The Wonderbolt family touched down on the outskirts of Ponyville. Rainbow Blitz shivered as he gazed at the fringes of the Everfree Forest. He didn’t know why the foliage froze his heart, but he was certain it was one mystery he could leave unsolved. Soarin’ noticed Blitz’s involuntary spasm, and was quick to react in his usual manner.
“He’s cold Dashie! I knew we should’ve packed a sweater! Why did we think a scarf would be enough to keep him warm?”
“I’m not cold, Daddy,” Blitz said dryly. “I just don’t like that forest. I really don’t like that forest.”
He hopped off his father’s back, landing smoothly on the soft grass. Several butterflies scattered from their shelter in the turf, spiraling above his head and fleeing into the forest.
“See Soarin’, I told you there wasn’t anything to worry about.”
“I still say we should’ve taken the saddle,” her husband replied, disgruntled that his son had maintained his seat the entire flight.
“Oh, I don’t know about that. He’s such a big boy now, aren’t you, Rainbow Blitz?”
All three pegasus ponies turned their attention toward the new, tender, and remarkably sweet voice. There was no mistaking the soft-yellow pegasus pony, her pink mane and tail sprouting like the petals of a delicate flower. Fluttershy turned her gaze behind her, one eyebrow raised quizzically at a soft green light radiating from the foliage.
“Don’t you want to say hello to your friend?”
“In a second, Mom,” a gruff voice responded. “I’m casting a spell that hypnotizes these snakes into thinking they’re rabbits. Hehehe, you should see the looks on their faces when they see each other, hahahaha.”
“Capricorn!” Fluttershy gasped. “That’s not a very nice thing to do! Now you undo that spell right now and say hello to our friends, young colt!”
“Fiiiine,” the voice whined. The light disappeared with the sound of rustling grass. Rainbow Blitz smiled as a colt around his age emerged from the brush. While his blonde mane was cut fairly short, it retained his mother’s smooth, flowing image in the areas it didn’t split around his horn or from cowlicks. His salmon-colored coat contrasted pleasantly with his teal eyes, though his most interesting feature was the pair of wings that sprouted from his back. The alicorn colt bumped hooves with his friend, chuckling in a rough voice.
“Rainbow Blitz, my favorite prankster. I thought I’d never see you again after that gag at the Summer Sun Celebration.”
All parents present flinched at the memory of that particular ceremony. While Rainbow Dash and Soarin’ were still humiliated about their son ruining one of Princess Celestia’s most sacred traditions, Fluttershy’s main concern was over the condition of her bird friends after they flew away in panic. Capricorn continued, despite the embarrassed looks the two Wonderbolts were radiating.
“It’s a good thing too. Your pranks are hardcore, but at least nopony gets really hurt. I can’t tell you how many bruises I’ve gotten from Surprise’s pranks, although I gave her some nice ones in return.” He stopped a hoof on the ground, leaving a threatening imprint in the grass.
“Cappy, shame on you! Violence is never the answer, and you should know better than to hit a girl! Surely Princess Celestia taught you better than that! Surely I taught you better than that!” Fluttershy protested, visibly flustered from her son’s violent statement.
“Surprise isn’t a girl,” Capricorn grumbled. “She’s a demon in filly skin.”
“Cheers to that,” Rainbow Dash drawled absent-mindedly. The shocked stares from all four ponies brought her back to reality. “Oh… did I say that out loud? Hehehe… oops.”
“Oh, I’m sure her heart is… in the right place,” Fluttershy said, though the lack of certainty in her delivery didn’t show she believed in her own statement. She turned her attention to Soarin’. “Now then, just to make sure everypony is happy, I have a nice schedule for us to follow for the whole day. We’ll go back and finish feeding my animal friends at the cottage, and then it’s off to this nice little café that serves these tasty and healthy salads. After a yummy lunch, we’ll go to Sugarcube Corner for a little treat, and then to the library where Twilight can teleport us to Cloudsdale.”
“Is it safe to teleport that far?” Soarin’ asked nervously.
“She’s teleported us farther with less time to concentrate Soarin’, calm down already,” Rainbow Dash badgered. She changed her demeanor quickly, addressing Fluttershy. “It sounds like an awesome plan, Fluttershy. Thank you so much for watching him while we rehearse the show, and thanks a bunch for volunteering to take him too. You know Spitfire would have given us time to pick him up, especially since the media’s expecting a little routine from him too.”
