible to spend together.
She knew that Twilight would no longer be looking for spells to fix her eyesight, but truthfully that was her furthest concern at the moment. She hummed happily, depositing envelopes in mailboxes as she went, reflecting on what she had come to realize Twilight meant to her.
She had been very confused at first. To be given the opportunity to talk with somepony openly was a new experience for her, and it had felt good to know that somewhere out there was somepony who legitimately cared about her. Twilight’s was not a simple care for wellbeing, but a deep care for her emotions and a desire to understand how she felt. She had been given the reassurance she had needed, and in the end gained what she was searching for most – a true friend.
The afternoon flitted by. Derpy filled mailboxes and made deliveries as though she was on autopilot; her entire mind was filled with thoughts and affections for Twilight, her heart lighter than it had ever been before. The mailpony gave cheerful greetings to everypony she met on her route, and received many pleasantries in return. By mid-afternoon she had finished her last delivery and was positively glowing with happiness.
With her mailbags empty, she flew home to return the bags and her hat to their normal resting places before turning back and heading toward the giant tree marking Ponyville’s library. It was all she could do to keep herself from galloping there like a schoolfilly, but she decided that showing up on Twilight’s doorstep as a sweaty gasping mess wouldn’t be the most attractive of sights.
She drew closer to the building, turned the corner, and came to an abrupt halt. Two mares were directly in front of her, and they seemed as startled as she had been. Her mind raced as they drew closer, trying to put together what it was that they wanted to say. They were definitely coming over to talk, but neither Applejack nor Rainbow Dash seemed excessively happy to see her.
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Applejack and Rainbow Dash were as equally surprised at the additional company as Derpy, but it only took them an instant to quietly agree that this was a good time to talk to the gray pegasus who had become their friend’s mare of affection.
“Hey, Derpy.” Rainbow Dash spoke first, cementing the fact that they were, in fact, intent on stopping to talk to her. Her voice was not hostile, but it was far from friendly as well.
“Uh, hi, Rainbow Dash. Hi, Applejack,” She timidly responded, not exactly sure what, if anything, she should say.
Applejack spoke next, and it seemed to confirm that the conversation was meant to be one-sided. “Ah’m guessin’ yer headed over ta Twilight’s place for a bit.” Her tone was somewhat flat, hinting that she was not very happy about that idea.
Derpy could only nod; she could not think of anything to say to either pony. She had never exactly been on friendly terms with Applejack, and Rainbow Dash intimidated her greatly. They had never gotten along as fillies, and Dash was one of the most aggressive fillies that had poked fun of her so long ago. Their relationship had mellowed to indifference over the years, but after she had given Dash that concussion during the town hall incident, it was obvious that Dash still held a fair amount of animosity toward her.
“We know that Twi’s got a bit friendly with ya for a while now,” Applejack continued. “She seems ta be a might confident that yer a fine pony ta pal ‘round with.”
Derpy lightly blushed at this; her heart leapt to know that Twilight was comfortable enough to talk with her friends about her deepening friendship with the pegasus. However, her elation was kept in tight check by the mares currently eyeing her carefully.
Rainbow Dash took the chance to speak up. “Twi may like you enough, but I still have a feeling you’re gonna be giving her nothing but problems.” Dash rubbed her head absentmindedly as she spoke, rubbing a phantom pain where a pillar had once crashed down on her head.
The words and gesture gave Derpy a sinking feeling in the pit of her stomach.
“Outta respect for Twi, we’re not gonna argue with her about it,” Rainbow Dash narrowed her eyes and pushed herself forward, almost muzzle to muzzle with Derpy. “But you’d better be extra careful around her, Derpy. We know enough of your track record to expect some disaster or another to come sooner or later, and you’d better be sure that when it does, Twi doesn’t get caught in it.”
“Dash’s right on, Derpy.” Applejack wasn’t pressing into her face like Rainbow Dash was, but regardless, she stared at Derpy with a piercing gaze that exuded mistrust. “Twi can take care a’ herself, but ‘round you Ah can’t help but think she’s in danger a’ somethin’.”
She took a few steps forward and poked a hoof in Derpy’s chest. “Ya best be careful. If ya slip up and make trouble for Twi, Dash’n Ah will be on yer flank ta fix it an’ fix it fast.”
