• Published 13th Nov 2012
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Mommy - Camlio



This was inspired by both the episode Dragon Quest and the Season 3 premier.

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The story

Luna's moon had passed it's zenith across the sky and the ponies of Ponyville slept peacefully knowing that the day was safe once more. Not only that but, the Crystal Empire was now safe and would be accepting Tourists for the second day of the Crystal Fair. Only one building had any waking occupants. The Golden Oaks library home to the Sister-In-Law of the Princesses Celestia and Luna. Not to mention the personal protege of the Solar Princess herself, Twilight Sparkle. She was awake attempting an all night study session as was her usual routine. But, this time something was different.

This time she had decided to pursue not the subject of Magic but, something much more personal. She had recalled a comment her number one assistant and best friend Spike had said a long time ago after the great dragon migration fiasco. "You're Not My Mother!" The anger that he said those words with still resounded in her heart. But, she didn't know why.

"Ohhh... This is so frustrating. None of my books can tell me anything on the subject. Even Princess Celestia didn't know what to do." She said with an exasperated sigh as she placed her head on the desk she was using. She had known Spike since she had hatched him. But, until recently she had only considered him a best friend or at best a little brother. But, during their adventure in the Crystal Empire when she saw Spike's reaction to his dark magic infused nightmare something clicked. She felt saddened that he would fear her sending him away. But, when she promised to never do anything of the sort her heart nearly burst with emotion as he hugged her.

That was nothing compared to the emotion she felt as she watched him save the Crystal Empire with the help of Princess Cadance. She was scared for his safety as he fell. She almost couldn't bear to watch but, when Cadance rescued him she was on the verge of joyful tears. "Why can't I place this feeling?" She said softly as she decided to go to bed. As she blew out the candle on the desk and lit her horn with an illumination spell she noticed something. A book she had left on the desk had fallen and opened to a different page.

Curious as to what was written on the page she decided to read. What was upon the page fit her feelings completely and when she checked the cover she had realized that she had dismissed the book on a hunch that it would not contain the answer. She chuckled inwardly as she recalled the fabled Poison Joke incident where she had done the exact same thing. "Well, I guess old habits die hard." She says with a happy sigh as she placed the book on the desk and headed upstairs to get some sleep. But, when she got upstairs she found that Spike was having another nightmare.

"N-No Twilight, please don't send me away... I-I promise that I won't break anything else... Please!" He cried out in his sleep the baby Phoenix Peewee sat worriedly beside it's master. It was then that Twilight had an idea. She levitated Spike over to her bed and snuggled him next to her.

"It's okay Spike. I'm here. I won't ever leave you. I promise." She said as she kissed the young drake on the forehead just below the crest. She had remembered that her own mother had done this for her when she was having a nightmare. Even if it was only a faint memory. But, it had the same affect, Spike calmed down almost instantly. But, before drifting off to sleep again he said something.

"I love you mommy." It was quiet but, it still brought proud tears to Twilight's eyes. Her question from earlier had been answered. She knew now exactly how she felt about Spike. She was more than his elder sister, she was his mother. Perhaps not by blood but, definitely by action she had proven it. As she kissed his forehead again she whispered.

"I love you too Son." She said with a smile before sleep claimed her as well.

Dear Princess Celestia,

It has taken me a long while to finally sort out my feelings about the young drake in my charge.
But last night when I had helped him through a nightmare the way my mother did something clicked.
So I hope it pleases you to know, that I have begun to file all the formal papers to make Spike Nathanial Sparkle my legally adopted Son. Wow that word will take some getting used too.
I have realized that the bond I had with Spike was much different from the bond of a sibling like I have with my brother Shining Armor.
I found it was much closer to the bond I had with my Parents except I was on the side of the caregiver.
I have come to realize that it's not blood that makes a parent. But, the desire to do what's best for your child. I wouldn't give up Spike for anything.
I'm sorry to say but, that even includes you Princess. Thank you for letting me raise him and in the process making me the luckiest mother in Equestrian history.
Your Faithful Student and Spike's new Mother, Twilight Sparkle.
P.S. What really settled it was him saying "I love you Mommy." When I comforted him.

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Celestia smiled as she read the letter that she had received via the mail that morning. "I'm proud of you my faithful student. I know you'll continue to raise your son well. Just like you always have." She says as she looks towards a shaded stained glass window that seemed to brighten. It's image conveyed a lavender unicorn astride a mighty purple dragon that breathed green flames. Upon the bottom of the glass there was an engraving written in the language of the dragons that had given Spike's egg to Celestia. "ekess hesi deevdru achuak ibafarshan yth fehlim nomeno lorsvek svadrav wux yor wer itov di wer dask ti dout kurjh nishka dout thatheo xkhat stejar" Which translated too... "To our son green flame we grant this prophecy when you learn the love of the mother not your own shall your destiny become visible."

"Good luck my little ponies." Celestia said with a smile as the credits began to roll.

Comments ( 43 )

This looks cool. If you want I can find you an awesome cover art:pinkiehappy:

1609029
That would be nice but, it's meant to be a one shot.

1609058 You sure? I got a really great one in another tab

1609061
If you want too. I'm not picky though.

1609069 Great! Hold on, I'll IM it to you

Short but sweet. I have rather a soft spot for any story involving Spike, particularly so when its about his and Twilight's relationship in parental terms.

