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RAINBOW DASH IS AWESOME - Scootashy



^Rainbow Dash is awesome!^ 'Ah think they can read Scoot.' "Just tell us if we're good at this!"

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^Didn't we already put the title up on there? Why do we need to do it again?^ 'No idea.' "Beats me."

Once upon a time, there was a pony who lived in a far, far away land. Her name was Starlight Treasure. She loved the prince, but she was sure she would never get a chance to meet him.


‘Sweetie Belle, what are ya doin’ right now?’

“Oh, I’m just writing a story, it’s nothing, really…”

^No need to tell us that. Ew, this sounds like a terrible love story in space. I mean, -Starlight Treasure loved the prince-, I don’t think it can get ANY sappier.^

“Do you think you can do better Scoot?”

^Nah, I hate love stories. I want a story with more action in it!^

‘But the question is, can ya write it?’

“Yeah, that was what I was asking. If you think you’re good at writing, maybe you can earn your Cutie Mark!”

^Hey, you’re right! Let me give this a try.^


Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky on a beautiful Sunday morning.


“Whoawhoawhoa, Rainbow Dash?”

^Of course! I said I wanted an action packed story, so why not use her as the main character.^

“Makes sense, but I thought you didn’t want sappy stuff. Then what would you call -on a beautiful Sunday morning-?”

^Ugh, fine. I’ll change it.^


Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her. The crowd was watching in awe from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier.


“Wow, you’re pretty good at this Scoot. It’s sounding pretty nice already.”

^Thanks Sweetie Belle! I didn’t know I was this good at it. Do I have my Cutie Mark already?^

‘Sorry Scoot, but no Cutie Mark just yet. Maybe the story is lackin’ in action, since you’ve only put up a show! Ah know, let me add some monsters!’

“…Monsters? Is that really such a good idea?”

^Yeah, why not? Hey Applebloom, why don’t you add this bit? Maybe you can get your Cutie Mark too!^

“Oh, oh, can I have a go afterwards?”

^Fine, just… watch out what you write. No sappy stuff.^

“Promised!”

‘Could ya’ll keep quiet for a second, I’m having trouble comin’ up with a good monster to use.’

^Why just use one monster when you can go for a lot of them? Rainbow Dash is awesome and strong enough to take them all on!^

‘Hold on, ah think ah got something.’


Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her. The zombies were watching in fear from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier.


^Wait, zombies? That’s not exactly what I had in mind, but I guess that could work too.^

‘Trust me, this will be good.’


Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her. The zombies were in fear from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier. The zombies wanted to flee the stadium as they feared for their lives, but a magic barrier stopped them dead in their tracks.


^Twilight? Why add her, Rainbow Dash can easily beat the zombies on her own!^

‘Ah know, ah even said the zombies fear Rainbow! Twilight is just keeping them inside so Rainbow can finish ‘em off!’

^Oh cool, that makes a lot more sense now that I think about it. But one thing, zombies can’t run for their lives. They’re kinda… dead. I do like the -stopped dead in their tracks- thing though, that’s a good one.^

‘But that’s easily fixable.’


Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her. The zombies were watching in fear from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier. The zombies wanted to flee the stadium as they feared Rainbow was coming for them, but a magic barrier stopped them dead in their tracks.


‘See, no big deal.’

“Sorry girls, but can I say something?”

^Oh Sweetie Belle, you’ve been awfully quiet. It’s your turn now.^

“Actually, I wanted to comment on something. I just reread everything, and I’ve found a problem. Shouldn’t we add some indications somewhere so the ponies who read this know who’s talking?”

^Good idea, but I don’t think it’s necessary for Applebloom.^

‘Huh, why? Let me take a look.’

“Anyway…”

‘HEY, WHY ARE YA’LL WRITING DOWN WHAT AH SAY USING MAH ACCENT? IT’S NOT FUNNY!’

^We’re just writing everything down like it’s said, chill out Applebloom. And that’s why I’ll write your last sentence down in capital letters, considering you were shouting right in my face. Also, you shouldn’t be ashamed of your accent.^

‘Ah guess you’re right, and sorry for screaming.’

“Can you all just listen to me?”

^Oh right, the indications.^

‘Ah will take the single quotation mark!’

^Hey Applebloom, we’re not up to voting yet.^

“I’LL TAKE THE DOUBLE QUOTATION MARKS!”

^Ugh, fine, you two can have those. But then what do I get? And how are we going to indicate quotes within our sentences?^

“I think I know one that fits you perfectly. Hold on, let me look up the name.”

