Heavy metal parts scraping against each other followed by a loud slam pulled Spike from his magic-induced slumber. Though his ears had picked up the noise, his vision was still too blurry to get a clear feel for his surroundings. Most of what surrounded him came in shades of gray except for an icy blue figure sitting beside him, which he quickly identified as Sapphire. There was another dark figure partially obscured by set of opaque vertical rows, as if hidden behind a set of blinds.
“Ah, awake are we?” a deep voice growled. “Good. Zog's gonna have fun with you two.”
Spike knuckled his eyes to eliminate the blurriness. The blinds he thought he'd seen were actually the bars of a large portcullis keeping him and Sapphire contained in a small square cell made of gray stone. Spike recognized the dark figure behind the door to their prison as the dragon who'd cast the sleep spell on them. Seeing his prisoners roused, he showed his dagger-like teeth a malicious smile.
“Nap time's over, kiddos.”
As Sapphire rose from her sitting position and rubbed the sleepiness from her eyes, Spike kept careful watch on their captor.
“What's the big idea? We haven't done anything!” Sapphire yelled.
“On the contrary. Laying on a cliff overlooking this fortress with a pair of binoculars is pretty suspicious. I'd hate to be you two in a few moments. You're gonna wish you were still asleep.”
“Is that right?” Spike lowered his voice to a challenging tone.
Growling, the dark dragon stepped closer, those red eyes locked on to the young purple dragon. “We'll see how cocky you are when Zog's through with you.”
Spike folded his arms across his chest in defiance. “I'm not scared of Zog.”
“I truly wonder if you'll still be saying that once you meet him. In fact, I think I'll go fetch him now.”
Saying nothing else, the guard turned towards the door, long arrow-tipped tail waving behind him as he exited. The shutting door sealed out the beams of sunlight that had once flooded in. Now it was darker in that cell than ever.
Sapphire sighed through her nose. “What do we do now?”
“I don't know.” Spike answered with a negative shake of his head.
“I wonder,” Sapphire ran her palm down one of the bars keeping them contained in the cell. “I wonder if I could freeze these bars and shatter them.”
Her eyes squeezed shut as she summoned the magic energy necessary to freeze the five-inch think iron bars keeping them imprisoned. After a few seconds, her lips parted to show teeth gritting in effort. She let go with a confused look pasted on her face.
“That's weird. This has never happened before.” Sapphire shut her eyes again, grunting as she applied the sheer force of her will into the bars.
The usual frigid air and blue glow that surrounded Sapphire's hands when she used her magic was still absent, however. Spike ran his hands across the bar in Sapphire's left hand to test it.
“They're not cold at all.”
Labored panting escaped Sapphire's muzzle as she opened her eyes once more. “It's no use, they're magic resistant.”
Perhaps it was the dreary, depressive atmosphere or the dread of what would soon follow that made Spike shiver at a chill that surged through his body as Sapphire turned from the gate. She moped to the center of their cell and sat down on the cold stone floor.
“I'm so sorry, Spike.” Sapphire's voice cracked as if she were fighting tears. “This is all my fault. I never should have talked you into this.”
“Hey,” Spike said. He approached, watching Sapphire tuck her knees in close, wrap her arms around them and rest her head against them. Spike took a seat next to the curled up dragoness and put his arm around her shoulders. “You can't blame yourself for this. I would have come with you whether or not you asked.”
A sniff sounded before Sapphire looked at him, blue eyes wide and glittering with tears. She wiped her face.“You would?”
Spike stroked Sapphire's hair, allowing the long, soft strands to sift between his fingers. He'd hoped the gesture would help calm her down. “Well, yeah. I mean, I just let you walk away all those years ago. I wouldn't just let you go like that again.”
Despite her inner anxiety, Sapphire smiled and leaned her head on Spike's shoulder. “You really are the sweetest dragon I've ever met. I just don't know how much longer I'm going to get to enjoy it. We'll probably be dead within an hour.”