“Oh it’s no trouble at all, Rainbow Dash,” Fluttershy politely replied. “And the tickets you gave us was such a nice gesture. Cappy has wanted to go to a Wonderbolt’s show for quite some time now. Although, I do know he wished his father could take him instead-“
“Don’t sweat it, Mom,” the alicorn colt interrupted, waving a hoof in the air casually. “Dad’s busy punishing bad guys in the Princess’ courts, I get it.”
“He uses lie detection spells and many others to solve cases, Capricorn! He doesn’t punish them!” Fluttershy barked. Suddenly aware of her raised volume, she blushed, scuffing a hoof on the ground awkwardly. “So, um, I guess this is where we go now. Now don’t you worry about a thing, Soarin’. His medical information is backed up in the Ponyville hospital, I have access to several messengers in case of emergency, I’ve been trained in CPR, and Twilight is just a short walk away in case he needs to be teleported anywhere. I know he doesn’t have any allergies, but I have a list of common allergenic foods to avoid, just in case.”
Soarin’ gawked, unable to think of any paranoid worries to add to Fluttershy’s extensive list. Rainbow Dash laughed, patting him roughly on the back.
“Hehehe, you should see the look on your face, Soarin’! I knew Fluttershy would be the one pony that could leave you speechless when it came to Blitz’s safety. Now c’mon we got practice. Give Mommy and Daddy a kiss, Rainbow Blitz.”
Blitz obliged with a strong blush tingeing his cheeks, mostly due to Capricorn’s snickering. He watched in awe as Soarin’ and Rainbow Dash took off into the air at high speeds, quickly fading into the distance. A familiar sensation overtook him, as it always did: loneliness.
“Are you all right, Rainbow Blitz?”
Fluttershy’s question brought the colt out of his trance.
“Huh? Uh… yeah, sure. Let’s go feed some critters!” He smiled with fake enthusiasm, hoping to fool his sitter. Fluttershy cocked an eyebrow in suspicion but said nothing. She led the way into town, giving the two colts appropriate space for private conversation.
“Soooooo,” Capricorn began. “You miss them, don’t you?”
Rainbow Blitz scrunched his eyes in confusion.
“Miss what now?”
“Your parents, you doofus. I saw the look on your face when they took off. You looked like my Mom after she releases her monarch butterflies into the wild for their migration.” He smirked as Blitz’s cheeks took on a rosy hue. “There’s no point in denying it. Your face says everything.”
Rainbow Blitz hung his head, avoiding any eye contact with his companion. Capricorn pinned his ears back in regret as he tried to think of a way to backpedal out of the topic. The two continued to drift further from Fluttershy as they slowed their pace.
“Hey now, it’ll be okay! I’m sure you’ll get to go to their practices eventually, just gotta wait a little is all.” He winked theatrically, hoping to lift the mood. Blitz drew his head up, making direct eye contact.
“Don’t you miss your Dad, Cappy?”
The young alicorn drew back in surprise at his question.
“Well, not really. I mean if I was in anypony else’s horseshoes I probably would. He works long hours, but he takes me to the castle for my lessons every school day. It’s not too far from where he works, and Princess Celestia scheduled our lunches together. She also made a deal with the interrogation division to make sure Dad gives me an hour of combat practice three days a week.”
“Interra what now?”
“Interrogation. It means they question criminals, and when they don’t give the right answers, it’s up to my dad to make sure they’re being honest.” Capricorn explained. “Anyways, combat practice is just us blowing stuff up. Dad says he’s not teaching me how to fight with my hooves until he knows he won’t break me. As for missing him, I see him in lunch and lessons and he teleports us to Canterlot, so he can be home in a second if Mom and me need him.” He shrugged. “I guess it’s hard to miss somepony when you see them all the time.”
Rainbow Blitz sighed, envious of his friend. “Yeah, I guess…”
“Well if it isn’t the royal snot!”
Capricorn jerked his head toward the snide remark.
“What do you want, Storm Kicker?!” he bellowed.
An older, grey pegasus colt with a trimmed purple mane smirked confidently. To his left and right was an orange earth pony filly and green unicorn colt, both with stockier builds and monotonous color patterns. They looked expectantly at their leader, waiting for him to lash out at Capricorn again.
“What’s the matter, your princeliness? Too royal to mingle with us lowly commoners?”
“No, too smart to hang with idiots like you three!” He hissed back.