‘Can’t we just specify a quote within a sentence with a hyphen? We can still use the quotation marks in the actual story though.’

^I don’t see why not. Then all that’s left is something for me. Found it Sweetie Belle?^

“Yeah I got it. It’s called a caret and it is basically an arrow pointing upwards.”

^Cool! But you said it fits me perfectly, do you mean that it fits me because I’m a pegasus? Or because I’m just better than others at many things? Either way, I’ll take it!^

“I meant it was because you are always dreaming about being the best…”

^…Anyway, it’s still your turn now Sweetie Belle.^

“I’ll pass, I’m not too good with stories involving monsters.”

‘That means it’s your turn again Scoot!’

^Hmm, maybe this will sound nice.^


Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her. The zombies were watching in fear from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier. The zombies wanted to flee the stadium as they feared Rainbow was coming for them, but a magic barrier stopped them dead in their tracks. Their time had come: the zombies would get sent back to their graves. A mach cone formed around the blue pegasus. With a deafening blast, she crashed through the sound barrier and into the stadium. The overwhelming force blew away all the zombies as Rainbow landed on the ground, ready for another fight. However, all that she could see was Twilight walking towards her to congratulate her; she had already won with her awesomeness.


‘Uh, ah dunno but… aren’t stories supposed to be, ya’know, longer?’

“Yeah, why are you ending it right now?”

^I didn’t really have a choice now did I? Logically, the zombies would have been wiped out. Doing something else would make the story unrealistic.^

‘But how am ah supposed to continue on this?’

“Well… don’t we still need to come up with a title? We can’t earn our Cutie Marks if something is missing.”

^How about: -RAINBOW DASH IS AWESOME-?^

“I don’t think that’s a good idea. Besides, I know you were screaming just now, but please don’t tell me you’re actually planning on writing the title using only capital letters…”

^That will only get more ponies to notice our story! It’s a genius idea!^

‘Now that ah think ‘bout it, ah agree. Sounds like that’ll help ponies notice it.’

“They’ll just think the story isn’t writing seriously.”

^If it’s entitled -RAINBOW DASH IS AWESOME-, how could you assume it’s not written seriously? The title is as true as it could be!^

‘It’s 2 against 1, so that’ll be the title.’

“But…”

^Oh come on Sweetie Belle, the title isn’t such a big deal. In the end it’s the story that counts.^

“Okay, but we can’t really call this one paragraph a story, no matter how you look at it.”

^But I thought it was pretty good…^

‘It ain’t bad, it just needs to be longer.’

“Scoot just ended the story and we have a title. So, what’s next? We can’t make the story any longer, now can we?”

‘Why not? The story starts with -Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her-. Why don’t we just work backwards?’

^Backwards? Huh?^


Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her. The zombies were watching in fear from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier. The zombies wanted to flee the stadium as they feared Rainbow was coming for them, but a magic barrier stopped them dead in their tracks. Their time had come: the zombies would get sent back to their graves. A mach cone formed around the blue pegasus. With a deafening blast, she crashed through the sound barrier and into the stadium. The overwhelming force blew away all the zombies as Rainbow landed on the ground, ready for another fight. However, all that she could see was Twilight walking towards her to congratulate her; she had already won with her awesomeness. The zombies had landed back in the graves from which they came. Rainbow’s technique was called the ‘Sonic Rainboom’, a force that shows no mercy to monsters.


^Like that?^

“I don’t think that’s what she meant Scoot. But we can keep this, otherwise this story will never get finished.”

‘No, no, no, not like that. Ah mean ya should write about what happened before -Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her-. Let me demonstrate.’


The gates to the stadium opened and every pony in the crowd was desperate to find a seat. All had come to watch the newest hit show ‘Rainbooms and Rainbows’. The show’s star, Rainbow Dash, had invited one of her friends to watch the show. Her name was Twilight Sparkle. Just like the rest of the ponies in the stadium, she was frantically searching for a seat. Eventually she found on the ring right above the exit. She had hoped that Rainbow would have reserved a VIP seat, but those spots were taken by the Wonderbolts.

Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her. The zombies were watching in fear from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier. The zombies wanted to flee the stadium as they feared Rainbow was coming for them, but a magic barrier stopped them dead in their tracks. Their time had come: the zombies would get sent back to their graves. A mach cone formed around the blue pegasus. With a deafening blast, she crashed through the sound barrier and into the stadium. The overwhelming force blew away all the zombies as Rainbow landed on the ground, ready for another fight. However, all that she could see was Twilight walking towards her to congratulate her; she had already won with her awesomeness. The zombies had landed back in the graves from which they came. Rainbow’s technique was called the ‘Sonic Rainboom’, a force that shows no mercy to monsters.