“If we are, I just want say that if I have to have someone lying next to me, I'm glad it's you.”
Though Sapphire's presence was both warming and comforting, Spike still felt that chill of uncertainty work its way through his body. Sitting on the floor of that prison, embracing one another could be the last tender moment the two would ever share. He couldn't stand the thought of Sapphire being tortured if it ever came to that. Whether or not the guard was bluffing, he didn't dare guess.
His heart had been torn in two; part if it wished he was safe back in Ponyville, with Twilight and all his friends, but the other half was glad he could be there to comfort Sapphire in what might be their last moments.
The situation seemed hopeless. There were too many other dragons to make an escape, the bars to their cell were magic-resistant and far too thick and sturdy to destroy. In the off chance they could break free; they wouldn't get far if the whole fortress was searching for them.
Grunting sounded from beyond the portcullis keeping them in. Spike stood and turned to see what it was. The prison was still, empty however, except for his pack, which had been brought in and was now resting against the wall.
Spike tilted his head curiously at the backpack sitting against the wall of the room. Strange as it was, he was sure he saw it shaking. He kept watch for a few more seconds as the zipper to the main compartment undid itself and a small head with a long blue mane peaked out.
“You jerks! You really were gonna just leave me back there!”
“Sunset?” Spike asked, watching the filly climb out of her makeshift shelter. “How long have you been in there?”
“Since that first time you guys stopped.”
“Wait,” Sapphire interjected. “That was clear back in Equestria! You've been in there for the last three hours?”
“Well, I kinda fell asleep.”
"I can't believe they didn't check that backpack," Sapphire said. "Guess they were overconfident."
Spike scratched the back of his head in utter perplexity. “'Kinda?' How do you fall asleep inside a moving backpack?”
Sunset's shoulders rose in a shrug. “I dunno, I just did! That blanket in there is really soft and comfy. Come on, you guys! This is no time to be playing 'Cops and Crooks!'”
Sapphire's eyes darted with panic. “Sunset, this is serious! You have to get out of here. The guard could be coming back any second!”
Sunset looked up. There was a stack of crates sitting against the stone wall that was just high enough for her to climb on. About ten feet up was a large wooden shelf bolted into the wall, with another crate sitting on it.
One hop landed her top half on the first crate. The filly's hind legs writhed for a moment as she struggled to get herself atop the crate until she finally pulled herself all the way up.
A second hop to the second crate. Then a third. With youthful, catlike agility, Sunset made her way up the pile of boxes until she could reach the shelf. She squeezed behind the crate and the wall to hide.
Just in time, as sunlight once again filled the prison. Their dark-scaled captor had returned, still wearing a sadistic grin. Sunset peeked her head from behind the crate to watch.
Funny. This dragon wasn't nearly as big as Sapphire warned her they were. Only six feet tall at the most. Certainly not bigger than a tree or a house.
“You two are very lucky. Zog's busy at the moment. I wouldn't worry, though. Don't think you two are going to be leaving. Heheheheh.”
A golden object on the dragon's belt caught Sunset's attention. A metal ring with many thin, jagged items dangling from it gleamed in the sunlight. He had the keys to their cell!
Sunset pulled her head back behind her hiding spot and ran her hoof through her mane. There had to be something she could do. She poked her head out again. The dark dragon was standing just under the shelf. It gave the filly an idea.
The crate was at least three times larger than Sunset, but that didn't stop her from pushing with all her might, eyes squeezed shut with effort. Despite this, her struggles were to no avail; the box hadn't budged.
Dumb crate! Why do they gotta make these things so heavy?
Sunset's chest expanded with a deep breath before she jumped up to prop herself between the wall with her hind hooves and the crate with her fronts. Slowly, the filly's body stretched and the crate inched across the shelf.