Derpy gulped. She knew they weren’t threatening her safety, but their discomfort with having her around their friend was obvious. Of course they’d be overly cautious; she had a reputation for destroying property and causing harm to ponies within her vicinity. The incident where she dropped the entire contents of a moving cart directly on Twilight’s head forced itself to the front of her memory and made her gut clench and twist.
Derpy looked from Rainbow Dash to Applejack and nodded solemnly. She spoke, but not with a defensive retort or an emotional outburst, like Applejack and Rainbow Dash had expected. Rather, her response was serious and heartfelt.
“I know what you both mean. I think I’m getting better with my coordination and concentration lately, and it’s all thanks to Twilight. I know I haven’t done anything to give you any reason to trust me; it’s understandable that you’d think I’d hurt Twilight somehow. Please believe me though,” she paused, trying to find the right words, “if I did anything to harm Twilight I don’t know how I could stand myself, either.”
Her eyes moistened, not from tears, but from genuine concern for only the unicorn. “Twilight is the first and only friend I’ve ever had. I’ll do everything I possibly can to not let you down.” She lowered her head in resignation, hoping that they would at least give her a chance.
Applejack and Rainbow Dash exchanged a glance; they had not planned for Derpy to take what they had said to heart. Even more surprising was that she had not protested their accusations at all – she had shown concern only for Twilight. Rainbow Dash looked back to Derpy with a puzzled expression, not quite sure what to make of the agreement Derpy had given them.
Applejack’s appearance softened a bit. They had only wanted to give Derpy a fair warning to be cautious, but their warning hadn’t been seen as that. It had been perceived as a reminder to the pegasus of what could happen if she wasn’t careful.
“Alright, Sugarcube. Twilight trusts ya, and Ah can see ya take that trust seriously. We ain’t gonna stop ya,” she shot a look to Rainbow Dash, who seemed completely lost by now, “an’ seein’ ya put Twi first makes me feel a might better about ya stayin’ ‘round for a bit.”
Dash caught on to what Applejack was talking about, and staring straight into the mailpony’s eyes reluctantly added a blunt, “Yeah, okay.” She silently continued her stare for several long moments, not breaking eye contact as she and Applejack began turning to leave. “I’m still keeping my eye on you though.”
Derpy nodded back gravely. “I’ll be watching myself, too,” she murmured to herself.
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Twilight answered the knock at her door readily; she had been looking forward to seeing Derpy all day long, in addition to having news about the vision spell. She quickly noticed the crestfallen look adorning the pegasus, and her excitement gave way to worry.
“Derpy, is everything alright?” Twilight looked to her friend, sincere concern evident in her voice.
The pegasus looked up. She had been pondering the conversation that she had just had with Applejack and Rainbow Dash, and was feeling genuinely unnerved by the consequences her involvement with Twilight could have. However, looking up into the face of the lavender mare, all her fears evaporated immediately. She wasn’t sure how, but even in Twilight’s most worried states, she still gave Derpy a feeling of peace and happiness.
Derpy gave a smile. “Yeah, everything is alright.”
Twilight’s worries seemed to float away now that she knew Derpy was not troubled or depressed, and she wasted no time in getting to the news she had gathered.
“Derpy, I found a spell that just might work for your eyes.” She hesitated; Derpy had perked up instantly at that announcement and she couldn’t leave her without the full truth. “There’s a catch, though,” she continued. Derpy sagged a little at that, but retained a hopeful demeanor.
“The spell I found was buried deep away in the Canterlot Archives, and it hasn’t been used in ages due to the risks it has.” Twilight let that fact out slowly – she was hesitant to bring it up and cause Derpy more worries, but she had to know.
“What kind of risks?” Derpy cocked her head to one side, giving an inquiring look.
Twilight sighed. “The spell doesn’t look like it would be too difficult, but the scroll had a note scrawled on the side that said it could cause significant damage if done incorrectly.”
Sensing the next question coming from the pegasus, she hurried along a quick addition to her statement. “It doesn’t say what kind of damage. All it says is that the worse the mistake, the worse the damage caused.”
Derpy smiled slightly. “Well, I really don’t think I have anything to worry about with that. You don’t make mistakes.”
Twilight managed a weak smile of her own, but shook her head. “It’s not that simple though. The scroll is badly smeared, so I would have to copy it over, making sure I have it all correct. If I miss something, it could go horribly wrong. Plus, the spell is only temporary at first. It needs to be repeated every so often, kind of like reinforcing the magic until the effect is permanent. That means I would have to cast the spell so often that a mistake could be inevitable.”
