Hello! My name is Stratocaster, pegasus, musician, and author extraordinaire! Feel free to browse my work, leave plenty of feedback, and chat with me at any time! :D I hope you enjoy! *waves*
Caramel is an honest hard working Ponyville regular who has all the friendship he could ever want. But a recent tragic turn in his love life has made him feel like less of a stallion. Now, after recoiling from his tearful loss, Caramel finds himself entranced by none other than the most beautiful mare straight from Canterlot. Where will this new love interest go for this young Coltanova?
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... go on, you have my attention. this promises to get real good, no mistakes that really stand out either, you may want to break that last block of text apart a bit, but that´s just aesthetic. tracked.
Not bad, but the last paragraph drags it down in my opinion. It's pretty much a big awkward block of text that either re-iterates what you've already established or dumps info on us that would better have been reserved for future chapters or scenes of their own (i.e. show him interacting with Rarity rather than just tell us outright how good friends they became after the breakup).
Wow, a Hetero Caramel. I think this has to be the first one I've seen
1621659 Yeah, sorry about that. I wasn't sure where to cut the chapter off.
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I might be a CaraMac shipper but this has caught my attention
1622263 Thanks, I love getting feedback.
Nice! Maybe a little indenting could help, but that;s just me. Have a like and my watching!
Sassaflash say that three times fast
Cant wait for more.
gonna go ahead and like and track this.
....please tell me caramel listens to some sad cowboy music at some point.
1622891 Actually he does in fact listen to lonely music, just not cowboy music.
Why I feel that Caramel always gets to be the loved underdog in all MLP fanfiction? Oh, no matter, I like it.
Most unexpected ship I have ever heard of... ... ... I LOVE IT!
Faved and Followed!
Lucky stallion
Lucky, Caramel, Time Turner, what do they all have in common? They all have cutie marks that are found as marshmallows in Lucky Charms cereal. Then came the fourth member of their group: Noteworthy and he ruins the their theme by having a music note as his mark. It really f**ked up their bowling team shirts. Don't worry they put him is a leprechaun suit and now Noteworthy is their mascot.
This is the only the second time, I've seen this ship done. Caramel is more often shipped with a member of the Apple family or sometimes hetero Bon Bon. This is good story so far and it's a little funny out of the characters introduced Applejack is the only one that gives him a hard time for taking a government mandated break.
1630270 Thanks, I wasn't sure if it would be original enough. Also I never realized that Lucky Charms thing.
She's married isn't she?
"looking up for caramel as he" Forgot to capitalize the C
"I hope you’re not loosing your appetite.” Should be losing
This is looking like a really great story. Also, I have a bad feeling that Rarity was trying to warn Caramel that Fleur is something along the lines of "married to Fancy Pants."
She has extra pieces, doesn't she?
Wow, 2500 words exactly. I love it when that happens.
50 bucks that rarity set him off
Facehoofs
this might get worse
I never read fancypants getting angry. I wonder what It would be like
Oh Caramel... If you only knew how *bucked* you were....
BAHAAHAHAH!
First I was like
Then I was like:
I'd second the motion that rarity had something to do with this...
well, as annoying as she can be....good for her.
not like Caramel isn't already having a bad relationship streak....
1669883 Stick around a few chapters!
This won't end well.
Also...I thought it had been established that Caramel and Sassaflash had broken up, ergo he can't be cheating on her since they are no longer in a relationship. Was that something that they kept between themselves? Otherwise, it seems rather mean for Rarity to keep insisting that Caramel has to remain faithful to her.
Hmm. A good chapter....but felt a TAD rushed......
Could he overlook the current situation that easily? 'shrug' perhaps......
Fleur. What delusional world do you think ya live in?
1685600 well in the other chapters it said he was an yes pony plus he kinda thinking with his other head....
If Rarity was smart, she'd deny knowing who in the hell Caramel is, because that association doesn't bode well for her with Fancy Pants being one of the richest ponies in Equestria. Caramel should bulk up and change his name to Creme Brulee.
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1685583 It's true that they broke up, but Caramel promised Sassaflash to always love her no matter what. Their feelings for each other were really strong, so Rarity is a little disgusted that he would forsake her that quickly; especially since Fleur de Lis is Rarity's friend.
Vous avez de très beaux yeux.
I'm taking French 2, so I noticed you used the wrong verb in that sentence.
1691980 Oh thanks. I'm taking French too, and I sometimes get verbs confused.
just give them the information they need timeturner......you don't know the kind of horrors they're capable of
PS. as always...loving the story keep up the good work
1721651 Thank you. Always a pleasure.
Do you know how refreshing it is to read a story with Time Turner in it that doesn't refer to him as Doctor Whooves or anything to do with time travel or Daleks? Good on ya, Stratocaster.
.................Oh. And the rest of the story's good too.
1722831 I know right? I can't tell you how many times I've seen the word "Tardis".in a story description.
Girls u just committed a crime
By the way, is anypony good with cover images? I want to see if I can find an artist to make covers for my future stories. Let me know!
Fancypants is gonna challenge him to fisty cuffs
1742905 What kind of cover pictures? I could have a talk with my friend; he might would charge very cheap for it if not for free.
1745247 I'm hoping to get something as close to the actual animation style as possible. Not too elaborate like a painting, or too shabby like a notebook sketch.
CMC I think your logic is borked alittle
yay new chapter, knew it was only a matter of time before sassaflass came back, surprised caramel manaed to keep flur a secret though.
*facehoof* Great going CMCrs!
Oh caramel you're going to be a lonely stallion. but no worries you'll have your golden years to try aga in
The cakes have a license
didnt expect that.
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there's a saying about fans somewhere next chapter, hope caramel comes out okay. " probably not
That...was...a...doozie! I hope you've enjoyed my first romance as much as it's twisted my mind. How do those authors do it?
Anyway, stick around for my next story...or stories. I'm considering working on more than one at a time just so I can get these ideas out faster. But that's for 2013! I'll see you in January, and have a happy New Year! 
I would have him end up with Fleur but what have been done is done.
Fancy Pants is weak stuff
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well it was a great story cant wait to see more from ya