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Lightless Void


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Sometimes we forget who we really are. We ignore things that should be important until we forget they were even there and end up locked away in forgotten places in our hearts. But no matter what happens, we can never hide from ourselves. This is the story of when people meet, even when they were never meant to do so. A story that shows us how alien we can be to other worlds... Or to ourselves.

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 261 )

Hmmm... interesting. I'll fav this for now to keep up with it. :ajsmug:

As for review stuff- your grammar and writing seems fine, the plot is just beginning but alluring, and I eagerly await the next chapter. :pinkiehappy:
Do not disappoint me. :pinkiecrazy:

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Second this. The only error i found was a not having a space here 'and disappeared entirely.The'
This seems very interesting. I'll be following to see where this goes; don't disappoint your new fans that read this!

Ah, thanks for the kind words! I shall work on it... But not right now. I should have more in about a week or so. Until then!

And thus, the story takes off with our two main characters! Enjoy guys.

RFA

Finally this story is here.

This is interesting. So far its pretty different from other HiE fics. I like that you didn't just throw him into ponyland and have him just accept everything out of hand. :ajsmug:

And the dark visions Twilight is experiencing, could this be.... FORESHADOWING?!?! :pinkiegasp:

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Could be my dear sir, but I am not one to provide spoilers.

Took a step back as he became more panicky

You started a paragraph with this. That's the only mistake I saw.

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Ah, thanks for that! Looks like one mistake slipped through the cracks. Fixed!

Sorry for the delay everyone, here's the next chapter! Hope you all enjoy it.
I'll see you all next year for the next chapter.

Comment posted by Lightless Void deleted Dec 28th, 2012

This is awesome.

Just gotta say, though, I normally avoid stories with just Sad and Dark as tags. They're normally quite depressing. This definitely counts as dark, not so sure about sad yet.

Looking forward to next chapter.

I have no idea what this story is about...
But according to FiM Fic I have read it, liked it and Favorited it.....

I forgot about this story. Read chapter two and then three. It's pretty bitchin'. No lie bro. Seriously though, this fic is going places.

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That's exactly what I was thinking as I read this chapter.

Also you started a paragraph with this.

.Twilight

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Ah, thanks! Edited it asap.

Chapter 4 is pretty much done, just need my friend to look it over and pick out all the little errors I missed. Chapter 5 is well underway, so no need to worry, I'm still working on this, despite the delays!

Next chapter is up! Hope you'll all enjoy it, and I'll hopefully see you all sooner, rather than later, for the next chapter

What's happening ?!? Is Alex's presence creating those shadow creatures ? Why can't he see them ? Why ? Wut ? Huh ? I WANT ANSWERS !!! :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

-Twitches-

Son of a shanx!

Who let the dimensional shadow demon's cage weaken to that point!? Lazy, all of you are lazy!!

Ohhh this is an intresting story.
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Dang lying spectres, always mucking up the truth. Guess it's time to get the Ghostbusters to take care of the suckers :pinkiehappy:

I leveled the likes bar at 100. Feel like a boss.

holy crap.

the song 'There she is' goes so damn well.

also, good story. it iz dark

A fitting quote:

"Monsters? They looked like monsters to you?"
-Vincent

2159434 I like the reference

Wow, this is an interesting twist for sure. I was expecting Alex to face the mane six and die by their hooves, not for him fight off a damn chimera and gain a smidge of their trust in the process.


Good deception skills, you have. Hat's off to you, good sir:ajsmug:

Very cool chapter. I was not expecting it to happen in such a way. Keep up the good work. I am excited to see where this goes. :twilightsmile:

great chapter! keep up the good work:pinkiehappy:

i would have some manner of break in between him losing and regaining consciousness

1637714 Foreshadowing, that one thing that an incredible number of fictions on this site forget to do... I'm glad that somebody else is actually pleased at its inclusion.

