• Member Since 26th Mar, 2012
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ParaDox Derpy


A crazy pony with a brand new computer and no idea how to use it.

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Oh, umm..hi, my name is Danielle. Today I became a pony, a derp-eyed blonde-maned mare named Derpy. Best way to start a morning right? Part of the PonyEarthVerse.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 39 )

Don't worry, the fic should be more popular soon. People are just hesitant to read HiE fics. This is not one, so.. once it gets more upvotes, more people will give it a chance.

Your friend,
Sudofox

I like it. At first glance it seems pretty run of the mill as far as HiE fics go but, there are some unique qualities that set it apart. Like fav watch mustache :moustache: don't be discouraged by the dislikes HiE stories usually take longer to get off the ground.

I think you may have forgotten to close a bold tag - the last bit of the story is all bold.

To my left, was the holy grail of writing utensils.
YOU MEAN THE PILOT G2?

You never really explain why you want to go to New York. Even saying, "I just feel like it" would have helped.

At any rate, this isn't a bad story. I sense an epic roadtrip coming up, considering your intended destination and the fact that Cold Stone #23092 is all the way across the country in Redding, CA.

Hoozah!
Your story is up. Don't forget to add it to the group.
I liek eet :yay:

Also, everything in the latter part of the chapter is bold.
Not sure if its supposed to be like that, or its an error.

EDIT: You should get a cover image. Cover images are cool.

1561029 You would know that off the top of your head. Or you would Google it.

He leaned in with a disturbing smile. “Because I can,” he said, booping my nose before turning to a cloud of smoke and blowing away in a sudden breeze that blew through my room.

I thought her nose was injured. Wouldn't that hurt?

Anyway, I thought this was a great start. Liked and faved! :pinkiehappy:

Not too bad. It's got some good grammar and such in it, and that's some thing I look for in fics. I might look more into this one.

Oh! You poor darling! Hopefully nothing else goes wrong with your venture to New York!I do hope you make it there without any further injuries!

-Tony (That guy who is doing the story of Rarity)

*Challenge: Read what I commented in Raritys voice*

Nice way to kick things off though. It's got potential, and I like it. Good luck with the rest of your writing, and welcome to the family!

IT WOULDN'T BE A PONYEARTHVERSE FIC WITHOUT ME IN THE COMMENTS!

That said, this is one of the better ones out there. 5.5/10 stars.

1562881 No problem! This is a lot coming from me, I hate these types of fics from the bottom of my spleen.

Anyway, I hope something good becomes of this. :pinkiehappy:

1570152
Huzzah! I'm going to try to get the second chapter done and posted today!:derpytongue2:

Cool. I'm just listening to True Capitalist Radio right now... It's a pretty funny show with clever humor.

Its posted good now! :yay:

I was there the entire time, so nothing new lol

I dawwed at the ending :applecry:

hopefully things get better for these two

I see what Tome did with that name...

2069843 So I see what you did there.

Just so much yes.
I mean, I know because I did some of this chapter, anyways.
But its great to have you back!

Sarah J. Smith? I see what you did there the doctors companion meets the doctors companion

yay for updating! Derpy is BACK!

I'm glad you're back, been so long since the last update that I actually tried out for taking over as Derpy, I'm sure you'll do much better than I ever would've anyway.:twilightsmile:

Sarah J. Smith? Could her middle name perhaps be Jane?

I should make a Luna or SHining Armor one. Luna it is!

The story would be much better if the it writeing wasn't so fast. Still a good story... just a bit too fast.

2863191
Yeah, it was rushed due to the fact that at the time Tavi's writer was experiencing major medical problems and I was forced to update to keep the story in the 'cannon' folder.

Another one bites the dust.

Looks like your bold link broke, and everything towards the end is bolded

I like this Derpy. She's fiesty. Doesn't appreciate what a blessing it is to be stupid though.

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