This fact gave Derpy pause; she definitely trusted Twilight’s abilities, but multiple chances at unknown damage from a single mistake did make the choice much more difficult. She looked at Twilight, who was clearly uncomfortable with the whole ordeal, and felt an upwelling of guilt for putting such pressure on her friend. She walked over to the unicorn slowly, until she was right next to Twilight.
The purple mare was running her hoof across the floor, frustrated with herself at the disappointment she must have caused for the pegasus. Then she felt a hoof on her shoulder, firmly tugging her closer. Derpy wrapped her in her forehooves, trying to comfort the only pony in Equestria to have ever shown her consideration, especially of this magnitude.
Twilight returned the embrace, tears trickling down her cheeks reminding her of her failure to find an acceptable solution. Derpy nuzzled her cheek, feeling the tears soaking into her mane.
“Twilight, I know it’s not a perfect solution. I’ll have to give it some serious thought before I can decide if it’s something I want to go through with or not.”
Holding the unicorn, Derpy’s heart sped up and her face flushed. If there had been any doubt in her mind before as to her feelings for Twilight, they were now long gone. Spending so much time with her had convinced Derpy that there was one pony she wanted to stay beside, and that pony was in her embrace, sure that she had failed at meeting the pegasus’ request. Derpy, however, felt a flame of emotion ignite in her chest; Twilight had become her reason for existing, and whatever problems she had with her eyes were now only a distant consideration.
Placing a hoof under the unicorn’s mouth, she gently pulled the mare’s face in line with her own. Twilight noticed they were muzzle to muzzle, and she could feel Derpy’s breath playing across her lips. She looked upward to find herself locked in a gaze with Derpy and felt her face flushing with heat.
“To be honest, Twilight, my vision is the last thing I’m thinking about right now.”
She leaned forward slightly, her eyelids falling shut, and placed a delicate kiss on the unicorn’s lips.
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Derpy had felt uncertain about how Twilight would react to the abrupt display of affection, and her heart began to race faster as her wings slowly spread. She forced her wings back down for the moment, and questioned herself at how much she had just escalated the relationship. Her feelings for Twilight had undeniably blossomed into genuine love – the two ponies seemed to share so much in common – but there was no guarantee that Twilight might feel the same affections.
Her uncertainty vanished as she felt pressure pushing back against her own muzzle. She parted her lips slightly, allowing her tongue to trace the outline of Twilight’s mouth, tasting an intriguing mixture of orange and almond. She was pleasantly startled when another tongue cautiously emerged to mingle with her own.
She had fallen in love with Twilight, and even though she had been unsure of what the unicorn though of her, she had unabashedly bared her feelings with a calm reassurance that it was meant to be that way. Apparently she’s not the only one of us that can read the other’s mind, she reflected with an inner smirk. The pair remained entwined for only a short time before slowly pulling apart, a thin strand of saliva connecting their two tongues which were still unwilling to separate from their partners.
A furious crimson blush crept up both of their faces as each pony realized what that moment had meant. Each sensed a deep affection for the other, and it took no words to express it; they had just seemed to know how the other felt and responded accordingly.
Derpy inhaled sharply at the implication of what had just happened struck her. Her wings had extended again in excitement, and she looked toward Twilight with wonder, attempting to put together the words to confirm what her mind was telling her. There really was no need.
Twilight stared back at her, mouth partly open, and panting slightly. She looked at Derpy caringly as she reminded the pegasus of their conversation from what now seemed like an eternity ago. “I told you that I thought you were beautiful… I guess I just didn’t realize how much more there was to say.” She paused tentatively.
“I know it may be a bit strange to hear, but I guess we have the same thing on our minds.” Twilight bit her lip cautiously as she considered where her heart was leading her. Taking a deep breath and throwing all hesitation to the wind, she quickly made her admission before her mind decided to stifle the emotions now coursing through her.
“I love you, Derpy.”
She hadn’t been sure exactly how the pegasus would respond to her confession; shock, confusion, hesitation, and fear were all very real possibilities. Her answer came with a tackle of gray as the mare launched herself forward and wrapped Twilight in a tight embrace. She could feel tears flowing down Derpy’s face as she whispered, “I love you, too. Dear Celestia, I love you so much.”
They could at last release the emotion that they had neglected. They finally had somepony to love them back.
