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The Changelings very nearly took over Canterlot before being ejected. After Queen Chrysalis comes to in the middle of the Everfree Forest, she finds some unexpected company. And they aren't nearly as forgiving as Celestia would have been.

A/N: Re-written and expanded 6/5/13 (please read that if you are just happening upon the story). Image courtesy of Joakaha of DeviantArt. Marked Teen for violent material.

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Excellent story. It explains why Luna was absent during the wedding, as well as highlighting the Lunar Regent's nature in opposition to her sister. Luna's ruthless where Celestia is forgiving, more sensual as opposed to austere, and so on.

Well...it looks like there is a new 'Mare in the Moon.' And the changeling threat will be nothing but a memory. Luna is vicious. BTW, you forgot Rarity in naming the Elements.

There is a reason why they called her 'Nightmare Moon'.

I like it. It's really what I would expect from Luna. "Hurt my sister and our friends, will you?"

Luna is not a pony to be messed with.

Thanks guys. :pinkiehappy:

1609142 Well, there are two possible explanations. One is that, in the heat of the moment, it slipped Luna's mind as she were bending Chrysalis around various standing elements of the room. This is quite understandable given how much damage Cheesy could have caused. The second is that the author screwed up and spaced :raritydespair: like an idiot. This is corrected now and thanks for pointing it out. :raritywink:

Invincible warrior goddess Luna is best Luna.

Sup guys.

Here it is, for what it's worth. I got a couple of messages that felt the story could have been expanded, and I agreed with that.

Thumbs up if you like or comment and tell me why I suck.

ONWARD!

Nicely written, but the only thing I doesn't like is that the changelings are portrayed as purely evil; I mean yes they need love to survive, but it's how they were bron, right? They didn't have a chance at all, I can understand Chrysalis being banned to the moon, but the rest of the changelings being killed? That's quite unfair if you ask me :ajbemused:

I always appreciate good ol' fashioned vengeance. And it came with nice heaping scoop of curb stomping, my favorite!

2684917 True, but as the poet said, "In times of war, the law falls silent." As I saw it, the changlelings very nearly defeated Canterlot and Equestria. As such, given the invaders represented a "clear and present danger" to everypony involved, they needed to be dealt with accordingly. Who better than the pony who was once Nightmare Moon?

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In my opinion, they weren't portrayed as pure evil, per se. The only non-Chrysy thought process we have is the changeling drone that wants to try to save his comrade, but gets stopped prematurely by the dispel.
If we're talking about the pony reactions to the scattered changelings, treating them as though they were evil for doing what they need to do to survive? I see that as simply understandable as well. We put down animals that hurt us, hunt down wild ones that pick off humans, and generally react poorly to anything that might hurt us; a society wouldn't let creatures that feed specifically off of their citizens live near them.

TCSNxs, enjoyed revisiting your story =) Thanks for sharing it with us

Well damn, that was pretty kick ass of Luna, something I would expect to see from her. Nice story.:rainbowkiss:

2684984 Thanks. :twilightsmile:
I think you hit it with the "we hurt animals that hunt us" comment as it pertained to my line of thinking on it. Usually I've pictured the changelings as a collective mind, so aside from basal levels of thought, they were like a pack. But still capable of harm unless they were dealt with. Given the humiliation :trollestia: and the rest of the crew shared, I'd find it hard to fault them. It was basically a state of war. We'll agree to disagree here I think, but I see your point.

Heh - every government has their 'men in dark suits'. Looks like Equestria is no exception.
It still doesn't explain what Luna was doing during the events of the day, but it does let her off being late to the reception.

However, I did notice a couple of problems, neatly encapsulated in this one sentence;

"My name is Princess Luna, Lunar Regent and Diarch of Equestria."

Firstly - no. Her name is _Luna_. Possibly with a second name. Her _titles_ are 'Princess, Lunar Regent and Diarch of Equestria'. Were she to abdicate the throne, she would _not_ need to change her name, yet she would no longer be able to introduce herself as such. Therefore, the correct form is 'I _am_ Princess Luna, etc'. This also goes for military figures - their rank is _not_ part of their name. They do _not_ change their name on promotion. So they shouldn't name themselves as such.

Secondly - 'Lunar Regent'. A regent is an official appointed to office when the actual office-holder is incapable of performing their duties. For example, during her banishment, Celestia would have been Solar Princess, and Lunar Regent.
So Luna, being the rightful Sovereign of the Night Sky, _cannot_ be regent. The closest I can come would be 'regina Lunaris', which effectively translates to '(female) ruler of the Moon'.

Still, that trifling matter aside, this is a very nice fic. I look forward to seeing more.

