As I stroke each letter key The only thing that concerns me Is that my fingers dance so well To create a perfect story to tell
It's always been a dream of Rarity's to get invited to the Regal Customs Ball, now that the time has come her only available escort is Applejack. After some prominent persuasion and training, Applejack and Rarity become the Belles of the Ball, but once it's over, Applejack isn't so sure that she wants to go back to being the country mare she once was.
Page generated in 0.133 seconds
Total duration
1,040 users online
1,795,345 hits today, 2,571,732 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
This is hilarious.
Please sir, I'd like some more.
Off to a good start, I'm curious to see where this goes.
Brilliant mon ami, ah highly approve of both the concept, and the execution of the story. However, ah tink' Applejack could probably recall her previous 'training' from her Aunt and Uncle.
Write more, please!
It's so good!
lolz
That was actually a really good start. The dialogue and interactions between Rarity and Applejack are well put together and their relationship is similar to the show. My only complaint is the overemphasis on AJ's accent. While I agree that it is central to the plot of the story, I think that it could be toned down a little ( the constant use of if'n gets a bit grating after a while). On another note, do you have either a pre-reader or proofreader? If you don't, I would like to help improve the story a bit if you don't mind getting another set of brains in the mix (sounded a lot better my head).
3 stories in one day... does this one follow the canon of the other Rarijack universe or a whole new separate universe here?
I guess I'll find out by the time you see this xD
Also, loved what I read in that story you linked, was a really nice Fluttershy. I'd date that.
Oh, this is going to be good.
Rarity:
Applejack:
Great concept, and in this case, Applejack's speech mannerisms are necessary and just not for the sake of having them.
Good start, and tracking.
Tracking and whatnot.
1546413
But if she does, the story would become too similar to "Ah Ain't Got No Ack-Cent!".
Not exactly a bad thing, since that's my number one favorite story of the entire pony fiction catalog, but an author of his/her caliber would want the story to be more distinctive and independent.
1547434at
Please note, mon ami, that Ah' did say "possibly." One 'ting Ah try to avoid à tout prix is Telling other authors HOW TO WRITE THEIR STORIES. Ah' make suggestions, and feel properly honoré if dey' deem them worthy of use.
Love the picture of applejack.
Rarity, why do you even try?
1546358 Thank you so much, don't worry, more is on it's way!
1546410 Thank you! You're always one of the firsts to comment on my work, I really appreciate it, I think you'll enjoy what follows.
1546413 Thanks! That will be taken into account
1546441 Thank you so much! I will be soon!
1546634 I normally wouldn't lay on her accent that thick, but I did so for the sake of this story, it's hard when writing her dialogue because whether you make it thick, not so thick, or moderately thick, someone always has an issue with it. I've learned to just trust my insticts when it comes to that. Master Zero comes a long and occassionaly reminds me of dialogue grammar rules when I break them, and he's made it clear he's available for that. In terms of enhancing the concept of the story, I would defiintely be willing to have some close work with someone who could help this, and any other future stories shine across Fim Fiction
And also Equestria Daily since I can never seem to quite master the artistry of this craft well enough to get my work on there. 
1546635 'Twas supposed to be four but I didn't notice one failed moderation. Fixed the issues and it should be up soon though. "Element of Generosity" is a baby I want to nurture as much as I can and give to the world. Lady Applejack is next in line. I started to set it up in the same Rarijack universe I've done, then I thought about it turning into a ship-fic to establish a new ship verse...but as far as my mind goes for the rest of the story it may just end up being a really really touching friend fic.
1547014 Thank you so much! I was semi- worried at first I may be laying it on a bit to thick, but when I re-read it, I had no major qualms.
MOAR MOAR MOAR!!!!!!!!!!1
Very interesting so far. Personally, I can. See Rarity resembling Crazy Twilight before this is over lol
Will be following this one. I'm curious as to how this will turn out.
1549204
We don't get enough of that kind of stuff on this site! I totally want a good touching friend fic <3
Sounds awesome. Looking forward to Generosity fic once it's up.
One of my favorite friendships! Moar please.
1549204
I tend not to read stories until they are finished but your stuff tends to be quite good so Ill at least check out the first part. From your setup you could go any direction you wanted, you didn't get stuck on any path so far, you could take it romantic if you wanted, you could do it friendship. I'm curious to see where you could go with this in the friendship angle since it seems like the show has pretty much covered Applejack and Rarity getting along in that regard, plus you might want to have AJ surprise Rarity by being able to talk fancy since they have established she learned too in Mareyork or Newmare city or whatever.... oh yeah, Marehattin.... I think.
Wait, couldn't Applejack talk very noble like already? She had to when she went to Manehatten with her Aunt and Uncle. Unless she's just trolling, in which case, Celestia would be proud!
1551206 1. Love your profile pic. 2. Yes, yes, Celestia would, indeed, be proud.
3. I do not know why I am stalking the comments... 
images4.fanpop.com/image/photos/22000000/You-didn-t-see-anything-penguins-of-madagascar-22099334-500-214.gif
Hmmm...
If only Auntie and Uncle Orange could see her now.
Anyways... Ah'm mighty curious now on this here story.
Soundin' like more fun than a pickleberry jumpin' out of a barrel on a Sunday afternoon, ah reckon.
But still, ah'm no dope in readin' a good mighty fic, when it deserves one.
Thank ya kindly.
And hopefully you'll update soon! Best of luck.
YES! A NEW CHAPTER!
dtlux1
Ah reckon you're might too awesome.
Hahahahahahaha-! But honestly, you're an absolute gem!!! I love your work.
I could barely hold my building anticipation... as soon as you updated.
And ya didn't disappoint!!!! Yer just so amazin'
GRAH!!! Thank ya so kindly for everythin. Ah'll be lookin forward ta yer next update.
~Tootles.
It has been a great prologue so far. I eagerly await
1772369 Thank you soooo much for that compliment. School started taking over and I realized I put more pressure on myself by doing these Chapter by Chapter. I started thinking "Omg what if they hate the updates because they waited so long for them and they don't meet their expectations?!"
But as the semester ends I should hopefully be finished with this AND Element of Generosity and have some new stuff up too. Just gotta figure out how to project myself from where I am now on Lady Applejack into the actual premise of the story. I have come to notice while writing that the story of getting up to the Regal Customs ball could've been a one-shot in itself and I'm thinking "How on earth did that happen?"
But the current trasition, as quick as it is, works for the situation, I just have to gauge if whether people feel "Ok we're dragging this RC Ball out, get to the rest," or "Omg, but how are they gonna get through the ball now that the secret is out?!"
Ultimately it'll be what I feel will be best conveyed as a writer, but...ok I'm rambling...
...again thank you for the compliment! I'm glad you enjoyed the update!
Yay that this fanfic is not dead.
woot a boo this my jam i was waiting for chapter since i don't remember and boom here it is
Haha! I jumped the gun earlier on commenting on AJ's Manehatten accent. Awesome way to bring it up, was so very...Applejack. Please, continue!
Liking this so far... two chapters in, and it's good.
Looking forward to the next update!
D'aww...
AJ's too kind for her own good...
For super duper awesome stories like this one!
See, now I know why I watch you
Very interesting story so far...
Old habits die hard, even if it's just for a single day!
Please continute! Its been nearly a year since the last update!