Who would think that Princess Luna would settle down? Have a family? Well, she is! When she meets a handsome stallion, a wedding is held, a foal to come. But what happens inside the walls of Canterlot Castle? Is it dangerous, joyfu!? Read it to find out!
This was copied and pasted from an iPad Notes. Thank you very much for reading my fan fiction!
That was cute Didn't expect the whole Rainbow Dash's brother thing. lol
This feels quite a bit rushed, but I like it so far.
There aren't that many errors with spelling, punctuation, and grammar here, so that's a plus. However, this story is incredibly rushed, giving pretty much no back-story into any of what happens. If you ever feel like writing in the future, I recommend making the story longer and building up to this point instead of starting with it.
Stories are built upon several basic sections: an introduction, rising actions, a climax, falling actions, and a resolution.
Your story seems like it is a resolution to some hidden set of events. You didn't really describe anything that happened leading up to Luna getting pregnant, so why should I care about it?
In order for this type of plot to be interesting, it can't just be brought up out of nowhere as a tiny one-shot. It needs to have back-story, preferably a fairly large heaping of it, to make sense and be worth reading.
Auf Wiedersehen!
1620239 Yeah, I will add a bonus chapter soon. As soon as it's written, anyway, LOL. Anyway, thanks for pounding me for it I needed the criticism to get better.
1667196 You're welcome.
1668304 Speaking of Thanks. Happy Thanksgiving, everybody!