A famed thief is hired to pull off the heist of a lifetime but when one hitch in the plan happens and he's captured, his captors decide to use him as a test subject. A flash of light later, he finds himself stuck in a world full of bright, colorful ponies. Can he adapt to this strange land or will his inability to trust destroy this new world, as well as himself?
Before I read it: Put some more spacing in between paragraphs.
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I worked on this....
1549048 Other than that, It's pretty interesting, will be looking for future updates.
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yay glad you liked it so far ^^ i will be updating every week around the same time hopefully
Good so far. Here's hoping this gets featured, too many interesting fics slip through the cracks
So Applejack sees this weird creature shes never seen before in her orchard trying to steal her apples then she asks it come back to her house (which has her young sister in it) for lunch... that doesnt make a lot of sense. Also in the description it says Seb has an inability to trust so it doesnt make sense for him to immediately go with this pony whom he met ten seconds ago. I tend to rant about things.... so heres a random moustache keep it up
fave'd....
looks interesting
I agree with Grado, they're both too trusting of eachother. From what i've read from other fanfictions, Applejack would go and teach the human a thing or two about stealing her apples, and the human would tend to leg it, but i would expect that seeing as the human is a self claimed master theif that he would book it as soon as he heard Applejack's voice, and seeing that the description says that he essentailly finds it hard to trust others i doubt he would so easily give her his name and go into her house.
But apart from all that it's certainly an interesting idea and i shall fav it to see where it goes. soooooo ya for the idea have some of the local currency
Well, this is kind of ironic, since my name's also Sebastian... I like it, I will track this. One thing though, I know it's difficult, but try to have spaces between paragraphs.
Huh when I read the title I was expecting sly cooper for some reason
Sly Cooper: Honor Among Thieves.
I thought it was a Sly Cooper crossover until I saw the categories.
INB4FAMOUS
Inb4 featured, I must say.
Saw this on the front page and thought to myself, 'Aw snap! Dis gon b gud.'
Now... onto reading!
Holy crap its like only 5 paragraphs lol. I wished you could have given a bit more info on Seb's appearance.
Ah Twilight jumping the gun as always
Wow. I fave'd this just to see where it was going because the first chapter didn't really interest me, but this is great!! Keep up the good work!
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Thank you so much ^^ I know exactly what you're talking about and I should have drawn this out more but I wanted this chapter to end on a sort of sour note and also I actually hate i when authors drag out something so dramatic for too long. I hope you keep reading and enjoy it though ^^
Great story. I'll be waiting for more!
Plot twists so early? Hope you can keep up such a pace of excitement in the chapters to come.
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not really a plot twist mostly a plot thickener.
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Dat Rathalos
always nice to see another MH fan
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While true, to see a somewhat homeless thief would give the impression that he and his family were always down on their luck. That was what I saw anyway... To see that he actually had a life before he (apparently) let it deteriorate into what it was before he was forced into the magical land of ponies makes it feel more like a twist in my opinion.
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My personal favorite of the monsters.
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He explains more later on. it can still be a plot twist but I wanted it to be a plot thickener. either way works for me actually.
More Know i cant live without this o-o
Okay, good chapter. I was wondering where this could go with that first chapter, but it looks good right now.
right in the feels man.
Hmmmm. Y U MAKE ME CRY?!
Otherwise, it's well written and I'm interested to see more of this.
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Definitely
tuberculosis?
1592275 I was thinking this too
1592275 probably
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You'll just have to wait and see :)
wow and Twilight didnt even appologise for calling him a murderer. Yes I realise she will at the party I just thought that with your mentor right there she would
Seb sort of let her of the hook, for familial muder accusations, a little too easily in my opinion.
Still like the story though,
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I never said she was off the hook yet.
damn, i know the feels Seb. I know the feels
I'm interested, for now...so please continue.
in the sumary it's not 'captives' it's 'captors'
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Thanks, must have got changed in editing.
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Made me sad even as I read it again.
-Sturrn
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good I was aiming for that :D
Is it me or is this story turning towards depression?
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It doesn't get much happier.
Damn son! Seb has quite the grip on him!
Stop making me cry dammit!
Other than a few spelling mistakes, I'm liking this story.
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Never! :D
>>BlueHibiscus
Dangit! Oh well. Again, I likey. Can't wait for more of this story. :D