The dark dragon had just enough time to look up before the crate crashed down on his head and splintered into a thousand pieces. Broken wood decorated the floor. Many slabs of rock and stone that were stored in the crate scattered about the room.
Hey, that's why it was so heavy. It was full of rocks!
“Nice going, Sunset!” Sapphire cheered as she watched the young pony hop down the series of crates and remove the keyring from the downed dragon's waist. “Now get us out of here!”
“Not so fast,” the filly answered, her voice dripping with shadiness. “I want an apology.”
“We don't have time for this!” Spike yelled.
“Say it!” Sunset teased, twirling the keyring around her front hoof.
Groaning, Sapphire wilted. “Ok, I'm sorry.”
“For...?
Sapphire did a facepalm. “For leaving you behind.”
Finally, Sunset smiled. “Apology accepted.”
A crate full of rocks....
That made me smile. Go Sunset!
Sunset the BadAss Filly!!!
If anyone can break out a prison faster is the pyro. I don't know that creepy mute bugger does it.
A crate full of hats would've been nicer don't you think?
There's a mistake with the fifth to last paragraph.
Yay welcome back.
luna dragon!
well played
“Say it!” Sapphire teased, twirling the keyring around her front hoof.
Groaning, Sapphire wilted. “Ok, I'm sorry.”
think that first one is supposed to be sunset.
Sunset is best filly
Good chapter, but I think I need to wait until this is finish so I can read it all at once.
2190519 Derp on my part. Fixed.
I don't even know where to start on this one. (brace yourselves its going to be very long)
As a bit of forewarning to the writer, I imagine you've been hard at work with both real life and trying to come up with the latest chapter; however, at the end of the day I can only see and judge the results. That doesn't mean that the work you put into is lessened but length of time does not necessarily mean "easy pass on comments/criticisms".
Short version: Sunset saves the day, really? Also, what happened to the interesting story, can we get back to that, because what's here is not really interesting anymore.
Long version: Despite the fact that she is a) a young pegasus filly, b) lacking in the strength necessary to push the box over and c) how did the dragon not smell her when he walked in or for that matter how did Spike or Sapphire not notice her in the backpack? I'm pretty sure a filly does not weight next to nothing and have a body configuration that would be pretty noticeable inside a backpack. Why the guards never went through it like most guards do after they capture suspicious looking beings that might be spies is just baffling. Also, the bad guys have magic resistant metal? When, where, how, and why? At this point, I'm just going to out right and call it the only way the bad guys are going to lose is due to the bad guys having a brain aneurysm, forget they have awesome things, and let the heroes win. That or continue to invest in the dragon equivalent of Stormtroopers
Criticism: First off, let me just say I don't mind the idea for this sequel nor do I hate the writer in any shape way or form. I just dislike what is being presented at the moment.The reason I've been more critical than normal of this story is that for the most part it has been a very safe adventure plot. Rather than feeling like a tense, heart pounding, awesome story that introduces new ideas and themes; it feels like a generic, factory made adventure story made to fill an adventure quota. That isn't to say that I want a blockbuster, balls-wall-to-action tons of explosions, because no I don't want that to happen. What I would rather not read is another safe adventure story. Let's play a little game called, "Checklist of Safe Cliches". Now is it really fair for me to play a game like this at the writer's expense? Probably not but I'm going to do so anyways (skip to the next paragraph if you don't want to play). Spunky male hero with some magical powers? Check. Sassy but sexy (or calm and demure doormat) female love interest who has special powers and tragic backstory that involves Disney assassin related parental death? Check, Check, and Check. Spunky male hero's leader senses danger coming from a distant land and sends the hero on a quest to unknowingly investigate the brewing trouble? Check. Evil villain with zealot army who takes over a peaceful country and rules it with an iron fist? Check. Evil villain and army has super awesome abilities that appear unbeatable and plans to use this to start a war with the heroes homeland? Check. Evil villain takes a loved one who either belongs to the heroes, is related to the heroes, or is related to a person that the heroes know? Check. Heroes find oppressed nation, hear their plight, find out that female love interest is from there and go off in search of villain in the hopes to beat him and save the nation? Check. Check. Check. Heroes get captured by the evil villain's minions, are brought to the evil villain who then monologues at length about his evil plans, spunky hero and sassy female try to fight him but are overpowered by evil villain? Check. Not yet checked. Not yet checked. Not yet checked. Hero is separated from love interest, falls into a depression, find out he's the prophesized chosen one/ finds out he has special powers no one else has and in doing so regains lost spunk, finds the captive loved ones and breaks himself and loved ones out of prison? Not yet checked. I could go on but I think you get the point.
