The pink party mare sat at the pristine, polished marble counter, observing her tiny, tasty treats. She counted them all mentally as she put them into the carrying case. One, two, three, some cupcakes for me, four, five, six, I made these for kicks, seven, eight, nine, these will taste divine, ten, and eleven, these cupcakes will send you... to... heaven? The confectioner scratched her head. No, that won't do. I already used a heavenly rhyme. Wait a moment. Eleven? I could have sworn that I made twelve. Now where did that other cupcake go? Pinkie searched the counter, she searched the entire kitchen, both high and low, both left and right, and even through the fourth wall, but to no avail. Sighing in defeat, Pinkie went back to the counter only to discover the treat was in the box the whole time. "Huh?" She cried. "How did that get in there?" Pinkie Pie shrugged. "Oh well. I guess it doesn't matter." She picked up the box and threw it into her saddlebag. At that moment, Mr. Cake trotted into the room.
"Oh, hi Pinkie. Whatcha got there?" He asked.
"It's just a box of cupcakes for me and my friends. You see, Apple Bloom finally got her Cutie Mark, and me and the girls are going to celebrate with a cupcake party! It's gonna be so super-spectacular, awesome, amazingly super-duper, fun and-" Mr. Cake seemed to twitch. "Um, are you okay?"
"Oh, hi Pinkie. Whatcha got there?" He repeated.
"Um... Mr. Cake, I just told you."
"No you didn't. I think that I would remember an explanation from you, Pinkie." He said.
"Okay...." Wow. This is just... weird. The pink-maned pony thought. She explained everything to the confused Cake once again, and then she trotted out of Sugar Cube Corner to go meet her friends. Trotting through the town of Ponyville, Pinkie occasionally said hello to the ponies she knew. Octavia and Vinyl Scratch were having a musical contest, just a bit of friendly competition really. Pinkie knew that they were secretly the best of friends, and possibly even more than that. She giggled at both of their confident smiles. They were the best of the best in their respective genres, and together, the music was entrancing and enticing. And sitting on a bench over by one of the markets was Lyra Heartstrings and Bon Bon. They were giggling and staring into each others eyes. Pinkie smiled, noting how perfect everything was in Equestria. Spike had recently stopped chasing Rarity, and she saw him trailing after Sweetie Belle. The two of them ran in circles around the fountain in the center of the town. And right over there, by the Carousel Boutique, the TARDIS appeared , and out stepped the Doctor and Derpy. The yellow-eyed mare was leaning on the Time Lord pony, whispering something into his ear, and he chuckled. Things couldn't possibly better in the wide, wide world of Equestria. She thought with a grin. And then she saw something strange. As she trotted past Lyra and Bon Bon, the two ponies seemed to be transparent. It couldn't be. Pinkie did a double take. "Phew!" She sighed in relief. The lovers were just as solid as ever.
The party mare pushed on through the town of Ponyville, making her way to Sweet Apple Acres, which was where the party was being held for Apple Bloom. She started to bounce, bubbling with anticipation of the fiesta that was soon to come. "Oh, this is going to be a blast!" The pink mare shouted. As she bounded her way through the entrance of the Apple Family Farm, she was greeted with a group hug from all of her friends.
"What took ya so long?" Applejack cried.
"I was making these." Pinkie said, pulling the purple box of delectable treats out of her saddlebag. She lifted the lid to reveal the heavenly delights to her friends.
"Oh, Pinkie!" Twilight gasped. "Those look amazing!"
"Well, they should! I mean, I spent all day making them!" The confectioner was obviously proud of her work.
"Well, dear, anything made by your hooves will taste simply divine! I just know it!" Said Rarity.
Tears of joy found their way into Pinkie's eyes. "Aww! Thank you!" Suddenly, a pair of butter-cream colored hooves wrapped around her neck.
Fluttershy whispered something to her, probably the same thing that Derpy had whispered to the Doctor, for it brought the same kind of chuckle from Pinkie's lips. They had been marefriends for a couple months now, and Pinkie loved her Flutters dearly. She couldn't imagine a life without her, or any of her friends at that. They all meant so much to her. Pinkie looked at her friends. "You girls didn't start the party without me, did you?" She asked, her tone very serious.
Rainbow Dash laughed. "Of course not Pinks!" She said. "How could it even be called a party without you?" Pinkie giggled.
"You're right Dashie! How could it be called a party without me?" She launched ten feet into the air off of pure joy alone before continuing. "Let's go!" On the pink mare's command, they all dashed for the barn where the guest of honor waited with her friends, Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle, and Spike. Pinkie Pie practically buck-kicked the door open and cheered. "Let's get this party started!" As if on cue, Vinyl Scratch and Octavia were by her side with their respective instruments of musical creation.
"What's the occasion?" Vinyl asked.
"Yes, do tell us." Octy added.
Pinkie was brimming with excitement. "Little Apple Bloom finally got her Cutie Mark!" She squealed.
"That is reason to celebrate!" The DJ exclaimed.
"I concur." Tavi agreed.
"Ah'm not little!" The filly for whom this party was for cried.
"Oh!" Pinkie gasped. "Of course you aren't! You're a big mare now that you have your Cutie Mark."
"Yep!" Apple Bloom said. "An' do ya know what it represents?" The pink pony observed the symbol of a clockwork gear underneath a hammer and nail.
"Is it......." Pinkie pondered. "Oh, I know! It's tools! Tools and construction!"
"That's right!" Apple Bloom cried. "So when's this party gonna start anyway?"
Pinkie Pie looked at everypony. "Right.......... Now!"
A fan fic starting my two favorite ponies?
SOLD!
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Tragedy.
Sad.
Downvote and pay more fucking attention to the mod blogs.
