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We're all afraid of something. Some ponies fear death. Some ponies fear tightly enclosed rooms. However, many ponies will agree that children will usually fear the same things at some point in their lives. They're afraid of simplistic things, of course, like strangers and the dark. Snails, unlike other foals, isn't scared of the dark. He's scared of what hides inside it.

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That boy got issues...
But seriously, that was pretty good.

Some intriguing stuff here, lovely description of the dark and that which lurks in it. You may want to consider putting Snail's Dad's voice in italics, rather than in brackets to make the separation more seamless, but it's still very much up to you. Write on, I say, write on! :ajsmug:

I enjoyed very much, especially after reading a "popular" story, that was just flat. For once in quite a while, I can say I actually read every word in this story!

I agree with Apologetic that the parent's dialog should be italicized.

The wrap up was a little quick, but still a nice twist. You had me going for a second. :twilightsheepish:

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Understood. I'll clean that all up soon as I get the chance. Thanks so much for taking the time to read. c:

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