It didn't take long for the master of chaos to go back to his evil ways. After being encased in stone for many months Discord is plotting revenge. When Chrysalis frees him from his tomb they team up and they are unstoppable. They plan to take over all of Equestria spreading chaos and doom all around. Will the elements be enough to stop these villains? Can the main six defeat them? Will Luna be there for a crisis? (Answer for that last one, yes)
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NOTE: I just finished editing this story as I have now gained a few more skills in writing. I originally wasn't going to do this but the first few chapters were ROUGH. Like, hard to read, rough. So I fixed those and I decided to touch up the other chapters as well. It will be minor changes, nothing too drastic, but it should help the story flow better. However, some will still be able to tell that this is my first story. I hope you enjoy the changes anyways.
(Joke) Alt. Title: The Revenge Of Chrysalis And Discord: This Time, It's Personal (I Think)
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Haha Maybe
Very nice story.
Discord which has formed an alliance with someone who will take him to victory.
Good story so far I like it. Oh I found a small spelling error when Celestia is speaking to Luna.
I believe you accidentally misspelled Luna's name Unless that was Celestia mispronouncing Luna's name do to cocoon juice and a hit to the head. Other then that yeah keep up the good work.
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Oh my gosh and Luna being in my top five favorite ponies I surely hope I am not sent to the moon for this
Freakout translation: thanks, I will fix that
Alright, this is good. You show great promise, and you're pacing the story relatively well!
Only one problem. Comas are your friends! Sorry, but I saw several areas that clearly called for a coma, but it's missing it. I know that sounds like something stupid to be annoyed about, but meh. That's just me
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I have never been good with commas. I'll keep my eye out for any spots in the future!
Well this is a very interesting chapter that made me chuckle. I like it. I just have a tiny nit pick.
Discord needs a capital D.
Yeah sorry I just can't help myself. But I needed to say it.
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No thats good I should pay attention to that.
The only time it would be annoying is if the only thing you ever did was post list of errors about chapters and never actually say anything about the story.
Your comments great in that it praises my story (thanks by the way) and then gives a truly careless error that should be fixed. I will let you guys know if I am getting overwhelmed. So keep the corrections and comments coming!
This is going nicely
Well this looks like it will get very interesting. Glad Fluttershy is more comfortable with her current size and things settled about that. I noticed one little thing.
I'm guessing that is supposed to be can't.
Even with the small typo it is another good chapter.
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Thanks, I thought it wasn't even my best work. Glad you like it. Well, off to fix that typo.
I'd recommend Alternate Universe tag.
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Why?
enigma in the jungle, enigma in the jungle. Gonna murder you and steal your moneeey! So that I may purchase items to help me win, yah yah, yah, yah!
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...sorry, had it stuck in my head
As for the story, felt kind of rushed, but satisfying not the less.
Hope to see more fics coming from you, as this one was really entertaining.
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Thanks!
Hopefully my writing will improve over time
3304980 Because he got reformed.
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I started writing this before that episode. Plus who knows he could go back. I'll put some more information in the description though.
3305103 It could go either way, but it just makes more sense.
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Well, I changed the description so hopefully that will clear up any confusion.