Storm Kicker ignored the insult, directing his attention toward Rainbow Blitz. “I haven’t seen you before.” He stepped forward, grabbing a lock of red and orange mane. “What’s with the hair? You dye it just to look like Rainbow Dash or somethin’? Does the wittle confused colt wanna be a silly filly? Look guys, he even has her scarf.”
Blitz slapped the hoof away.
“Back off, jerk!” he growled.
“Check it out guys! Cappy’s little friend’s got some spunk.” All three stepped forward menacingly. “I like spunk. Makes it more fun when they cry.”
“That… might not be such a good idea.” Capricorn flashed the three bullies a coy smile. “I mean, it’s obvious why you wouldn’t even think about touching me. But him? Do you even know who he is?”
The trio looked at each other with worried expressions.
“This colt, the one you just made fun of and said you were gonna beat up, is Rainbow Dash’s son. Rainbow Blitz doesn’t need to dye his hair like a rainbow, because it’s natural, you morons.”
“You’re Rainbow Blitz? As in, the kid who’s performing at the Wonderbolts show this afternoon?” Storm Kicker scoffed, pulling his muzzle into a wicked grin. “They only let you do that cuz of your mommy. Face it kid, you’re riding off of your parents’ legacy. I bet you can’t even do a Sonic Rainboom.”
Fluttershy walked past the library, growing impatient at the colts’ privacy. Clearing her throat, she addressed the vacant air.
“Now then boys, I know it’s fun to catch up, but I can tell good stories too! Why, just the other day I saw a nest of baby birds hatch! You really don’t have to be so quiet…. too quiet.” She turned around quickly to face nothing but air. “Oh no, Rainbow Dash will never hear the end of it from Soarin’ if something bad happens! C’mon Fluttershy, they couldn’t have gone too far!”
Fluttershy retraced her steps in a canter, panicking as she thought of any trouble the children could have gotten into.
They could be hurt, or lost, or even scared! Oh Fluttershy, you’re the worst parent ever. I’ll bet they’re… completely fine.
Fluttershy came to a halt as she saw the five young ponies talking.
Oh how wonderful! They’re making friends with some of the other children. She inched closer until she paused. Oh Fluttershy, you really should give them their privacy. They’re growing up! They don’t need you breathing down their necks the whole time.
She watched with muted interest as Capricorn pointed to Rainbow Blitz. The smug smile on his muzzle was too tempting.
Well I guess it couldn’t hurt if I listened to just a little bit of it…
Fluttershy crept behind a nearby building, sticking one yellow ear out to eavesdrop on the children.
“Face it kid, you’re riding off of your parents’ legacy. I bet you can’t even do a Sonic Rainboom.”
Well that’s not a very nice thing to say. These boys sound like bullies.
She peeked her head from the building’s bend. Fluttershy’s eyes went wide with recognition.
Oh no, that’s Storm Kicker! Oh Cappy, what’ve you gotten Blitz into?
Capricorn pointed an accusing hoof at the ringleader of the older colts.
“Oh yeah? How do you know he can’t do a Sonic Rainboom? You’ve never seen him fly!”
Storm Kicker gave a cruel laugh and glared menacingly down at the two younger colts.
“All talk like always, Cappy. Face it; Rainbow Dash is the only pegasus who can do the Sonic Rainboom. This kid doesn’t have the skills to try something like that.”
“Now wait up, you big blowhard,” Capricorn barked. “He definitely does have the skills to try it.”
Well this seems familiar, Fluttershy thought, a wave of nostalgia hitting her.
“No he doesn’t, cuz he’s just a no-talent little shrimp.”
Rainbow Blitz fidgeted awkwardly. Capricorn took no notice of his friend’s discomfort and lashed back at their bullies.
“Then show up at the Wonderbolts show and see for yourself!”
Fluttershy bit her lip. Very, very familiar.
“Oh wait, it’s sold out.” He stuck his tongue out with a smug grin. “Too bad.”
Storm Kicker’s wicked smile didn’t fade.
“I do have tickets and I will see it for myself.”
Rainbow Blitz broke into a cold sweat. All confident features on Capricorn’s face turned to pure shock.
“H-how did-“
“I have connections,” Storm Kicker interrupted. He turned to leave, shooting a confident glance back at the two dumbstruck colts. “Can’t wait to see you perform, Rainbow Blitz. Or should I say, Rainbow Ditz!”
“Huh, yeah,” the unicorn chimed in. “Make sure to show up, or you’ll be… uh… Rainbow Quits!”