‘See, that’s how ya continue a story after it has ended!’

^Wow, you’re exited all of a sudden Applebloom. But this just sounds wrong, the second paragraph talks about zombies and the first one about a crowd? What happened?^

“Scoot, I think we now need to continue in between the two paragraphs.”

‘Exactly, ah never said this would be everything.’

“Actually Applebloom, can I write one more paragraph in front of yours?”

‘Sure.’

^Hey when can I have a go again?^

“You’ve already written most of the story Scoot, just wait until it’s your turn again.”


The doors behind her closed. The spotlights went on. A loud countdown could be heard from the speakers. At the final beep, the doors in front of Rainbow Dash opened and she flew out with her wings spread. For two hours straight, she practiced her performance without making any mistakes. She could not afford to make even a single mistake once the stadium would be crowded with ponies.

In the evening, the gates to the stadium opened and every pony in the crowd was desperate to find a seat. All had come to watch the newest hit show ‘Rainbooms and Rainbows’. The show’s star had invited one of her friends to watch the show. Her name was Twilight Sparkle. Just like the rest of the ponies in the stadium, she was frantically searching for a seat. Eventually she found on the ring right above the exit. She had hoped that Rainbow would have reserved a VIP seat, but those spots were taken by the Wonderbolts.

Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her. The zombies were watching in fear from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier. The zombies wanted to flee the stadium as they feared Rainbow was coming for them, but a magic barrier stopped them dead in their tracks. Their time had come: the zombies would get sent back to their graves. A mach cone formed around the blue pegasus. With a deafening blast, she crashed through the sound barrier and into the stadium. The overwhelming force blew away all the zombies as Rainbow landed on the ground, ready for another fight. However, all that she could see was Twilight walking towards her to congratulate her; she had already won with her awesomeness. The zombies had landed back in the graves from which they came. Rainbow’s technique was called the ‘Sonic Rainboom’, a force that shows no mercy to monsters.

“Yeah I know I had to alter some things in your part of the story Applebloom. I’m sorry, but it just fits better this way.”

‘Oh it’s no big deal.’

^So, now I get to continue on what Applebloom wrote, right?^

“Correct.”


The doors behind her closed. The spotlights went on. A loud countdown could be heard from the speakers. At the final beep, the doors in front of Rainbow Dash opened and she flew out with her wings spread. For two hours straight, she practiced her performance without making any mistakes. She could not afford to make even a single mistake once the stadium would be crowded with ponies.

In the evening, the gates to the stadium opened and every pony in the crowd was desperate to find a seat. All had come to watch the newest hit show ‘Rainbooms and Rainbows’. The show’s star had invited one of her friends to watch the show. Her name was Twilight Sparkle. Just like the rest of the ponies in the stadium, she was frantically searching for a seat. Eventually she found on the ring right above the exit. She had hoped that Rainbow would have reserved a VIP seat, but those spots were taken by the Wonderbolts.

When everypony in the stadium had found a seat, the loud countdown started and the spotlights shined their bright lights at the door. The countdown ended and the doors opened. When Rainbow Dash came into view, the crowd started cheering. Twilight was amazed at how awesome Rainbow Dash looked while wearing costume of the Wonderbolts. Just as Rainbow had practiced, she started doing all her signature tricks, including the fan-favourite ‘Buccaneer Blaze’. The crowd went crazy!

Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her. The zombies were watching in fear from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier. The zombies wanted to flee the stadium as they feared Rainbow was coming for them, but a magic barrier stopped them dead in their tracks. Their time had come: the zombies would get sent back to their graves. A mach cone formed around the blue pegasus. With a deafening blast, she crashed through the sound barrier and into the stadium. The overwhelming force blew away all the zombies as Rainbow landed on the ground, ready for another fight. However, all that she could see was Twilight walking towards her to congratulate her; she had already won with her awesomeness. The zombies had landed back in the graves from which they came. Rainbow’s technique was called the ‘Sonic Rainboom’, a force that shows no mercy to monsters.


^See, sounds much better now.^

“You still didn’t explain where the zombies came from though. The story still doesn’t fit together.”

^Hey, I wasn’t the one who came up with the zombies! That was Applebloom!^

‘Calm down Scoot, ah get your hint. Ah was planning on doin’ the next part myself anyway.’

“Also, Scoot, can you just calm down with the Rainbow Dash fanboyism? I know the story is called -RAINBOW DASH IS AWESOME-, but this still seems a little over-the-top.”

