Page generated in 0.036 seconds
Total duration
903 users online
321,841 hits today, 2,314,256 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Commence read.
I like how Shining seems to have a nice grasp on his mortality and his love.
And the twiluna train is back on track and ready to chug!!! No more catastrophes and derailments for it up ahead. So sir, not this train. It's running on liquid love, and it's next stop is forgiveness and makeup sexville.
MORE
next chapter, NOW!
1902031
^ this guy
this guy right here, he knows
Yes dammit, forgive Luna! Er.. I mean, if that's okay
My god is Cadence a nympho. A very knowledgable and lucky nympho. How the hay does Shining keep up with that?
Also, DAT MONOLOGUE.
Thousands of years old book of prophecies about Twilight. Damn Twi what exactly does your future hold.
Brilliant, beautiful, and heart-wrenching as always.
Kudos to Twilight for choosing the route she did, yes it's an obvious choice I know since how much fun can life be if you know the entire route and are forced to adhere to it. The timeline is perfect as well, getting away and spending time with Cadence will help get things with Luna back on the right track. Incoming broken record here but keep up the good work on this masterpiece. I need to go give the manly tearducts a recharge.
Another excellent chapter.
Wonderful chapter
I'm enjoying the development and turns of the story.
Have a you earned it.
What? That seems rather contradictory.
I think "trivial" would be a better word. Unless the nature of snow continues to elude them.
But those are VERY small complains, and semantic ones at that. Excellent chapter overall!
Awesome chapter, I loved the way you wrote Cadence. Can't wait for more!
Pressure! Plain for all to see!
Pressing down on her to work more.
Under pressure! That burns a pony out
Splits a family in two
For a mage's prophecy..
It's the terror of knowing
How it all comes about
Prophets are old friends
Decreeing "Twi, watch out!"
Tomorrow, with thy brother
Pressure on crystal - ponies their prince!
Trottin' around, with these ponies I adore
Though just two days, have to get away from it all
Going to weep - ponies don't weep
It's the terror of knowing
What this work is about
Expecting foals, Cadence
Repeating in bed brought it, all about!
A foal born, for the empire, empire, empire-
Princess for ponies - or could it be a prince?
Turned away from it all because free will can
Crash in defense, but it won't work
Keep coming up with love but trust's so slashed and torn
Why, why, why?
Love
Insanity laughs under pressure we're cracking
Can't she give herself one more chance?
Why can't she give love that one more chance?
Why can't she give love, give love, give love..?
'Cause love with an old-Alicorn would
End! 'Til death you should care for
The princess who's the guard of the night
And love dares you to change your way of
Thinking about yourselves
This is your last dance
This is your last chance
This is mortals.
Under pressure
Under pressure
Pressure
As much as I love this story. I find it hard, in my eyes, to believe that someone would forgive another for witholding the knowledge of their parents being on their death bed until it was too late.
If I had just started dating someone, they found out my parents were going to die soon and didn't tell me because I was just settling into a new job, I would be furious. There is no way I could forgive that.
Then again, alot of people really love their Twiluna, and are willing to go to great lengths for it.
I guess we will all see what Twilight will do soon enough.
To finish, great chapter. Still totally diggin this chili.
"
Words, don't come easy to me
How can I find a way to make you see I Love You
Words don't come easy
Words, don't come easy to me
This is the only way for me to say I Love You
Words don't come easy
"
Damn you Loyal! With every chapter you add, I am left wanting more. And this one even more so.
I do have to say that this chapter has given me more to work with in my own writing. Ideas, points of direction to research and follow, and so much more. Maybe that is why I read so much, so that new ideas keep getting fed to my mind.
This is so good.
hmmm alright then, probably a good call on a break/clearing your mind trip. course, gonna need some brain bleach for that mental image Shining gave you, huh Twilight.
FORGIVE LUNA! DOOOOO EEET!! Though Twilight might have to have some inner turmoil over it some more. It was a fairly large deal, but maybe she'll walk in on Luna crying or see how much Luna's hurting over this or something. Though I do recognize how hard it is to stay mad at people you love sometimes.
I like what you've done with the magic of love and how its an amalgamation of the other magics into its own thing. Loving the magic portion so far, really looking forward to the other magics, if they're as interesting as Shadow and Love.
I'm thinking Shining's reaction to Luna sleeping with his little sister is a little too accepting given his current feelings towards the Princesses. Of course, there could be many reasons for the reaction, he could not be as angry with them as he appeared to be and it just helped him make a decision he was considering anyway, Twilight didn't need to hear his disapproval after she broke down like that, and so on and so forth.