Their faint comments of approval among each other could be heard as they walked away from the defeated youngsters. Rainbow Blitz shot a panicked look at his friend.
“Cappy! What have you done?! I can’t do the Sonic Rainboom! I haven’t even tried!”
Capricorn regained his composure, flashing Blitz a small grin.
“Well how do you know you can’t if you haven’t tried it yet? C’mon, I bet you can learn it before the show. Imagine what everypony will say if you manage to pull that off!”
“No!”
Both colts jumped in surprise as Fluttershy abandoned her hiding spot behind the building. Capricorn stammered as he fought against his mother’s stern look.
“M-mom! H-how long were you-“
“Enough to see what kind of mess you just made, young colt!” She turned her attention to both of them. “Now there will be no Sonic Rainbooms, and no attempts at Sonic Rainbooms as long as I’m in charge! Do you understand?! Rainbow Blitz, I promised to look after you and it would be irresponsible on my part to let you even try something like that.”
Capricorn’s jaw dropped in horror at the implications.
“B-but those jerks-“
“Are bullies and will leave you alone, eventually. All they can do is say mean words. I’m in charge, and I want you both to follow me back to the cottage; that’s an order! And no more wandering off! We have a long day ahead of us.”
Fluttershy turned to leave for her cottage, looking back to make sure both boys were in tow. Capricorn’s head hung as he looked at the ground, and Rainbow Blitz eye’s darted around in panic. Their pathetic looks tugged at her heartstrings.
Poor things, she thought, sympathizing their misery. I’m sure they’ll feel better after a nice, relaxing day in Ponyville.
She resumed her path forward, not noticing Capricorn looking up with a confident smirk on his muzzle.
The day has just begun, Mom, he brooded. It has only just begun.
So..... erm..... who exactly is Cap's dad? I wanna know!
But, I absolutely adore the foals, OMG, THEY'RE SO CUTE, I'M GONNA DIE!
*ahem*, To regain composure, I'm totally psyched that you finally posted this! Amazing job so far; cannot wait for more!
(And ZOMG! You got on the Featureds! In so little time, too!)
Also, I'm just gonna go out on a limb here and make some nutty predictions, by saying that.... hmm...
-The earth filly w/ the orange hair is Applejack's (... Is the father Braeburn? Weird prediction; but I'm sticking w/ it...)
-The unicorn colt is Twilight's (... I have no idea who the father is on this one...)
-The pegasus filly is Pinkie Pie's (Again, no idea who the father is!)
-The earth filly w/ the purple hair is Rarity's (... As much as I don't wanna say it; is her father Big Macintosh?)
That's all I can say.
Yes the day had just begun
Good so far: Can't wait to see more.
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The name InMyOpinion was already taken :(
i dont get it
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but couldn't you have taken something less "I'm so much better than you"-ish?
Don't worry about it,tho: doesn't annoy me enough to not-read it
and don't tell me cappy's father is Discord... nah, that would be pushing it
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I don't know who the father is. I wanted one of them to be an alicorn so I could use that as a plot device later (for comedy in some cases, in others it creates conflict) and I needed to make up some information about the father to help explain his... behavior.
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just use Discord can only turn out funny
Though it would make me wonder how Flutters and Discord ended up together.
gonna go search Flutters X Discord fics now.
1596808 .... I knew it! In this continuity, alicorns are rare crossbreeds! NOT different species! Good thing too. means OP justification justwent out the window and plummeted to a grisly death! Hooray!
All of the canon alicorns are female; two are ruling the country while another is already married. Celestia also scheduled Capricorn's father's lunch to be with his son. That said, Capricorn is also implied to be a royal, and the only male royal we've seen in canon is Blueblood (plus Shining Armor, but he married into it, which simultaneously takes him out of the running as Capricorn's father).
So either we've got an OC alicorn working interrogation for Celestia, or Capricorn is the result of a union between a unicorn (Capricorn's father is casting spells) and a pegasus.
There's really no reason for a slice of life story like this to be bringing in random OC alicorns. Barring random OCs, the only reason pegasus+unicorn should produce an alicorn is if the unicorn is Blueblood (on the assumption that his royal blood means there's an alicorn in his family line). With the personalities presented in A Day With Dad and thus far in this fic (which have been well-done and line up well with canon), I see no reason for Fluttershy to be paired with Blueblood at all. (Besides, the description of Capricorn's father's behavior do not match Blueblood.)