Minor nitpicks, because I like to help for future readers.

purple dragon the breathed green flames

Meant to be 'that breathed'?

A few other minor things, but mostly comma placement which is something I do badly myself on occasion. Still, I did enjoy this one-shot quite a lot, good work.

1609078
Thank you. I'll fix that right away. I'm also really bad with commas. I don't know why, I just am.

1609085 Not a problem mate, I personally appreciate it when someone points out things I missed because it means the next reader will get to read in a slightly more correct form so I try to be helpful for others. I think my own comma problems come from how I'm used to talking and phrasing things, and invariably when I write something I'm thinking the words in a way similar to how I would say them and personal inflection risks being inserted. It might be something like that, or perhaps something you read frequently that uses commas in a certain way.

1609104
Mind telling me where you found that? I'm having a bit of trouble finding the part you mentioned.

1609107 The comma? At the start

Not only that but, the Crystal Empire

Maybe its just how I read it, but the the comma feels to me like it causing a pause too long there. There was another 'but' with it to.

Of course, it might just be how I read/write and be perfectly valid for someone else.

1609130
Not that... I meant the first mistake you pointed out... Also I can't find something if you only give me the mistake... The general area would be better seeing as I'm dyslexic.

1609135 Oh, didn't know that. Last large paragraph, roughly in the middle of it. I usually just use ctrl F to search part of it to help find it.

1609158
Found it thanks, and yeah I have dyslexia so please excuse some of the minor errors with commas and such... They are a real pain to keep track of.

this was so adorable

The ending foretells of a follow up fic in the future.

1609214
Thank you. I hoped for a feel good one shot and it appears I have delivered.

1609261
Perhaps... Perhaps not. Though I'm waiting till we get further into season three to decide.

1609287 Sweet. Hope to see more soon!:moustache:

This, this is why I wanted season 3, to cause a burst of inspiration in the community. Love the story by the way, bit short for my taste, but it was good all the same. :twilightsmile:

Even though there are lots of fanfics that have touched this topic before tihs one still make me feel all warm and fuzzy inside, Spike and Twilight really are an adorable family. :heart:

Lovely story, a bit short, but honestly I like it that way. :twilightsmile:

This, is a prime example of quality over quantity, I salute you. :ajsmug:

Honestly, I kinda hope this mother-son interpretation of Spike and Twilight's relationship fades away at some point. Twilight doesn't even treat him like a mother treats a son, she acts toward him like a close friend or older sibling who has to step into the role of a mother once in a while.

Lauren Faust originally intended for Celestia to have raised Spike before giving him to Twilight when they were both old enough to have a working relationship. Even if that's subject to change since she never established it as canon, I'm inclined to see it that way (partly because Spilight is one of my favorite romantic pairings when done right).

The show is aimed at little girls who are probably more likely to have little brothers rather than children. Spike is obviously meant to represent a little brother to Twilight to give the show's target audience a perspective on their own siblings.

The story itself was very heartwarming, but I still don't agree with it. Also, the same thing has been done better. You might enjoy reading Longing

Dawwwww in this story over 90000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000

Nathanial?

1697742
Who? Sorry mate. Not the right guy if your asking me.

1697772 Spike's middle name.

1698183
He didn't have a middle name and with Twilight being the uber adorkable nerd she is, had just picked something that seemed gallant. What with his fascination with being a knight due to fawning over Rarity.

I personally believe that Celestia named Spike and so Twilight gave him his middle name during this bit of story. As the middle name is my choice and the plot was mine.

1698515 actually bro his middle name is officially nathanial, I read it in severally her story's and on the wiki.

2432524
Huh? Well how about that? Thanks for the info mate.

2985267
I'll think on it. When I get the right mindset I'll probably do one. But, I want it to be good, and not just because I felt obligated you know?

yodajx10 recommended me read this story, and I'm glad he did. :twilightblush: Beautifully heartwarming story. :pinkiehappy: I don't care what others may say, but I feel the relationship between Twilight and Spike is mother/son, and it is a touching and unconditional bond. :heart:

3330406
Well thank you for the kind words, and it's amazing that people are actually recommending this story, I kinda did this as a sort of self-therapy after reading that one story, which sadly I cannot remember the name of in which Spike finds Twilight had written a letter to him on her deathbed.

I just really needed to write something cuteish and happy instead of sad.

This was beautiful:fluttercry: Please make more i want a sequel to this.

Damn the feels man it waaay to strong here.:raritycry:

I just found out I was adopted recently and I've been having parent issues since then. This helped so much. Stay classy you beautiful thing you.

3493071
Well, that's just... wow. That is something I never would have expected to hear and honestly you're welcome.

Wow. This was very touching. I can't believe this has been under my radar all this time. The emotion was just... wow.

Camlio, you are a great writer, and I'm proud to have had the honor of helping you with one of your stories. Keep up the good work friend.

Ok, beautiful story, but more importantly.....Was that the Dovah language at the end? :pinkiehappy:

3933930 It actually was not. It was actually Draconic Language from D&D which can be translated via this site

it is beautiful and sweet, but it is far to short, that is why i donĀ“t like one chapter storys. Befor you ask, why i still read those storys, i know a few good one shot storys.

5266204 I'm thinking that I really need to make a sequel to this at some point.

5266794 If I may make a suggestion. Perhaps a sequel that shows Twilight and Spike both adjusting to the new change in status. Possibly Twilight going overboard as she is prone to do.

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