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1704518 Thanks for the feedback, to be honest I wasn't sure how this chapter would be received. I've never written anything remotely to cloppish and didn't want it to feel rushed, so I'm hoping that's what I was able to convey.
And then Spike walked into the room, snifed a couple of times and said "Twilight? That smell is back.... Ackkkk! Unsee! Unsee! Hang a sock on a doorknob or something! I'm sleeping in the basement. YOU clean it up this time!"
only thing I don't like about this is that you portray a brand new couple as having sex immediately. and that's mostly from exasperation from most other clop writers doing as much. to be fair, though . . . this is some pretty damn adorable cloppage.
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That was beautiful!
1705268 My apologies on the sudden elevation in the relationship; I saw the problem from the start but the only idea I got was either string it out over the course of years, or have them form a close emotional bond. As the storyline doesn't take years I went with the latter. Hopefully when all is finished the timing and placement will make more sense; but for now, yep, super speedy escalation.
This is a great story so far. Favorite couple
! Can't wait for more.
I do take solace in how understanding Dash and AJ were for Derpy, you've definitely ,ade an emotional bond between the reader and Derpy's bully problems, etcetera. I must say I am very intrigued to how well your story telling goes, I will be watching this closely, and considerably taking mental notes on how well it is displayed, I have not noticed a single grammatical error (and I notice a lot of them in Shipping fics)! Thank you for creating a lucious storyline, something that reminded Derpy of me when I was younger, and still witness today (societal problems etc).
1705353>>1728847>>1732724 Thanks very much for the kind comments!
1732724 I am very glad I have been able to make it possible for readers to relate to the story and the character relationships. That's what I was striving for and what made me change my mind from making this a short one-shot to a full-blown story; I couldn't leave the idea I had short without sacrificing emotion or content.
I can't take credit for the grammatical content, that honor goes to slip_stitch, who has been kind enough to tolerate both proofreading my story and putting up with me for years IRL.
Regardless, I am happy to hear that I have succeeded in describing the characters in a way that allows readers to become emotionally invested in them.
This was very well. Nice uh "plot" to it. Haha
Wunderbar, wirklich wunderbar. Schön und leidenschaftlich!
*translation* Wonderful, truly wonderful. Beautiful and passionate!
I'm glad I took so much time to learn German. Really fun language too.
Althought I hate to say it, I must wait until later to read chapter nine, for I must be getting a little bit of rest before I have to go to my Culinary Exams and then work. I will continue giving you feedback though.
... Okay, seriously? I won't say I HATE you, but you now suck. I mean, what, you couldn't put ANY warning that THIS chapter had clop in it? You couldn't add (Mature) or some sort of paragraph break outside the norm (Like ~~~ or .o. , etc.) to let us know that clop was coming? I know it's in the overall description, but really, most other authors who have a REAL story, with SOME clop here and there have SOME sort of warning for what chapters have it. I know not all authors are the same, but really, you need some kind of warning for those of us who are here for the story, and not the clop.
(Sorry if I sound harsh, but that's how strongly I feel about it.)
Horses don't have collarbones.
Not gonna lie the escalation of feeling there was a bit too sudden for my tastes. Normally a story that jumps from 'I just recently met you' to I love you' that fast turns me away.
However there's a lot of positive aspects here that I feel ok sticking with it. All characters are written very well, you have personalities and both expected and unexpected reactions described very well. Development is good, aside from what I stated earlier. For future ships I'd recomend analyzing the character's relationships to one another before jumping to romance. If, for example, they have known one another and been friends for a decent period of time then jumping into a 'love' relationship is feasible.
Alright theres my hoity-toity two cents worth of bullshit, on to the next chapter!
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Maybe it's been changed in the past two weeks but the "Mature" and "Sex" tags on the story and the discription that explicitly staes that there will be clop in the story Kinda sounds like a warning to me. I get that you may not like to read clop but in many romantic story where love making is part of the plot or exposition is laced into the more steamy scenes it's impossible to just tear them out of the story. In my oppinion, paragraph breaks and "WARNING CLOP" signs only serve to fragment and detract from the immersion of the reader and writing a sex scene (or any scene for that matter) so it can be skipped without losing anything in the story has no business being written in the fist place.
Well another good clopfic or clop chapter, actually seems more like an erotic story than a clopfic even though the romance is a little rushed but nonetheless well done. Looking foward to reading the rest of your chapters
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Who needs learning a language when you have Google translate?