This story just feels so generic. It's a cardboard cutout of what has already come before with the only difference being a change in physical features of our characters. Even the motivations are the same as always. I went at length before about how boring Zog is because there are other motivations a villain can have besides "I hate everything that isn't like my race". Seriously, that got old with Imperialism where countries were going around planting flags on unclaimed territory and oppressing anything that wasn't white. Then backing up their Combine-like oppression with things like science and religion and armies of other white dudes carrying the latest guns. What's next on Zog's list of things to do, black hooded scale rallies? My main issue with this tale is that here is a plot, setting, and cast of characters, with the potential to be something different and interesting, and instead of going outside the box and trying new things the story instead is a boring, cookie cutter adventure tale complete with a predicable love interest, douchebag villains and Stormtrooper-esque minions. I have seen this story before. I have read this story before. I have even played this story before. Ladies and gentlemen, I have been to the moon and back and discovered that it is a crater laden, dusty rock that revolves around our planet and has no atmosphere to speak of. This story has so much potential to be epic and its being squandered by having the plot straight out of an jrpg/ western rpg adventure story. This story is almost a complete contrast to the original, which was far more interesting and entertaining than this one. There the characters felt natural, there were interesting things that we learned not just about dragons and their prodigy; but also about the feelings of our central cast who weren't quite ready to let go of their friendly, dependable, neighborhood baby purple dragon as easily as they thought they were. In this story, our cast of super friends have grown up and most of them moved on to bigger and better things so by default their impact in the story is going to be minimal at best. What's worse is that we're stuck following around a love struck teenager and his girlfriend as they make predictable, stupid but well intentioned decisions. With the amount of backstory we're given and the amount of changes that have happened since the previous story, we could have started from here and lost little in the process.
Amateur is a word I'd like to use but the writing is anything but that; which is surprising given the number of amateur level decisions being made for what could laughably be called the plot. I realize I'm being far more critical and harsh than I have been both in the past and to other stories I've commented on, but unlike some of those I've seen the prequel to this one and it was a nice heart-warming read. It is therefore frustrating to see this story become another lazy sequel and become another chapter in the "what could have been" book. I understand that this is the buildup to the climax but does it really have to be so uninspired and unsurprising all in one? There are a couple of things that get under my skin when it comes to stories in general: one, when a secondary character is pushed to the forefront and nothing significant that couldn't be done with a disposable red shirt is done with them and two, when an author sabotages their own story with bone-headed decisions. Fortunately, we've managed to avoid the first one although I have a feeling that that little annoyance is waiting in the wings ready to spring at a moment's notice. Unfortunately, it appears that the second one is trying to rear its ugly head and I must say its doing a spectacular job at it. I am not saying that you should alter your story to fit my view of the world, I'm not that narcissistic. What I am saying is for a story that started out really well for the first six or so chapters its amazing how these past four have actually come narrowly close to ruining the experience for me. If a story is supposed to be a series of surprises (predictable or otherwise) that cause the reader to feel some sort of emotion then how come the only emotion I am feeling is progressively rising annoyance? I liked how the two dragons get together after not seeing each other for a long time. I liked how each of the main six have moved on with their lives and that they have other priorities now and are not trying to relive the good ol' days. I like how Zog is a threat, even if he is a cliched one. I like how Spike is trying to be his own dragon and do things because he wants to do them. However, if I could summarize in one example the reasons why I have a growing sense of contempt for this story it would be with how Celestia acts. You know you're headed for rough waters when your leader is starting to sound and act like the Jedi Council from the Star Wars prequels when they wait until the bad guy is getting ready to off them to try and follow up on that whole Dark Side is messing with us thing. It's hard to feel sympathy for your well deserved fate when you wait for an extended period of time before deciding to follow up on evidence of evil doings because it’s a bit late to regret not doing something earlier when you have a completely preventable sharp object wedged through your chest.