That leaves either random OC, or the spontaneous production of an alicorn colt for no apparent reason at all. Neither of those possibilities look good to me. I hope I'm wrong, because I really liked A Day With Dad, but Capricorn's mere existence looks like the downfall of this fic for me.
Edit: Another possibility is that Capricorn isn't Fluttershy's foal and she just serves as long-term foalsitter (implying he's Cadence's foal). If that's the case, the chapter needs some re-writing as the heavy implication that Capricorn belongs to Fluttershy leads to reasoning like my own above, which can result in a turn-off, like it has for me.
I'm willing to give you a chance because I loved the previous story, but I'll say if this had been my first story of yours that I'd read, this chapter would have resulted in thumbs down and unfavorite.
Okay, I suggest you make Capricorn Shining Armor and Cadence's kid. That way we avoid the 'random alicorn OC' land mine.
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I have to agree even using them "for the lolz" is a hard pill to tke
I'm gonna go with the wild guess that it's a BlueShy pairing, with some appropriate backstory to explain Blueblood getting his behavior straight combined with an unexpected Fluttershy romance.
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Time for responses!
The category 'Slice of Life' means just an average day (or as average as you can get with these characters). There's no great adventure, no villain to be defeated, no deaths, no magic duels or anything. It's a story about character interaction.
Onto your concerns about Capricorn:
Did I foresee people complaining about him being an alicorn? Yes of course I did. One of the biggest downfalls of many fics is making some overpowered alicorn OC that ends up being a mary-sue. That being said, I am a person of genetics and believe a pairing of a unicorn and pegasus on the rare occasion could produce a mutation where both alleles for wings and a horn are representative in the phenotype.
I personally feel like my writing skills can overcome the 'OC alicorn' hurdle simply because Capricorn is an extremely flawed character. He's not overpowered, not the main character, not some emo 'give me sympathy, everyone hates me for having wings and a horn' character that I'm trying to shove down people's throats. He's a plot device that drives certain character interactions that wouldn't realistically happen without him, and some of these (as I hope you'll read later) require him having both wings and a horn. I considered at one point simply making him a unicorn, but there are two scenes in particular I can think of where he would need wings to avoid making descriptions overly complicated.
I can guarantee you that Blueblood is not the father, but keep an open mind when I say even I don't know who the father is. Canonically, Blueblood is a distant relative of Celestia (as Cadance would also be simply due to the age difference), and such an ancient lineage would be bound to be a bit expansive. I couldn't think of a character with a job and personality (other than Shining Armor, who is already married) that would be compatible with Fluttershy, so I simply described what his job would be to help explain why Capricorn has a very twisted sense of justice.
The whole Canonical argument is invalid; MLP:FiM will most likely NEVER have any of the main 6 characters get into a romantic relationship, unless it's a series finale or future episode.
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My issue isn't the assumption of Mary Sue-ness; I think you're a better writer than that. My problem is that alicorns, as a breed, are so rare that we've seen exactly four (An alicorn filly appears in Lesson Zero, but that's in Twilight's imagination when she's horrified by the prospect of being sent back to Magic Kindergarten. It's also likely an animation error.). In fact, Faust didn't even want a third; Celestia and Luna were supposed to be the only winged unicorns when she was writing it up.
Based on the Cake twins, honestly, either Mrs. Cake is a cheating bh or the breed of the parents is not the direct cause of the breed of the children (Mr Cake's explanation is not convincing in the least). While that might be an even better reason for 'normal' ponies to birth an alicorn, I'd say that the lack of alicorns being born over the course of at least a thousand years (possibly excepting Cadence, we don't really know how old she is) makes that possibility slim. The chance is so low that, even if it's possible, such a child should rightly be the center of media attention for decades. Ponies would naturally assume the foal belongs to one of the existing alicorns (who rule the country and control celestial bodies, I might add), reporters would swamp the foal and his caretakers daily (you think Blitz had it bad?), underhanded scallywags would force the foal to require a guard detail... there's a lot of world-building that goes into such a rare birth. Beyond what other ponies would do, the Princesses would likely want to make the foal a ward of the crown, which would mean he'd be moving to Canterlot, not living by a dangerous forest near Ponyville and teleporting to Canterlot for lunch.
If the setting had alicorns as a relatively common occurrence, I'd let this go... but the world you're basing the story on does not indicate such (in fact it indicates the opposite), and you've done no world-building to change that fact. "Suddenly, a wild alicorn appeared!" is sort of how you've left Capricorn, and it's nowhere near the quality of the rest of your work. I mean, is there truly a reason why Capricorn needs to be an alicorn? The bullies seem to be wary of him because of his parent(s) more than his nature, so why is he an alicorn in the first place?
