Im Red Moon im not the best fic maker but i try my best!
[Credit to Valve] Its the year 2015,a infective virus only known as the infection has been released over Equestria from a failed science test. The last 8 known survivors,Red Moon,Brosef,Glaze,Apple Jack,Vinyl Scratch,Draco,Sarge,Dr.Whooves,they fight against infected ponies witch they call zombies,among these are zombies with devastating abilities no one knows how they got them.The world they live in is like hell on Equestria.
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this is the SECOND wall of text I faced tonight
Ok, you know the enter button?, use it to make a new paragraph EACH time a NEW character is speaking
eg.
'LEFT' screamed Rainbow 'TO THE LEFT'
'I'M TRYING' Rarity yelled back
Got it?, good
Second, try adding a bit more detail
eg.
The trolley rushed past Sugar cube corner, narrowly missing a foal
Not
The trolley missed a foal as it went past Sugar cube corner
other than that, try getting someone to try and pre-read for you and ALWAYS listen to the commenter's, they'll point you in the right way with some 'nice' pointers
my god. what the heck does that even SAY?! sorry, i can't read that.
maybe if you used the 'enter' key it would be read-able?
>> I thanks you for your helpful critcism,this will help me try to make the ficition for descriptive and easier to read.