Despite learning of the Equastria's doom from a prophet, Princess Celestria trusts her faithful student more, so when danger lurks, she puts her faith in Twilight Sparkle rather then an old ally. Will this be a mistake of the Princess, will the prophet change the future as he wishes, or will Twilight prove him wrong?
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I feel evil tonight...
This seems interesting, and is the Doctor a time lord or not in this time line?
I'm just going to comment on the intro before I read on. It has the same "don't read this book because it has terrible things and is depressing" kind of tone similar to Lemony Snicket's books. Is that intended or coincidental?
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It's just meant to show that it's something Celestia doesn't exactly want to share the story.
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Nah, I'm gonna reduce him to a minion level.
Later in the story, I may take him out of the character list.
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Oh okay..
The plot looks intriguing so far. I hope you have as much writing this fic as I do reading it. (reading is my addiction)
* some notes here: you misspelled prefers, 'no' before 'the Princess' should be 'now', in 'her own hoofs' it should be 'hooves', not sure Celestia would use the contractions here but that's up to you, the then in 'rather then through politics' should be 'than'. Not sure, but maybe it should be Empress since Princess is more relevant to a monarchy or pseudo-monarchy such as Equestria has. Below, I have corrected what seemed particularly important and changed it to red.
Err, I can understand that you might have conceived this before S3 canon, but shouldn't Celestia have known that Cadence would end up there since Celestia knew about the Crystal Empire and ex-King Sombra? Cadence was her first choice? If Cadence isn't a viable option then she wasn't really Celestia's first choice.
You might want to run this through some kind of spellchecker. For example:
* slight grammatical issue there I think with then/than.
Anyway, I think you can see what I mean.
This is going pretty well so far.
Looking forward to hearing more about this Arcane Tower business, though. How does this relate to the canon Hearth's Warming story. I.e. were there unicorns before the tower? When was the tower built? Is it in Canterlot proper, and if so was the castle built around it? Is it invisible, where did the Elements of Harmony come from if they are the only means Celestia has to access it? I take it that she placed the magical barrier around it in the first place?
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Yes, I did wrote this before the S3 premier, and since I wanted to upload the first chapters on the same day it did, I had to make a pretty hasty change. I'm also the first to admit that I'm not the best speller. Hell, in real life, I'm not the best speaker either. :p
Also, for your other comment about canonuity (see? I know I misspelled that one), keep in mind that we know nottin about where Discord came from and how he came to ruling Equastria,
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What do you write this with? That's Equestria to you! 
:P
Hmm... I see. Err, hasty change? That's what spellcheck is for!
I think that would be 'I did write...' or 'I wrote'
Pardon my compulsion to point out spelling errors... please?
More chapters???
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Well the one problem with my computer is that it doesn't have wordperfect or any writing program with spell check, so I'm stuck with simply being careful with my spelling. :P
And yes, I hope to add a new chapter by tonight.
The only real problem I have with the story is that Dr.hooves has a role as a lackey. (I just can't see him calling someone else "master" it Doesn't feel right.) The DR. has always been the captain of his own ship. (maybe he's a spy?)
(there should be a 20% cooler emoticon but this will do)
Other than that and a few minor typos this is awesometastic!
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If it makes you feel better, Whooves is the right-hand man (or pony) of Chronos in the story.
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I've seen many characters go by the name of "Chronos" but I don't know the reason he in particular is respected. The Doctor is the last Time Lord for crying out loud. For me it's annoying to see him like this. (by the way I'm not angry I just like expressing my opinion even if nobody wants to hear it. Guess who wasn't popular in school and has two thumbs. This guy!)
Anyway It's not that big of a deal since Chronos probably is
god moddedPowerful enough to be deserving of the respect he's given in the story.1660904
You forgot right Hoof.
It's okay citizen I'm just glad I could help! Up UP and AWAY!!!
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Well, here's one reason why I decided not to make the Doctor the leader.
Do you think I would get much appriciation if I turned him into the bad guy?
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I don't know much about the other Doctors but I do know that the 11th can be really scary when he's pissed.
The Doctor will do alot of things to save the Universe. He'll resort to drastic measures to accomplish his goals.
Becoming a Villain to save all of reality isn't too far-fetched.
The Doctor is already walking a thin line between Good and Evil. If he didn't have companions to be his restraint he might actually become Evil.
(I'm not arguing because of the disagreement, I'm arguing because I want to be right)
I'm just Saiyan.
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I have the perfect arguement.
I know nothing about Dr. Who, so I can't really make any jokes or crossovers with it.
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There are free word processing programs out there, with spellchecking, if you'd prefer to use one. For instance, LibreOffice or AbiWord. What operating system do you use?
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You... I... but... Really?... you know nothing about him? (that's a reason to not include him at all)
That's not a good thing. You can't write a fic with a character you know nothing about in it... or do you consider DR.Hooves to be different than DR.Who? Are you saying you know about DR.Hooves but not DR.Who?