Also, admitting you don't know who Capricorn's father is in the comments of a chapter where you talk about him at length just looks bad. (It might be different if Capricorn's father had left Fluttershy and Capricorn never knew him, but the colt has lunch with the guy on a regular basis.) You've introduced a relationship that doesn't exist in canon; even if it's not the focus of the story, you should at least know who the two ponies are! (Even if it's an OC, know something about the character.)
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Celestia, Luna, and Cadance are the only three that have made an appearance, and despite what Faust's intentions were, Hasbro made Cadance an alicorn. Despite the presence of a horn and wings, she doesn't appear to be godly (as is the case with Luna and Celestia), so there's always the chance she's in a different category of alicorn (god mode vs. 'hey, that one was born with wings and a horn'). We don't really know much about the canonical MLP world, so who is to say they're the only three? As for the media attention, I thought about that long before I started actually writing the story, and that will be explained as well. Let's just say there's a reason they leave him alone, and leave it at that for now.
For him 'needing' to be an alicorn, my reasons aren't really as cosmic as you may hope, but I really just needed one of the characters to be able to fly AND do magic.
As for the father existing and not existing, that's not a concept I made up. Plenty of stories/shows have descriptions of a relationship between two characters where one of the characters is never shown on screen. The whole point of even bringing up his father was to show that Capricorn has the one thing Blitz really wants and needs: a strong relationship with both parents where they have gone out of there way to spend time with him. I have introduced a lot of relationships in my stories that aren't canon; all pairings between the mane 6 and others are not canonical.
I guess what I'm trying to say is, let me worry about the details (but I do thank you for pointing out your concerns, even if they are obvious and I have thought about them already), calm your tits, and enjoy the story and characters as they develope
your stories have been great! but OC alicorns just kill it for me.......
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It's good to hear you've got plans. That's really all I can ask; as I said, I do like your writing.
> As for the father existing and not existing, that's not a concept I made up... [etc.]
There's a difference between having a character never appear 'on-screen', and not knowing who the character is, I think. There's different levels of how much an author ought to know about individual characters in their story, but flat out not knowing who you've shipped with Fluttershy (especially with a foal involved) just sounds completely alien to me.
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There is nothing more dangerous than a canonxOC ship. Based off of her personality (satire on a Disney princess), I had an idea on what kind of character I wanted to ship her with, but unfortunately the only one that exists, as I stated, is already married. I was already taking a risk with Capricorn, and creating another controversial OC would have been pushing my luck too far (though based on the like to dislike ratio, most people don't have complains about Capricorn). Better to give some detail and let you (the reader) infer what kind of pony you think he is than for me to force a shipped OC down your throat.
I do have plans concerning Cappy's avoidance of the media, and it helps explain his relationship with the bully in a believable way. I won't say anything more on the topic (spoilers), but hopefully you trust me enough to know I'd never let this story come crashing down because of a lapse of logic.
Wait... Capricorn is an Alicorn... uh...um... ok you'll going to have to explain that unless his "father" is Luna or somepony.
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> hopefully you trust me enough to know I'd never let this story come crashing down because of a lapse of logic.
I trusted you enough to keep reading despite my reservations even before this conversation.
Ohhhh no.... XD
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Judging from the fact that he has a sonic screwdriver in the fic's cover photo, I would assume The Doctor is his dad (possibly as a shout out to Doctor Whooves Adventures, a Doctor Whooves radio play with Twilight as the assistant).
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Hmmmmmm.... I'm thinking...Blueblood? Royal Guard? ok i really don't know.
1607609 I don't think that's a Sonic Screwdriver, I think it's just a random gizmo. Though I could be wrong.
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You would be correct.
1606453 1606876 ��I'm liking this story so far. I personally see no problem with Capricorn being an alicorn. Cadence was introduced out of nowhere in the show, as was Shining Armor. Twilight had never mentioned having a brother or a foal sitter back when she was starting out as a student for Princess Celestia. Also Cadence is clearly non godlike given that she aged normally (this is obvious by how she's younger when foal sitting and when we see her grown up) and seems to have normal wings and a mane and is of average height. I can believe the Cake Twins theory because Pumpkin has a similar color scheme to her father (and I seriously doubt a kids show would bring up infidelity), recessive genes are a real thing after all and kids can often inherit traits not visible in the parents (like kids who are born with red hair but neither parents have red hair). Also this is fan fiction based on existing fiction and thus we as writers can make up pretty much anything we want. Think of it as alternative timelines if you want, but given that none of the mane six have had relationships they could be dating anypony in the near future or whenever. There also aren't many male ponies prominently shown in the show so I can see the need to make up characters. Personally I'm liking this just as much as first story and can't wait to see what happens next! I can already say 5 moostaches!