Overall, things right now are boringly predictable with a dash of not too subtle already known plot exposition and inappropriate saccharine love scenes. While I have no hatred for the author, I do dislike the way he has been handling things since the plot started rolling itself out. And before anyone says that I hate love stories, allow me to carefully explain how wrong that idea that is. I don't hate love, in fact, I like a good romance story just as much as the next guy or gal. However, there is a time and place for everything. You don't see Simba and Nala having a cuddle in the backroom of Pride Rock during the middle of the battle against the hyenas. Nor do you see Jack and Rose making out at top the stern of the Titanic as the ship is in its final moments. My point is ease up on the romantic moments please. You can have the romance since this is a romance story but all things in moderation and there are better times. For me, this story is making me more annoyed than happy, and unfortunately we're reaching that point of no return where you realize you're willing to stick it out or bail with everyone else who's done waiting with blind hope for things to get better. Time is no longer a luxury that can be afforded. As much as I would like to speculate on counter-factuals or the things that went into creating this and some of the previous chapters, doing so accomplishes nothing And I swear if I see something about group of secret resistance fighters who have been secretly fighting Zog and giving valuable intelligence to Princess Celestia, I will start foaming at the mouth at the middle finger sized plot hole that would be introduced. When I am able to suspend my disbelief while reading an OOC slash fic like "Cherilee's Garden" and have an enjoyable experience than a trying to take itself seriously alternate universe story that I have followed since its first installment, there are some issues. And a fan of slash fics I am not.
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That's a lot of words.
And the kid saves the day for now, good thing she stowed away.
2191068 I could see most of your points, and even agree with some of them - the romance scenes in particular, though really what else are they gonna do in a prison cell? - but you lost me when you (apparently in all seriousness) deemed this fic less believable, and therefore less enjoyable, than Cheerilee's Garden. I rarely deal in such absolutes, but anyone who enjoyed CG in any way except during an MSTing has a mind whose workings don't overlap with mine. They're not even in the same solar system anymore. CG is the worst pony fanfiction ever written in my opinion, and descending to this comparison does the rest of your otherwise well-reasoned rant a massive injustice.
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There are lots of things you can do in a jail cell when being captured by the enemy aside from trying to share a loving moment. They could be actively searching for weak points in their cell aside from their prison bars. They could use their dragon strength to try and displace the rocks creating the wall. Just because the bars are magic proof does not necessarily imply or mean that the rocks are too. And failing that, plan for a way to overtake the guard when he returns (Zog strikes me as the kind of evil overlord that wouldn't lower himself to going to his prisoners but rather having them come to him unless it is absolutely necessary for him to go). They have claws and teeth, right? They aren't there for just show, right? Or, one of them could shoot fire into the face of the guard distracting him while the other beats the ever living crap out of him, you know tag team. Or anything other than making one attempt then giving up.