Also regarding Shining, wouldn't he already know about the Luna thing? If he read the book, then he'd get Twilight's daily life, which I would assume at one point would include the sex scene. Which honestly I would imagine Twilight would find REALLY awkward when it gets described in detail. Oh noes, Celestia AND Shining READ about my having SEX with Luna! IN DETAIL (judging from the level of detail we're told)!
Regarding the book of prophecy, I think instead of free will, the unknown would be a better term for her choice, though I can see how free will would work. Still, when presented a fork like that, its generally always better to go with not knowing. I"d also be profoundly disturbed knowing I had been playing out an act, so I'm glad she was able to choose knowing that it was truly HER choice.
Liking Cadence so far, only one real gripe I had about her was that she did not know how Luna feels about Twilight in that opening monologue or that Twilight knew about the whole Nightshade thing, all she knew about was just that Twilight loves Luna. Maybe if Luna had confided in her again about her feelings or something it would work.
Oh, also, she should maybe say something about the darker side of love or how people can do terrible things because of and in the name of love, instead of making love be all sunshine and rainbows.
Looking forward to the next part! Hopefully hot makeup sex!
1903800
>Sees comment from Poco
>Sphincter tightens
>Prepare for horrible critique
>Reading...
>Oh. Well alright then.
1903822
Heh, yeah, I've resolved to pretty much comment my thoughts on every chapter, so expect that I guess. While I definitely love the story, and am certainly eagerly waiting for more, I'll probably point out little plot holes or inconsistencies I think I see.
1902119
But, but... what about Twidash?!
1903996
Plot holes you say?
great chapter!
prophesy: "free will under bomb threat."
1904645
out the window? like, before the beginning of the story...
1906244
1906287
It was a pun too tired and crude to pass up.
1907239>>1908050
>Asking FS use Shadow magic
>Magic
>Pegasus
Yyyyyyyyyup. Totally called that one >.>
1908095
hey in an AU where she becomes an alicorn anything could be possible. you just never know mate
1908914
> How long do you plan this story to be?
It's about Twilight's journey as the Archmage... so the rest of her life, or at least for as long as she stays in that postition.
1910247
In my opinion, Alicorn Twi is kinda cliche...
Why do I have Deja Vú when reading the last line?
This chapter brings up a good point. How old is Cadence exactly
1912248 It's not really about Twilight becoming an alicorn so much as it is HOW she becomes an alicorn. There's about as many fics with as many different methods as there are stars in the sky. Some are better than others, some are downright painful to read, and still others are so beautiful you can halfway convince yourself the show writers are going to incorporate it somehow. Personally, I'm a huge fan of Alicorn Twilight simply because I love seeing how different people make it happen. Keep in mind, though, that just because your fic seems (from an outside perspective) to be barreling towards immortal goddess Twilight at full speed doesn't mean it has to get there. Not every hero needs to be an all-powerful demigod, sometimes the greatest of us are the ones who are only mortal.
You, sir/ma'am, have just completed my idea of Cadance being a pervert. To that, I say, "Oorah!" Also...make-up sex? Nice assholes?
And this make-up sex is going to be awesome....
2383552
Same here!
all i can think of is this while reading
I knew her back when she was seeing Nightshade, and I was one of the few she confided in about him.” Cadance’s expression darkened slightly. “I was the one to stop her attacking him…”
Didn't you say it was Celestia that stopped Luna from ass raping Nightshade?
So much giggity. I knew Cadence would be helpful in this story, and now she's proven it. Onward to the next chapter!
~SolidFire
Woah.
So weird that Alicorn twilight was cliche before MMC.
2872593 You put that in such an eloquent way xD
2872593 It says confided, not confronted. Meaning Luna told her what happened.
Well so much for being productive at work or in my shop, I still have to weld up a new frame section for my jeep. I officially hate you for making such an addictive story.
2706082 Why don't I remember this? This is my era of movies. I remember every other part of Hercules but this. (Likely cause girls still had cooties?) Lol
needs end " marks.
___________
Cap.
____________
cdn.estilo-tendances.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/06/sunday-photo-forgiveness-quotes-estilotendances-1.jpg
In canon i'd say that it's because Shining Armor has the Alicorn gene, since in canon Twilight was in possession of, and was able to unlock, the same.
Here, though? I just don't know.
7498145 oh you're going to open the genetic's can I see allow me to make a counter argument
s2.quickmeme.com/img/ac/ac0c27270a2fb6a7da5c92d8303a95d556b655bb4d55e54ec7ef75b7c232e0b8.jpg
7498145 wait this ones better
i1.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/403/462/379.png
7601905
what a gamer
Its the crystal empire... IT'S ALWAYS WINTER IN THE NORTH 😆
Even when it's summer it's winter
2872593
Personally she should let luna send him to the moon. If he can't break up with a girl and decides to play with 2 hearts at the same time well he deserves what he gets.