1608620 I figured. In fact it looks like something you'd see on Dexter's Laboratory.
1608620 So we obviously know that Rainbow Blitz is Rainbow Dash's kid (doy) and now we know Capricorn is Fluttershy's kid. Surprise I'm sure is Pinkie Pie's given she has the same hair style, the one winking at Blitz is Applejack's kid because of the earth tone colors, the purple one with the device would be Twilight's because of the color, horn, and using science stuff, and the one hoof shaking at Surprise I would say is Rarity's since there aren't any others to choose from and because the mane has been styled nicely.
Something a little off there?
1604969 Is it really a good idea for two cousins to even conceive a child?
1605522 I kind of prefer Pinkie Pie x Discord myself.
1606836 He/she already has:
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Good catch. I originally had them all as boys, and changed the earth pony to a filly last minute for some gender diversity.
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If I may interject, I have a possible compromise: call him a pegacorn. See, "alicorn" carries massive baggage. God-like powers and the like. But call him a pegacorn, which I have seen in a few other stories, simply implies what I think you're going for: a rare crossbreed that can fly and do magic at the same levels as any other unicorn or pegasus.
Oh, and the story is awesome, by the way. I'm gonna guess that Twilight's kid, named Gizmo I think, is her and Doctor Whooves. That's my preferred Twilight ship.
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Except for the fact that "pegacorn" is the word used to describe Celestia and Luna in the script for the show according to Meghan McCarthy.
Doesn't really matter what you call 'em. Winged Unicorns (Faust), Pegacorns (show's script), Alicorns (many fans), Alacorns (some fans who insist "alicorn" is the material a unicorn's horn is made of); it's all the same thing.
Of course at this point I'm just being contrary. MOIS already argued his point well enough for me.
1608799 Nice touch.
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You just made me realize the contraction of my account name is one letter short of 'moist'...
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MyOpinionIsSuperiorTo
Also, a simple throw away line like, "Everypony assumes that just because I'm an alicorn that I'm some sort of god or something," would offset the shitstorm. Or make him a bad flier, or his magic dodgy.
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Hey, at least you're not "MyOpinionIsSuperTacky". That'd be awkward.
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True, but we're not talking about the show, we're talking about fan fiction, read only by the fans, who predominately call them alicorns. Pegacorn would be enough to avoid the butthurt that my follow.
1608789 I dunno, lol, it was something random that popped in my mind; 'sides, the Apples are Southern folk, they probably marry their cousins all the time (Yes, I stole that headcanon from a story.)
1607609 Hmm, makes sense....
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Correct me if I am wrong, as I have only just learnt this lately, but, assuming that one was working with the alleles—P/p pegasine traits, U/u for unicorn traits—Pu (Fluttershy) and Up (father), then there should be a chance that one out of four offspring could have traits from both dominant enough to be seen in the phenotype. Now this is under the major assumption that, in Fluttershy, the dominant allele is P and the recessive is u (assuming that there may be a unicorn somewhere in her genealogy) and that the father's dominant allele is U and that he has a pegasus in his genealogy, making a possibility of the recessive gene p.
Again, I have only just been introduced to this, and it is highly likely that I may have messed up somewhere, but I tried my best. Please correct any errors I have made, as learning is always a good thing, and I like to embrace any chance to learn.
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Genetics is a very, VERY complicated subject. There could be genes that shut off allele representations, genes that shut THOSE genes off, etc etc.
Try google search if you want to learn more. I'm not going to diverge here on the topic.
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Thank you. I shall now do that.
1596808It looks positive, I liked the cover and the story as well.
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yeah, went to search Fluttershy/Discord ships.
The impossible happened: I didn't find any
I'm gonna use the phrase "blowhard" from now on lol
I don't have too much of a problem with Capricorn being a winged unicorn, and the reason is simply this:
The ponies themselves don't seem to care.