1542115 I want to congratulate you on being first, as well as posting the first ever gif on any of my stories.
1542134 I'm that kool.
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RAINBOW DASH for 2012!
Also, I write my stories like this.
(So not SFW)
I like it. continue on, my friend!
1542190 Thank you. At least some ponies read the fuckin' story before thumbing down. And for that, we thank you. - Daniel Tosh
This is gonna get trippy. I mean like Matrix trippy.
1542183
YAY!
1542183
Tell me. Tell me, I dare you.
What's the difference between a Sad fic and a Tragedy fic on FiMFiction?
1542212 you're welcome
1542281 Okay, i admit that i wasn't paying attention when i tagged the story. but in my defence, it was three in the morning, and i was trying not to fall asleep. I did change them though. im sorry for snapping like that. and how did it get past moderation with the conflicting tags anyway? look, I don't want an enemy on this site. I truly am sorry for the outburst. as for the difference between the two tags, sad is things like 'My Little Dashie' and 'Where You Can't Follow'. Tragedy would be a fic where somepony very important dies a horrible death, or gets raped.
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Okay, now I'm unsure as to what I should label this fic as. So i'm gonna finish it and then let the readers decide.
1542335
No.
A Tragedy is a fic without a happy ending. Ponies die. Ponies get irrevocably hurt. And there is no happy ending. My Little Dashie was a tragedy. Where You Can't Follow was a tragedy.
A Sad fic is one where bad shit happens. Yeah, it's really bad. Equestria is dying. Celestia is out of the picture. Rainbow's wings get torn off. But in the end, it's for a reason. In the end things get better. Fallout: Equestria was Sad. Past Sins was Sad.
Now, if you don't want enemies, don't piss people off and don't post things when you're too tired to think properly.
1542384 Just looked up both My Little Dashie and Where You Can't Follow, and they're both tagged as.... you guessed it! Sad! Look up the fics before blabbin' about them.
She wakes up the next morning. She checks her calender. It marked today as... Apple Bloom's cutie mark celebration? Huh, she could have swore she changed it yesternight. Oh well. "Pinkie!" Mrs. Cake calls, "Don't forget to make the cupcakes for Apple Bloom's party!"
And so on.
1542425
Just because the authors tagged them as 'Sad' doesn't mean it's right. Look at Wanderer D.'s latest post and the damned FAQ.
1542430 *giggle*
1542457 Well, why don't you waste your time correcting them? Or better yet, leave the correcting up to the mods!
1542477
Well, two reasons. The first isn't necessary, per say, because they're older works; yours is a work in progress, so correcting errors is a lot more important. The mods are not omnipresent and hardly infallible, and having them correct some dipshit on the proper use of his tags is a waste of their time.
And don't change the fething subject. This is your shit to handle, so why don't you address the issue I raised instead of using a red herring to take the heat off of you?
1542500 Okay..... look, i have a lot of other shit going on right now. I'm not used to such.... shall we say..... blunt criticism. I apologize, and from this point on, I will welcome your- and everyone else's- criticism. I have taken down the conflicting tags, and I am leaving it up to the readers to decide what it should be.
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Blunt, eh? I must say I've heard worse.
Basically, you need to ask yourself if it has a good ending. If it does, it's Sad. If it doesn't, it's a Tragedy. Simple as that.
1542576 Well, you see... wait, have we resolved the fight? anyway, back to what i was saying. The ending will be both happy and sad. or maybe i'm wrong. could you read it once it's finished and tell me what you think it should be? I lean toward tragedy, but i have doubts.
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If you plan to end it sad, its a tragedy, if it could become happy, its just sad. I think that's what that blog said. (Still a weird difference though)
1542384
Miss-tagging a fic as tragedy and sad instead of one or the other seems like the least harmful thing that someone could do. A completely innocent mistake, and a mistake that deserves neither your chastisement nor your dislike. If you want to give criticism BY ALL MEANS do so, but nobody ever benefited more from someone berating them for a mistake than if they have just given some constructive advice. This doesn't matter so much now that this is resolved, but my point still stands.
1542597 Hey! I think we may be resolving things! Calm your tits!
1542590
Depends on if you want to keep arguing or not.
1542597
At first, it was because Silver Hoof was blatantly ignoring an issue a mod brought up; I don't think I was being very abrasive about it at first. Then Silver Hoof started attacking me and everything I said instead of, you know, looking into what I was saying for a moment.
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Yes your right, I tried to fix my comment.
but... um....
... little abrasive.
1542638 I do like to argue, but i think the point is settled. And like i said, I don't deal well with blunt criticism. But thank's for the chance to banter with such a sharp mind.
1542660
Thanks for the compliment and sorry for getting a bit out of hand there.
1542667 Will you read the story? And then decide if u no likie? it would be appreciated.
Applejack.
Confident.
Was the paragraph with all of the shipped couples really necessary? It might be just me generally not liking them all, but it just seemed unnecessary; they're never mentioned again.
Final verdict? Too short. Barely 1k words here, and that's a minimum, not a good number. If you want to kick your story off, kick it off with the first chapter! Don't write a thousand words, write four thousand as you get the the heart of what the fic is about. There just isn't enough for me to have an opinion abut right now.
1542720 I write short chapters most of the time. I think the only ones with more are 'The Unseen' and... heh, i forgot the title of the other one. i'll look it up. as for the shippings, it was intended to show how perfect thing were in Equestria, and then to show the strange things happening to Pinkie. Will change typos.
1542281 Tragedy is largely when a certain character is killed, permantley disabled, or something along those lines. Sad is more for things like a character falls ill, gets badly hurt, or goes through some sort of emotional tramua. I'm not 100% sure if that's accurate though.
Sees a story that seems promising.
Reads about a same-gender pairing.
Closes down.