Mike is a typical teenager at a highschool in Copenhagen. But he is a brony, a group frowned upon by most of his country.
Already the first day at school he tells about his love for a little-girls cartoon and thinks his next three years just went down the drain. Until he sees a girl with eyes as the most beautiful amethyst.
This is my first fanfic ever so please say if theres anything you don't like, and i'll try to adapt.
Also super special thanks to Cabral095 for wanting to help me get started and giving me helpfull advise.
Chapters (4)
You know it's rather rare to see Octavia in this kind of setting. You have my interest. I'll be following this one.
Well, this is actually interesting.
I demand MOAR!!!
Seriously, this is good.
Following this, I'd like to see where it's gonna go!
Earned my favorite!
"In the music-apartment"
I assume you meant department?
He didn't have to reveal he liked ponies. If he knew it would make him a laughing stock, why did he?
"BUCKING"
oh god
”Ohh come on. What is so daunting about that.” Said the boy directly to my right with comforting tone."
You need a question mark, a comma, and a lowercase S.
This story just SCREAMS of self-insert.
wooooh danmark + octavia = win ..
Alright things I have to say... 1 you spelled add wrong riiiiiiiiiight --->(an eternity in heaven I might ad) there and I must admit, a little time, bit more effort, and maybe someone willing to be an editor and you'd be a damn good writer and this story could wind up even better
Name got my attention.
Picture got me interested.
Description brought me to read.
Story has been favorited.
It seems strange that I always find great Fics in the morning. Great work keep it up, Mac.
Missing commas is a few places but is otherwise fine. Idk who said It, but this does look Mary Sue in a way. You never described the main character either.
Not bad for a starter. Although the main character does seem to be a bit... I dunno, strange? Yeah, let's go with that. It's strange to see some guy tell the whole class (on the first day of school at that) that he watches a show originally aimed at girls. Usually people take some time before that are ready to tell anyone about it.
Well, it doesn't matter much, now, does it? I just hope you have a nice solid plot going on, what with Octavia being here and all.
i like it.....love to see these kinds of fics with Octavia......plus *grammar nazi helm activate* 2 Cellos...not Chellos *deactivate* but other than that this is beautiful....u my friend have a new stalker lol
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Yeah sorry about that, was so filled with giddy excitement of releasing the story that I have made a few mistakes.... okay maybe a lot. will do a better job with the next
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Dejligt at have en dansker med på vognen
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yes I shall try to do a better job for the next one. and I will try to learn how to use google docs. then cabral095 can help me with the editing if he wants. My brother has said that he would like to help next time too
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and Mike will be described in the next chapter 
yeah I sorta don't know the rules in English commas sorry
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He just likes to clean the table. he feels as if he lies to keep something out while saying the rest... besides thought he might as well could do it now that is was an assignment
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They are called 2Cellos watch them on youtube
Thank you all for the input it's much appreciated
Only a few spelling errors and the self insert gary stu feel.
Nice
I once told my entire class that I liked MLP during a presentation.
Thank god that it was English Class, cause the assignment was to create a poem, and I made a pretty good rap.
I think I hooked them in with this one.
Spike may be a baby dragon,
But don't call him lame, cause he's always on his swag wagon.
. . .Yeah. Bite me. I used the word 'swag'. But I got 'em.
Anyway, I'll be looking forward to your future chapters.
story favourited.
I approve
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glad to see that people like it
should have the second chapter up within the week
1614967 Sir, anyone who uses the phrase, "swag wagon", is a terrific individual in my book.
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1614906 Ik i love them so much.....all i ways saying is there was an un-needed "h" in the story (u put Chellos)....sorry for being grammer nazi
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*I know, I love them so much... all I was saying is thar it wasn't needed to have an "h" in the story(you put 'chellos')... sorry for being a grammar nazi.
Grammar nazi license revoked.
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okay yeah didn't remember I wrote it that way
I've only read up to the first music artist so far but here's what I have to say. YOUR MUSIC TASTE IS AMAZING! You legend.
1615099 hehe it's ok....it dosen't really take away from the story so...hell if u ever see any of my stories....boy would iit be a grammar nazi field day....o well...looking forward to moar!
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thanks and that's just the tip of the iceberg
I'll go more into detail with the music as I go on
Hmm.. definitely has potential. It could use some work as well, kinda reminds me of how my first fic was like. Except it wasn't a romance, was more like an adventure. If you want I could help you out a bit, but that is your choice. I'll track this to see how it goes.
I noticed that you spelled amethyst as "amathyst" not trying to be rude though
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Sorry used to have an auto writing control
It's okay so far, you've piqued my interest so this deserves a watch.
A lot of people have pointed out the problems with spelling and the like so I won't harp on any of those. The only thing I would say is that you really need to include more in this. The story is barely going and the chapter is done. You've done the minimum 1000 words which is what I think you were aiming for, now you need to go beyond that point and show us the rest of the story.
Just noticed a few spelling mistakes there, but that did not get in the way for me on reading this story.
Great job, so far! UP TOP! (Just so happens that I faved this, UP TOP!!)
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Swagtastic.
Alright.... I'll follow this...
I really like the way you are writing this story, keep up the great work! The thing that really gets me into the story, as being a typical 15-year old female 9th grader, is that the setting is in high-school, and this is a relatable story. The way you are writing it now just pulls me into it. I can't wait for the next chapter!
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Wait too the next chapter and see
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is highschool like in the 9th grade in the US or where your from
an interesting turn of events! a little editing, and you'll really go places with this one. Keep it up!
I'm glad to see your story is doing well Dean! Kep up the good work!
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yeah i never expected it to have almost 200 views, I mean I could cry from happiness
First human meets pony on earth that doesnt take place in the US i see
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Apparently. I don't know enough about the daily US so I chose my capital coltenhagen
1615848 Way too many take place in the US, just happy to see something else for a chance
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I got dirty mind.
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know what you mean
In Copenhagen? Do you happen to live there? Usually these stories take place in the US.
i love it i like seeing octavia in a story it has peaked my interest
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no but i am from denmark
also thought you needed a place you at least new the name of instead of my 30 people village called, and I kid you not "The Sand"
1616191 I've heard of stranger names for villages.