Really, they don't care at all. When Rarity had butterfly wings, observers just went "Oooh, pretty!". Cadance had a job as a foalsitter. Even the thing fans tout as being "godlike", moving the sun and the moon, are said to have been formerly done by regular unicorns. Heck, the prologue to the first episode goes like this:
"To do this, the eldest used her unicorn powers to raise the sun at dawn; the younger brought out the moon to begin the night."
Nothing about wings there. If anything, the ponies apparently classify their princesses as a type of unicorn, rather than a totally different breed. Which might be interesting to see in a story - the traditional Royal Family made up of unicorns (perhaps the Platinum line of old), some of which happen to have wings. There's the question about their age, of course; but on the other hand, Sombra managed to stick around for a thousand years after being forcefully discorporated, even rebuilding his body, and he had no wings either.
SPOILER ALERT!!!
-I see that alicornism is probably something that is inheritable form non-alicorn parents. Although Capricorn's father could be the Alicorn of Justice or something. I am interested as to why you picked that name. I know it is a constellation/Zodiac sign, but beyond that I'm not sure what it might mean. Unlike most of my questions I am NOT intending this to be rhetorical. If you think it would spoil something, you can PM me instead of responding here.
You looked like my Mom after she releases her monarch butterflies into the wild for their migration.
-Awww... well, they are her cutie-mark... not that that.makes that much difference probably. I mean it COULD but...
I mean if I was in anypony else’s horseshoes I probably would.
-Because his father is an alicorn and they live longer than pegasi, so he knows he will have a lot of time with him compared to everypony else in his life? Or is it just the way his personality works and he isn't immortal like Celestia and Luna? Or do you have Cadance being immortal? Or is she excluded from your fanon?
Anyways, combat practice is just us blowing stuff up. Dad says he’s not teaching me how to fight with my hooves until he knows he won’t break me.
-Didn't stop RD from trying Applebloom out on hoof-to-hoof combat... I guess the alicorn fighting styles aren't much for katas and training dummies (again, still using the working hypothesis that the father is an alicorn, rather than a unicorn)? Or does his father just know that it is easier to hold his son back at this point in that half of the training than the later parts?
monotonous color patterns.
-Is this to imply a mood to their coloration, or just your way of saying that their manes and tails are the same colors as their coats?
“Back off, jerk!” he growled.
-This is going to end in a race, The Stare, or Capricorn firing a warning shot. Probably not The Stare since these are ponies and Fluttershy isn't good with those... although she has had several years to grow. I can't see her being happy about any blasting, and even a race might be dangerous.
“I mean, it’s obvious why you wouldn’t even think about touching me. But him? Do you even know who he is?”
-Which invites 'prove you are the son of two Wonderbolts' which means race. Maybe they will have to sneak away from Fluttershy.
I bet you can’t even do a Sonic Rainboom.”
-Well, probably not YET. Would seem a bit repetitive for him to pull it off under a stressful situation at a young age, just like his mother.
They’re making friends with some of the other children.
-Her optimism for others overcomes her worry wart nature I see...
She inched closer
-And now she will notice the bullying?
The smug smile on his muzzle was too tempting.
Well I guess it couldn’t hurt if I listened to just a little bit of it…
-Does she suspect something, or does she think it is a NICE smile?
These boys sound like bullies.
-Well, that went well. Let's see what she does with it.
Well this seems familiar, Fluttershy thought, a wave of nostalgia hitting her.'
-Hope you aren't going to recreate things too exactly. I could see RD faking it for Blitz somehow, or Capricorn doing the same with illusion magic (his father SO wouldn't approve). I will also point out that since Blitz would be doing it in his own defense primarily, he wouldn't be tapping into Loyalty, which probably makes some sort of difference (else RD probably could have recreated it sooner).
“Make sure to show up, or you’ll be… uh… Rainbow Quits!”
-A bit too "generation Xerox" for me, but we will see how you play it out.
C’mon, I bet you can learn it before the show. Imagine what everypony will say if you manage to pull that off!”
-Capricorn isn't too bright, is he?
We have a long day ahead of us.”
-It will feel like a VERY long day...
The day has just begun, Mom, he brooded. It has only just begun.
-Ah... so he intends to ditch her somehow... this might be interesting. I do hope you DON'T have Blitz actually pull it off though. Of course, maybe RDs problem was that she forget exactly what she was doing (I have seen theories about how she kept leading with one hoof rather than two and that was the problem) where-as Blitz has probably had the technique explained to him over and over again, and probably seen it at closer range than most other pegasi at least once.
But, but?!