Good chapter but not being an ass but this did not have as you put it Heavy Clop.
There are some FanFic's that are pretty scary with the clop area *stutters* Like that ONE story
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Nice chapter by far.
Sweet! Clop! (And i'm just at the title, haha!) Anyway, onto the meat of the story!
Actually I'll stay on the title: Convergence Not sure if thats best title but I'll come back to it after I actually READ the chapter xD
Hm, I'm wondering how long it'll take Derpy to consider moving to Ponyville. And now I'm wondering why I'm even thinking about that since its more likely by the time she comes to that conclusion she'll already have spare mailbags at the Library and a jar of PreenSheen in Twilight's bathroom xD
After the first paragraph I find myself asking: How much time has the story covered thus far? To my mind, its only been three or four days, yet the way
is worded makes me imagine at least two weeks. It could be very well that it was mentioned and I somehow missed it, but I feel the need to point that out.
I quite enjoy the seperate dynamics displayed between how Derpy and Twilight transition into love. Derpy is being pulled to Twilight in a more emotional way and Twilight is feeling more physical. I don't mean to imply that Twilight is in it for a few nights of erotic moaning, I just mean that her descent into the madness that is love is fueled by passionate wet dreams and physical fantasy while Derpy is swimming in a sea of self discovery and admiration for the first pony to truly care about her.
Hmm, that explanation really didn't sound any better than the initial implication, did it?
I read that just after I got done typing the previous paragraph and I couldn't stop myself from snorting my grapejuice.
Oooooh! Bum bum bum! Applejack and RD confronting Derpy! I am forcing myself to 'pause' at the asterisk break for a few seconds to let that tension build up- by the way this would have been a Rainbow-Dash-Level-Of-AWESOME cliffhanger to end a chapter on- and I type this up while the tension mounts in my chest. I'm hoping for something awkward and uncomfortable. I don't know why I want Derpy to be stressed pre-clop (I remember there will be clop in this chapter from the title, muahaha) and suddenly 'Convergence' becomes a better chapter title.
And I am content =)
Oooh...Dash and Applejack are getting mighty confrontational. Now I'm starting to dislike their attitudes. I suppose they've yet to see a sad Derpy cry and they only know her story via Twilight's half-hour retelling. I'm willing to give them the benefit-of-the-doubt though: thier hearts are in the right place since they really care about Twilight. I know its more about their friend than about Derpy that they're doing this; you pulled this off well in your writing.
And now I'm crying from Derpy's "taking what they said to heart" and the subsequent confusion of Rainbow Dash and Applejack. Damn, you are GOOD at making me emote with your writing.
Derpy arrives at the Library "crestfallen". I am glad about this; bringing a pony up from a down state is always more romantic than clopping about in bed with everything all happy-happy-joy-joy, not that all sex must be precluded by sadness, mind you. But for a first time it adds a little bitter to make the sweet that much sweeter.
I am not surprised and yet am still quite happy with Derpy's understanding of the spell's danger's and I feel- though it is not explicitly stated, it seems to be a written-in undertone- that she's going to say 'no' simply because she's afraid that if Twilight messes up, Twilight will be the one to truly carry the burden, not Derpy. Derpy would probably have no issues suddenly going blind; not compared to what it would do to her love.
Oh yay the clop's starting!
They fall on the couch and Twilight locks the door. My first thought? Poor Spike. I will be quite happy if that gets addressed later =)
I am more than happy with the clop scene. Slow, gradual, lots of foreplay and buildup, every action having a physical and physiological reaction. I'm also happy you didn't subscribe to the multiple orgasm approach to clop; something that I am guilty of myself.
Spike was not brought back up in this chapter, but the ending was as it should be. I shall have to wait until morning (for I, too, must sleep) to read chapter 9. But I must tell you, i look forward to it.
Clarify how long the story has been, because in the same chapter you seemed to imply at least a week, if not longer, but also that it has been a few days.
...... O_O Did I just enjoy a.... I-... I need to rethink some things....
I'm not against clop, or cloppers, or same sex interaction, or straight interaction, or any interaction really. Rather, I just... don't get into any of it.
This... This shakes me to my very core at how enjoyable the storytelling is, the character development. Your use of imagery and compelling wording, especially in the first chapters introduction, is excellent, and the same applies to the portrayal of intimacy in this chapter.