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Well the way I see it, I feel it's a nice change of pace by not having Whooves be Dr Who. I guess if there is a reference to the character I'm using, he's been inspired from the video "Doctor Whooves and the Assisstant." Now I know in the video, he IS the Doctor, but again, my version isn't. I guess I've just been treating him as a nice, polite, british sounding pony who cares about the time stream. I'm just trying to use him my own way.
And in my defence, it's not like the two Doctors being the same is canon or anything, It's just what most fans do.
OH! A fun fact: You know how in the that video where he wanted to be ginger and was obsessed with unicorns? Well, that's exactly what Nostalgia is.
Whew. Long comment.
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That's why I asked if YOU thought they were the same. I can accept the fact that he's DR.Hooves based because that one is made up.. I mean non-Canon. (because duh, they're both made up characters.)
Now heres what I have to ADD (It's an acronym for what I have HA!) anyway.
He could have already been told about or read about, or saw what's happening thus making it impossible to do anything different, Making him an unwilling participant.
(something like that actually happened in an episode before)
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Make the Doctor more Empathetic and portray him as caring. He seems sort of like a robot in his reasoning.
Again maybe he's a spy?
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Actually, i plan on having him be more caring in the next chapter, since I plan on giving "someone" a small, yet somewhat important cameo.
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hmm? I only hope I know what you're talking about. Because it would be awesome if I was right.
*sigh* A Person can dream can't he?
But I was wrong last time so what's to say I'l be right this time?
The Doctor has a contingency plan to save Derpy and Dinky by having them leave, and the whole of Equestria isn't safe?
He must be preparing for a Nuclear level disaster.
I will wait patiently for The Doctor to elaborate in a future chapter.
Dunsparce thought of World of Warcraft when he saw the title.
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Yeah, I thought of World of Warcraft when I came up with the title too. I was probably thinking of wow subconsciously at the time. There's also gonna be another aspect similar to one used in wow when the story reaches its end, but I'm not gonna spoil a thing.
1716904 Well Dunsparce hopes its better than what Blizzard gave us
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Aww, you don't like the Pandas?
1716996 Dude Dunsparce loves the pandas. Dunsparce meant HoT. Deathwing. DS. All bullshit.
Only a few grammatical mistakes.
Overall a good chapter.
The tensions are growing, Our heroes are getting closer to their destination, their enemies already preparing for the inevitable conflict.
Will they defeat Chronos, or are they destined to fail? Stay tuned for the next episode of Dragon Ball Z! err... I mean Hour of Twilight!
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/TakeAThirdOption Come on twilight you can figure out a third option to this one...
Option three? Derpy.
(Boop her nose.)
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That is the greatest option ever!
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Maybe she didn't leave after all. Maybe she has a sixth "Derp" sense, and knew that her friends needed help.
Derpy could use her cuteness to convince the Doctor to assist Twilight.
Of course that would be impossible at this point, but it's nice to think about.
This is a really great story. I really enjoy it. I'm looking forward to part two of the fight with chronos and twilight.
just started the series, and so far it seems great! the spelling errors kinda bug me, but then again i always was a little bit to picky. i just hope it has a happy ending. i hate sad endings, they always make me cry before i go to sleep.
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I admit, my spelling isn't 100% perfect. But lately I've been putting my work through an online spell checkers, so there's a crapton less spelling mistakes in after the first or second chapters.
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good to here. like i said, im usually an over picky person so don't take it to heart. the words were easy enough to figure out so no harm done.
Nope -- I do not think she should have listened to chronos -- listened to her heart maybe -- listened to pinkie pie definitely but chronos -- nope.
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Umm...what?
...Yeah, good luck with that, Twilight. If you haven't crossed the Moral Event Horizon before now, you just did.
1935409 the description on the front page of fimfiction today. It had your story. The description was a little different than the description of your story on http://www.fimfiction.net/story/62603/hour-of-twilight . The front page version of the description of this story featured the word "celestria"
see the picture: i.imgur.com/SuoeL.png
Well if it becomes non-magical world then all she did was what Chronos wanted to do without killing every unicorn and many of the other ponies.
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Thank you for pointing that out. Just fixed it. Can't believe I never noticed that.
1967963 its an easy error to make. just takes an index finger 0.5 cm off target then bam! "tr" no problem though, I figured someone spamming "celestria" can grab someone's attention, but it doesn't really tell them whats up.
also, this story is going on my "to read" list. honestly, I wish I read more stories than I do, but there are like a bajillion stories uploaded per day, i'm quite sure its not humanly possible to read all fimfiction fics. I did chance upon this one though, and it does seem to have a good plot line, and lord knows I don't read enough fics featuring dr. whooves, or time turner, or I'm supposing "chronos" in this fic, so it'll be read! (give me a couple days though)