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When Fluttershy realizes she has feelings for Rarity she goes back to her old ways and fears that Rarity will learn about these feelings. Little does she know, Rarity may be feeling the same way, equally as doubtful and fearful.

Pets and CMC hardly mentioned, so they aren't tagged. They just add nothing to the plot to be worth crediting, in my opinion.

This is my first, constructive criticism is widely accepted, just don't obliterate my very being :p

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I tried to give this a shot, but literal emo-Fluttershy...no.

Spelling and grammar were mostly fine; content was rushed and just plain bleh. The half star is only because I can't give zero.

...meh...

I don't like the emo thingy... Ah well might as well track.

Emo Fluttershy?
Author experiences? IDK

Not as horrible as the others said but it was a little rushed..

Very rushed, and literal emo Fluttershy was just ugh.

:facehoof:
Try spend more time on it next time, and perhaps put less focus on the cutting scene than you actually did. You could've done worse, but definitely better too.

Not bad. Could need a little work, but besides that, it seems legit. 3/5 stars (':moustache:');

Too rushed, Rarity was out of character, Fluttershy "OH FEED THE ANIMALS" you haven't put any thought into character depth, just "What needs to happen for my story to work right now, buck the characters" :derpyderp2:

Also, point of order: Fluttershy is the OLDEST. Just saying. "Now we're all old enough to drink"...Err, that would be Fluttershy only, I'm sorry, and she's not the sort to drink alone now is she? Or, again, buck the characters, right :twilightangry2:

Bucking Emoshy. Really. Pinkie I could understand she's obviously WAY too happy and extroverted to not be depressed :pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy:
But Fluttershy in The Return Of Harmony pretty much destroyed all possibilities of her being literally Emo.

Eugh. Time of death for this fic? 9:45.

132439 Thats why I like you as a critique-er. You don't just say the story is dead and can't be revived, you try and help the person fix it. Awesome.


And Mr./Mrs. Author, listen to him. He knows what he's talking about.

I havent read the story yet but I want to make sweet love to whoever drew that picture lol. That is the cutest fucking thing I've ever seen

Minor author expierence, first fic and not trying to rush it, and its experimental. Ive never seen it done so why not -shrugs-

132471
My friend irl from Deviantart drew it for me. I could post his UN if you wanted to follow him on that

I love it :) Emo Fluttershy ain't bad considering you can tell how the author felt at the time -cough- :trixieshiftright:

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