Well done that Author, too :twilightsmile:

Man walked back into Eden, bringing with him all the evil of the world.

Humans, monster killers since we could make pointy sticks.:raritywink:

I like this story. Another chapter, good sir. Post haste.

I'm glad you're all enjoying it! Will post more as soon as it's done.

Aru

Pointy stick. More effectice than magic in some ocasions.
I'm really hooked. I like where is this going even if I have no slightest idea what is going on, and this is the reason why I like it so much! We knew only what characters know. One thing is sure, human is used as a source of this.... disease.

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I don't think he is being used as the source; the creature that summoned Alex into Equestria is using him as a sort of scapegoat. Pin the blame of everyponies problems on the weird creature nopony recognizes, while it gathers its strength from the mayhem around it.

Basically, buck this is intense. :rainbowderp::pinkiegasp:

Aru

2182922 Well.... in my opinion human can be one of the sources. The one to be blame , to be focused on. After all Twilight is going to try to free human from this, she is going to find out that he have not a single idea what the hell "Father" is. He is a victim like the others here, dragged from another world straight into shitstorm of middle of Everfree.

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But remember, the shades COULD warp her vision of him again. It's not as likely, now that the mane 6 have been reunited and are happier, but the shades might be able to feed off the rest of the town, and use the power from THAT, to screw with Twi + Crew.

Eh, this is also partly my pessimistic side looking for the worst option I can think of, so when something happens it hopefully won't be as bad as I thought. :pinkiehappy:

Aru

2183125 Enough. Or we will potentially spoil everything from this conversation xD Time to wait, to see what is going to happen next. And maybe, finally Twi is going to send actual letter to Celestia...

-Looks at pointy stick, looks at Chimera-

Psh, this isn't fair at all. . . come back with five more of yah and I might have a morning workout!

But yeah, Humans are exceptionally good at dishing out stabby stabby death.

D48

This is very interesting. I really like the twists you are adding and am very much looking forwards to the first real meeting which will presumably happen next chapter.

Next chapter is up! Enjoy everyone, and my apologies for the long delays.

2329239 Are shades making themselves visible 0ot Twilight deliberatly and remaining undetected to everyone in order to make her seem crazy to everyone else?

It's because Twilight is the element of magic. She can see more and do more magic then anyone else can.

One might say it was an ability an alicorn usually has. :D

Could be she can see them since she has used dark magic before.

most of the pain she was in last night from the cuts and bruises she suffered last night didn’t bother her

I would suggest removing the first "last night" because it currently feels rather awkward. :twilightsmile:

as long as he’s within my care, he shall receive the best treatment Equestra has to offer!

Equestria* :raritywink:

The friars led the group up till the doors leading into the quarantined ward, at which point they led the girls go their own way.

Pretty sure you meant let* :pinkiehappy:

when she herself cannot be present to deal with a situation, gives the owner it was assigned too full authority.

I think in this instance "too" should be "to" because we are not talking as if another has this seal, and he does too*, but because it was given to* him. :scootangel:

Just thought I would point those out to help. :pinkiehappy: Now, for my actual opinion on the chapter and story so far. . .
I'm hooked. I saw this update, and had to think about what the story was about for a moment to refresh my memory, but once I remembered, I sqee'd a bit. :twilightblush: I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.

Also, my speculation on why only Twi can see the the shades is because the creature that summoned our human into Equestria is trying to extend the suspicion against the human as long as possible, keeping the Mane 6 from looking for other sources. By only having Twi see this, it will leave others skeptical of her, but when people try and help her confirm it, they wont be able to. Because the Mane 6 are essentially the only threat for whatever the villain is, by keeping everyone from backing them, and more specifically, Twilight, they wont have the resources to beat the villain. :scootangel: I think.

please I nead MOAR im hooked at this like a junkie on heroine

“That wouldn’t be ‘the’ Professor Whitemane, the physician of Princess Celestia’s royal court?”
Name changed. halfway through.

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