I hope you don't think I'm shocked by your portrayal of this, because I'm not. I'm just shocked at my own reaction to it. I didn't think I was capable of such feelings anymore.
Saliva strings...ew >_<
Not a fan of all the fluid-related adjectives being thrown around. But I also found the sex scene welcome in it's display of the two's passion and lust for each other. I had already been convinced that they were in love with each other, starting with this chapter, well before for the sex. (despite my objections that the word 'love' had been brought up way too early. It was believable at this point, and very clear) So it was nice to have displays of both their emotional feelings for each other, as well as their physical desires for one another.
Despite my disgust with the graphic, excessive description of fluids, I'm glad I did not skip the sex scene. Because of what most stories are like under the clop category, I'm not going to refer to this part of the story as clop.
Problem I have with the story is that we don't know how much time passes until we get to the start of this chapter. Reading previous chapters give the impression of only 3-4 days, but even if it is two weeks, it escalates to clop far too quickly. It reduces the potential development and dynamics of the characters involved. Twilight progresses from an encourager and friend to an object of lust. Twilight progresses from a introverted librarian to a hormone-driven mare. It reduces the care and affection Twilight shows Derpy earlier, and that Twilight would progress from the introverted librarian to a hormone-driven mare in the span of 3-4 days, or even a couple of weeks really detracts from the initial relationship building of the earlier chapters.
Derpy is more probable, though if she really does agree to the quick escalation to clop, it would more likely be to please Twilight and keep her happy and interested in her, so she doesn't loose her only friend. The self-confidence/ self-image issues add significant depths to her character. I can see two directions that the character can progress. 1) She becomes obsessively attached to Twilight, becoming an emotional dependent relying solely upon Twilight for her social interactions and psychological well-being. 2) Twilight encourages her and after positive self-image reinforcement either encourages her to make friends with the other Element Bearers, or reach out to background ponies with or without Twilight's assistance and met with varying levels of success or failure, and the affirmation/ positive reinforcement sessions after each attempt.
Rainbow Dash's and Applejack's interaction with Twilight kinda feels OOC here, honestly. They as Twilight's friends should have kept their suspicions of clop under wraps and simply asked what Twilight felt/ feels about Derpy. Okay, maybe it works with Rainbow Dash, but definitely not Applejack.
2333206 From what I recall, Remedy originally intended this story to be a lot shorter and more porny than it actually turned out to be.
2290513 Dude... Fuckin's messy.
facehoof of the day
im still pissed that you have forsaken the better of two stories for the path of a romantic one.
but in terms of romance stories, this one is excellent.
now, ive got nothin against romance. but you didnt set this up like a romance, you set it up like a cohesive, character driven narrative about derpeys exploration into friendship in a world where shhe had almost no friends and where she struggled against her lack of confidence and poor eyesight, among other things. you could have made this awesome, but in a differrent direction--a direction which would have had more potential than the direction you chose: romance. and it doesnt have the same value as the other direction in which you could have grown this story.
also, im just praying that derpy doesnt ever need romantic advice. she has no one but her boss from whom she can recieve it.
2333206 agreed.
2597428 mate, the tags were right there. Romance is big and purple. Can't miss it.
Also, you're contradicting yourself. Obviously you DO have a problem with romance since you indicate it as an unabashedly inferior choice of genre.
I love the slow building up from becoming friends to the kiss.
The hell is up with everyone saying there's clop in this chapter!? Did you write clop and decided to remake this chapter or is everyone messing around?
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Not much to add that 2775319 didn't say already.
But innumerate, how you completely missed the fact that romance was building up in this fic for 11 chapters.
You have Derpy talking about how she appreciates Twilight, numerous blushing scenes. There's a scene where Twilight notices they are going on a 'date' (the Bitalian Restaurant bit where she accidentally sees how little money Derpy has) where Twilight talks herself from thinking of it as a 'date'-date. To simply a date as friends.
You have them spending lots of time together, where they explore their feelings towards one another. Leading up to Twilight's raunchy dream. Leading up to her.
I mean it couldn't have been more clear that this was a ship fic if the author reached through the screen and stamped it on your forehead. And yes, the "Romance" tag should have been a clear indication that romance was going to happen. I mean it's a given whenever you read that bit.
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There's a clop link, and people are just having a tizzy with their indignation showing. Honestly they all need to chill out and enjoy the story. It's a pretty freaking good one.
to this day idk where the smut is at
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Click the word 'here', it's a hyperlink.