^What? There’s nothing over-the-top about this!^

‘Girls, the more you two argue, the less ah can get written down here!’

^I’m sorry. It’s just that this story is about Rainbow Dash being awesome and somepony here is complaining about it saying Rainbow Dash is awesome.^

“I’m not complaining, I’m giving advice!”

‘Ugh, would ya’ll just shut up for five seconds?! Ah am almost done ‘ere!’


The doors behind her closed. The spotlights went on. A loud countdown could be heard from the speakers. At the final beep, the doors in front of Rainbow Dash opened and she flew out with her wings spread. For two hours straight, she practiced her performance without making any mistakes. She could not afford to make even a single mistake once the stadium would be crowded with ponies.

In the evening, the gates to the stadium opened and every pony in the crowd was desperate to find a seat. All had come to watch the newest hit show ‘Rainbooms and Rainbows’. The show’s star had invited one of her friends to watch the show. Her name was Twilight Sparkle. Just like the rest of the ponies in the stadium, she was frantically searching for a seat. Eventually she found on the ring right above the exit. She had hoped that Rainbow would have reserved a VIP seat, but those spots were taken by the Wonderbolts.

When everypony in the stadium had found a seat, the loud countdown started and the spotlights shined their bright lights at the door. The countdown ended and the doors opened. When Rainbow Dash came into view, the crowd started cheering. Twilight was amazed at how awesome Rainbow Dash looked while wearing costume of the Wonderbolts. Just as Rainbow had practiced, she started doing all her signature tricks, including the fan-favourite ‘Buccaneer Blaze’. The crowd went crazy!

However, it appears that not only ponies were attracted by Rainbow Dash’s awesome performance. Being close to the exit, Twilight heard some noises from behind the gates, scary noises she had read about in one of her books. She knew exactly what was causing the noises: the undead. Zombies, if you want to call them that way. It was very difficult for her to take her eyes off the amazing show, but she knew what she had to do. She used her magic to teleport the crowd to a safe location before the zombies were able to breach the stadium.

Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her. The zombies were watching in fear from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier. The zombies wanted to flee the stadium as they feared Rainbow was coming for them, but a magic barrier stopped them dead in their tracks. Their time had come: the zombies would get sent back to their graves. A mach cone formed around the blue pegasus. With a deafening blast, she crashed through the sound barrier and into the stadium. The overwhelming force blew away all the zombies as Rainbow landed on the ground, ready for another fight. However, all that she could see was Twilight walking towards her to congratulate her; she had already won with her awesomeness. The zombies had landed back in the graves from which they came. Rainbow’s technique was called the ‘Sonic Rainboom’, a force that shows no mercy to monsters.


‘There. Zombies.’

“I don’t know, it still feels like the transition between the last two paragraphs is weird.”

^Looks fine to me. I’m done with this, this is getting boring. I just want my Cutie Mark, and it’s not appearing. I’m clearly not a writer.^

‘Yeah me too. I don’t think our special talent is writing.’

“Oh come on don’t give up yet, all this story needs is another paragraph!”

^Then why don’t you write it Sweetie Belle? You were the one who came up with the idea of writing, but you’ve done the least writing out of all of us!^

‘Yeah, Sweetie Belle should finish the story! We might not get Cutie Marks for writing, but she might still have a chance!’

“Let me just have a look at this once more. I’ll try to keep writing in the same style as you two, otherwise the story will get messy.”

^And what is that supposed to mean?^

“I mean your style of writing completely focuses on Rainbow and how awesome she is while you neglect the others in the story. Just let me give this a try again, I won’t add any sappy details.”


The doors behind her closed. The spotlights went on. A loud countdown could be heard from the speakers. At the final beep, the doors in front of Rainbow Dash opened and she flew out with her wings spread. For two hours straight, she practiced her performance without making any mistakes. She could not afford to make even a single mistake once the stadium would be crowded with ponies.

In the evening, the gates to the stadium opened and every pony in the crowd was desperate to find a seat. All had come to watch the newest hit show ‘Rainbooms and Rainbows’. The show’s star had invited one of her friends to watch the show. Her name was Twilight Sparkle. Just like the rest of the ponies in the stadium, she was frantically searching for a seat. Eventually she found on the ring right above the exit. She had hoped that Rainbow would have reserved a VIP seat, but those spots were taken by the Wonderbolts.

When everypony in the stadium had found a seat, the loud countdown started and the spotlights shined their bright lights at the door. The countdown ended and the doors opened. When Rainbow Dash came into view, the crowd started cheering. Twilight was amazed at how awesome Rainbow Dash looked while wearing costume of the Wonderbolts. Just as Rainbow had practiced, she started doing all her signature tricks, including the fan-favourite ‘Buccaneer Blaze’. The crowd went crazy!