Definitely better then original version, after reading the previous one i couldn't stop laughing imagining Chrissy as a gigantic pony shaped bloated tick. :pinkiecrazy:
This version is no nonsense, curb stomping and immensely satisfying ending to the Canterlot wedding. Now all i can say is: Do NOT buck with Luna. :moustache:

Who better than Luna? It fits my head-canon that she'd be Equestria's field commander. If she's the opposite and equal of Celestia, she'd be utterly ruthless in war or in defending the nation.

Utterly ruthless.

2685212 Points taken. But the "Lunar Regent" title is by design. I've used Celestia and Luna, or alicorns in general, as a "living aspect" of something. Sun, Moon, Love, and Magic (with the advent of Twilicorn) all, to me, govern the lives of ponies. Given that, and that how such concepts don't "speak for themselves", it made sense to have somepony "speak" for them. Just how I saw it.

Thanks for the feedback. Tis very much invaluable. :yay:

A few minor grammatical errors - for example;

It was the closest verbiage she could fathom, but she was passed that.

Should probably read 'past'.
And, at the point where Luna is revenging herself upon Chrysalis, she says;

“By chance, have you met the Elements of Harmony?

But then goes on to say;

But I haven't even gotten to my friends.

And proceeds to list... the Elements of Harmony. As though they were completely seperate people. This is slightly odd.

Other than that, and a few others which really didn't detract all that much at all from the story, this is a positively _delightful_ read.

2685247>>2685233>>2684945 Thanks guys. It means a ton. :pinkiesmile:

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I didn't see it that way. Luna referred first to the Elements, and Chrysalis knew about them, of course. What she didn't know was that the Elements were also Luna's friends. That sort of takes it up a notch.

Well, this gives a new meaning at all the "to the moon" jokes.

And that brutal curb-stomping was GLORIOUS, it fit with my mental image of the royal sisters, with Celestia being more subtle while Luna being direct to the point...in this case "the point" being Chyrsalis head.

Adding to fav list.:yay:

2684966 Yes, but the changelings didn't hurt or killed anyone, right? Luna just commanded to exterminate an ENTIRE race because they tried to survive! They have given Nightmare Moon (Luna) a second chance, even if she nearly killed everyone on the planet (same counts for Discord).
If they got imprisoned in dungeons or in the moon like Chrysalis it would be okay, killing them was nothing more than a very cruel war-crime, which Celestia approved of...

2685437 Inter arma enim silent leges. I get what you're saying my friend, I do. But consider the lowly bacteria, some of which is harmful beyond measure. You don't make peace with those strains, despite the fact they are just wanting to survive.

As far as not hurting anyone, the changelings themselves did battle and capture the Elements, probably imprisoned Cadance and trapped Celestia, and imprisoned more then a few of the citizens. That's a bit outside of "wanting to survive".

FWIW, it did leave the "provision" of leaving some be and dealing with them "if the need arose".

heh You know it's awesome when folks can argue the semantics of a cartoon.

That
Was
AWESOME! !!!!

Note to self. You dont wanna get curbstomped by luna XD

i am geussing for her own safetey then celestia left out how she abandoned twilight? how she scorned her? treated her as a child?

anyway i like your portrayl of luna, warrior luna always seems the most plausible as the moon is commonly connected to warriors and hunters.

2684917 Evil or no, they still attacked and destroyed much of Canterlot. And they do seem to be quite aware of their actions, so to say that they are blameless isn't a fair observation. But the way I see it, they weren't being killed for their evil, but for their hostile action against the capitol of the nation of Equestria. The only evil I see in any of the changelings, is their Queen. But that still does not make the rest of the hive faultless.

Aside from that, changelings in real mythology stole babies, so there's that.
-Silver Quill

2685585 Just Celestia, huh? What about Shining Armor? Or her friends? Or anypony else for that matter? Shouldn't they also get a taste of Luna's wrath then, since they also did all those horrible things that Celestia did?

I'm sorry. I preferred the original.:pinkiesick:

However, she still felt vulnerable with the protection of either.

Probably should be either 'without' or 'neither'.

I like this, but I prefer the simplicity of the original ending more. Still gives me chills though.

I expected after Chrysalis shot the green magical bolt of death and Luna deflected and pushed her down for Luna to say "BITCH, DO YOU THINK WE ARE EQUAL?"

2689054 heh As boss a line as it would be for a crazed Luna to say "Oh, that's so cute the way you tried.", I don't think that that would have worked in the overall flow of the story.

2687283>>2686235 I liked it as well, but I felt it could have done with an expansion. But that's why I left it up.

"I believe you've met by sister, [...]

Is that a typo or done on purpose?

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