As to the Cherilee's Garden bit, I think you missed the point. Just because I use a story that you personally see as being the workings of Satan as an example of why this story is less interesting, does not somehow mean it lessens my entire argument, hinder it, or somehow do it a massive disservice. Suspension of disbelief does not always mean believability. My point isn't that one is more believable than the other (this a world of magical talking ponies where dragons eat gems instead of razing towns wholesale, and the sun and moon are controlled by two magical mares which goes against all laws of known physics, believability hung itself the moment you mention "world of magical talking ponies"), my point is that one is more enjoyable than the other, that I can suspend my disbelief long enough that I don't fall asleep at my desk at night. It is entirely possible to suspend one's disbelief of a story, setting, or character actions, and not have a believable story, setting, or characters (ask the makers of the Halo franchise how that works) or believe in said story, setting, or characters. I know a zombie apocalypse is completely nonsensical but I am able to suspend my disbelief of that fact when I watch "The Walking Dead", however when the episode is over I still don't believe that it is possible to have a zombie apocalypse. The reason for the comparison is that one story's execution is better handled than the other. I should dislike CG ( the story and whole scenario is stupid and has more holes in it than the Bismarck) from beginning to end and I should like this story more than that one, but the fact remains is that the writer has done little to make me feel differently. CG knows what it wants to be, knows that its a complete travesty onto man and goes with it, while this one tries to take itself seriously, tries to be an epic adventure story and a teenage love story all wrapped up into one, and in doing so accomplishes neither. I can read CG, take it for what it is, and move on while looking past the problems that plague it, whereas when I try to do the same thing here the problems make themselves more obvious than if you were to put a big flashing neon sign over them, thus destroying my suspension of disbelief, ruining the story, and making it a less than enjoyable read. As I said before, I'm not so narcissistic to believe that he should change his story to fit my world view. You can have your story be a romantic-adventure tale, just don't make so paint by numbers boring (unless that's the intended goal).
2198831 Mostly agreed, but there is one very noticeable flaw in your argument: you commingle "believable" with "realistic". Of course this universe isn't realistic, that indeed starts at the point where we talk about "magical talking ponies". However, every universe ever created for a story has its own set of rules and laws, and it's by those standards that I measure believability. Even with the rather nonsensical foundation, this universe has its rules. This story follows those rules mostly; Cheerilee's Garden doesn't.
Speaking of which: yes, it does do your argument a disservice when you go into such ridiculous hyperbole as you did here. Cheerilee's Garden is not just bad, morally reprehensible or cruel; none of that would undermine whatever you have to say. But it's not believable in the slightest, and putting this story on the same level is so out of any realm of reason as to cast a shadow on everything else you say. It's like saying some trite love story was worse than Twilight; the comparison overreaches so hard you can hear its spine snap.
Oh, and "enjoyable" is not a word anyone should ever use when talking about Cheerilee's Garden, ever. Anyone who honestly enjoys reading about children getting brutally murdered (spoiler alert, ha ha ha) has left any and all common ground with me. I can understand people who enjoyed Cupcakes, even though I don't get how that's possible myself, but children are where I draw the line, firmly and irrevocably. No positive adjectives should ever be used in conjunction with that piece of garbage, ever. I don't usually judge people for enjoying stuff I don't like, but torture porn with children might be the one exception to that rule. No. Just no. And certainly not in this universe.
Sorry for the rant. I guess I've said far more than could be considered reasonable, but I couldn't let this stand without at least giving a counterposition. Back to Love Keeps Dragon On, everyone. You won't see me in this comment thread again.
Dumb filly
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Perhaps I'm not adequately explaining myself when I mean enjoyable (my last bit on this before the mods get mad). Let me make this very clear, I HATE KID DEATH (this includes torturing of children or using them as soldiers for your war). Okay. I hate it and everything that surrounds it and I am in no shape, way or form endorsing the actions taken by Cherilee in that story. However, my hyperbole was to say that I felt a much wider range of emotions than I do in this story (i.e. I feel anger, rage, sadness, despair, tension, and slight humor at the start of the classroom scene, whereas here I largely feel bored, and have instances of appropriate "daww" because everything thus far I'm not surprised by). That story at least had a progression of events that I could follow and while I hate the subject matter and the things that happen within them and want to see Cherilee suffer in the depths of hell for her horrible actions, I could at least follow it to the ending. This story...see my first rant. Also, I hate Cupcakes in the same way I hate all slash fics, in that they are all morally wrong and stupid. To enjoy something does not mean that you completely like it (and before you smart ones start thinking that violence is okay so long as you don't like it or that you can enjoy bullying someone so long as you don't like it the answer is a giant NO). For example, I enjoy mlp as a series but hate certain episodes of the show (for those interested those episodes would be s2: ep. 9, s3: ep. 9, and s3: ep. 11). You can enjoy as steak but hate the processes by which you get that steak.