However, it appears that not only ponies were attracted by Rainbow Dash’s awesome performance. Being close to the exit, Twilight heard some noises from behind the gates, scary noises she had read about in one of her books. She knew exactly what was causing the noises: the undead. Zombies, if you want to call them that way. It was very difficult for her to take her eyes off the amazing show, but she knew what she had to do. She used her magic to teleport the crowd to a safe location before the zombies were able to breach the stadium.

Because she had practiced her show many times, Rainbow could afford losing focus for a bit when she saw the zombies right outside the stadium. She realized she needed to do something. When Twilight teleported the crowd to a safe location, Rainbow knew what she should do. Because of the lack of an audience, she could stop her show. She landed on the ground and flew over to Twilight to tell her that she should let the zombies in, but not let them out. Twilight tried to remain hidden above the exit as the zombies entered the stadium. This was the exact situation Rainbow was hoping for.

Rainbow Dash flew up to the sky above her once more. The zombies were watching in fear from the stadium below as she started coming back down again. Gaining speed, she approached the sound barrier. The zombies wanted to flee the stadium as they feared Rainbow was coming for them, but a magic barrier stopped them dead in their tracks. Their time had come: the zombies would get sent back to their graves. A mach cone formed around the blue pegasus. With a deafening blast, she crashed through the sound barrier and into the stadium. The overwhelming force blew away all the zombies as Rainbow landed on the ground, ready for another fight. However, all that she could see was Twilight walking towards her to congratulate her; she had already won with her awesomeness. The zombies had landed back in the graves from which they came. Rainbow’s technique was called the ‘Sonic Rainboom’, a force that shows no mercy to monsters.


“And done! But no Cutie Mark for me either…”

^Pssh, that’s lame. We finished such an awesome story yet none of us earned a Cutie Mark. Oh well, doesn’t matter. Applebloom, can you turn on the printer so we can print this out?^

‘Sure thing!’

^I can’t wait to see the look on Rainbow Dash’s face when she reads this!^

“We are going to show this to everypony in Ponyville, are we not?”

‘Of course!’

^I just hope that bookworm Twilight will like it. If she likes it, we have to be great writers! There’s no doubt about it!^

‘Ah hope mah sister will like it!’

“…I just hope this story won’t leak out to the rest of Equestria with me as one of the authors…”

^I’m not even going to bother asking about it. Did we get everything?^

‘No.’

“Wait, what did we miss?”

‘We forgot something at the very beginning.’

^Wait, are we thinking the same thing?^

“I think so.”

‘^“CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS STORYWRITERS, YAY!’^”

Comments ( 14 )

A story that talks about the Crusaders writing a story about Rainbow Dash beating zombies. :rainbowderp:

We need to go deeper...

I shall give it 4/5. Zombies are my favourite kind of monsters

Amazing thing is, I could see this happening in an episode.:raritywink: Good job Sir/Madam :moustache:

That was fun to read.

This was so cute. I too could totally see it being an episode! :scootangel:

“Yeah I got it. It’s called a caret and-"

'Scootaloo's a rabbit now?'

^I'M NOT A RABBIT! I'M NOT A DODO OR A CHICKEN EITHER! SO JUST-^

@WHO DARES MOCK THE ROYAL CANTERLOT VOICE? THOU SHALT TASTE MINE DISPLEASURE!@

^Sorry, Princess Luna.^

'Ah think we need ta do more editing.'

ye gads BANG... il be back in two ticks i have to cleen up the mess my heart made when it exploed from the cmc Daww'nes :heart:

Nice work scoots, derpy approves :derpyderp1:

Thanks for the kind words so far. I just changed one small error I made. (Had Applebloom say 'I' despite her accent.)

Pretty cool concept, i really like this:heart:

Awesome, absolutely awesome. Just like Rainbow Dash.

This was so much fun to read. I'd like to see you try doing more stories involving the "behind-the-scenes" effort of the CMC writing fics. Although this might present a bit of a challenge, as there's a possibility the joke might quickly get old, but that's definitely not dependent on your writing abilities. Maybe next they could write stories about Applejack or Rarity? Just an idea.

Good stuff! :rainbowlaugh:

That was really good, job well done. :pinkiehappy:

Before I read it all the dialong looks strange to me...it's good so far though.

Now that I've read it I understand the dialogue. Could you put everything the write in a quote box so we can get to it easier? That might work.


I love this story.

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