So when I say I enjoyed it over this one, I mean that at least I'm not bored, which in my opinion is the worse thing that a story can do to its reader as it means that there is a disconnect between the reader and the story. They are just reading events that happen without caring about those events in the slightest happen. The fact that you and myself find kid torture and death morally wrong means that the story was able to generate feelings of anger towards this. You didn't want to see them die or have those terrible things happen to them and got pissed when they did, so in that regard the story accomplished its goal in generating some emotion either for or against what was happening. Here, a giant meteor could crash, killing everyone and I won't care that it happens. There I felt something (negative emotions) about the characters and events, here, I feel nothing for the characters or the events. Things are happening and I don't care about them, which was the point of the hyperbole. I should be feeling something other than boredom and growing annoyance because I'm bored. If anyone else wants an even further explanation for my meaning then just pm me as I'm tired of explaining myself. As far as I'm concerned this discussion is closed and I will wait until the next chapter to see if things change in this story.
this is great ~
Well I don't want to be out done by Midnight Nightscape so incoming wall of text:
The story is really...um....plot....grammar....fix this?
Ok so i'm not going to do a long rant because...because...reasons. Ya reasons.
PS: THERE IS ALWAYS TIME FOR AN APOLOGY.
YAY another chapter thank you for blessing us with such an excellent fic!
One grand adventure, I love this!
I'm not sure I understand why it's bad to have the filly save the day. I was begged to do something original and not have her get in the way, have one of the heroes get hurt trying to save her or something like that, yet when I have her do something productive I still get bashed for it...
All these damn rant comments...
y u no update
y u no update
Y U NO UPDATE
WHY YOU NO UPDATE
WHY YOU NO UPDATE
Wow... February felt like a really long time ago!
Sorry, everypony. Writer's block, depression, moving and other projects have sort of impeded on my progress with this story. I'll update as soon as I can. Thanks for reading!
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Well, I hope you are doing well and finish the story soon for a couple of reasons:
1) It's very good, considering that I liked the first one
2) I am waiting for the story to finish so I can read it on youtube [which everyone is begging me to read, since I read the first one]
anyways, hope all is going well. Good luck, mate
I like. This is going well, don't let other comments deter you in this. Take a year if you have to to make next chapter. Remember, this is you story that you write in your will. No one pays you to creat, and if it comes out crummy why should you care, you understand it since you are the author. I hope you read this and feel better from my words friend.
Sorry it's taking so long. I've been in a bit of a rut as of late, got rejected from EqD and am facing all sorts of depression and inferiority issues,
This is a great story I love the relationship between them two. I can see them being together and growing even closer. I hope you address what kind of dragon Spike is. Since he doesn't fall under the basic element dragons you mention before. Also if it ends i hope with a happy ending I would love to see another series taking place with them as a family with kids lol. Keep up the great work
Why must all the greatest authors be stuck with depression/writers block/shizzy computers/accidentally buying $1800 guns?
when is the next chapter? the what is killing me!
4758083 I apologize sincerely. I DO intend to get back to this story soon. I didn't realize so much time had passed...
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1800 dollar guns? Pray tell, what author do you speak of?
Well... She's not wrong. The smart thing to do would have been to wait for backup to arrive. But nooooo, you just had to go and get yourself caught.