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ThatFriendlyBronie


Hello. Just a goofball wanting to contribute to the community!

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After an accident, a lone Time Lord finds himself mysteriously transported to the land of Equestria. Not only that, but he seems to have transformed into a pony. How peculiar. What strange adventures will he have in this magical land, and who will he meet?


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I loved the overall story of it all, I personally can't find any complaints or faults towards this whatsoever. Then again, I'm not a very experienced editor, but all I know is that it kept he hooked...or rather... hoofed.

I'm with Vince on this one. Can't wait to see where this story goes from here.

YES! Bronies and Whovians unite!
I can't wait for the next chapter! :pinkiehappy:

FINALLY, a story that explains how the Doctor came to be in Equestria! :pinkiegasp:

Oh god this is amazing. The Doctor is perfectly in character, Zecora is perfect (I actually imagined her saying 'medicine' in three syllables before I read that she did that so that's how good you rhyming was.) and your writing is superb. I seriously think this is what the Doctor would do in that situation being turned into a pony, he would be confused but accept it as a temporary problem. Great work!

BLOODY AMAZING!!!

Great work, looking forward to more!

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: There are dozens of them if you know where to look, actually.

Oh; Brilliant!
Tracking! :twilightsmile:

"It was a bolt of superheated particles, and a heavy dose of radiation to boot, hurtling forward at the speed of light."

Might want to change this to "Just below the speed of light".

If it was traveling at the speed of light, then he wouldn't have time to see it. By the time he sees it, it'll have already hit him. Yeah, Doctor Who usually plays pretty loose with science, but this one is pretty glaring and easily fixed, haha.

Other than that, this was highly amusing. I would have appreciated getting to know which characters would be involved in this story, other than the Doctor of course, but I'll find out in due time. I just hope it isn't Derpy, blah to her I say! :P

Still, looking forward to what comes next.

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Fixed! And as for other ponies, I'm planning on EVERY. SINGLE. ONE. Well, other then some of the newer ones, like the Flim-Flam brothers and the Cake's babies.

And thank you everyone! For my first story ever written for fun, I wasn't expecting such a large, overwhelmingly positive response! Thank you all, I'll try to have the second chapter up by friday. :twilightsmile:

I have never seen a Doctor Whooves x Zecora ship fic before, so kudos to you and it's even well written on top of it. I want to see where this story goes.

Very well written! I only saw one mistake and that was close to the end.

"You are excited! That I can tell! But please, please, sit down until I can figure out what makes you unwell!”

If people think I'm trolling, well you're right!

Just kidding! Liked it a lot! Tracked and thumbs up!

I like this a lot! :heart:

This is definitely one of my FAVORITE explanations of how doctor whooves came to equestria. :raritystarry:

I can't wait to see more! tracking your story! :pinkiehappy:

:moustache:Methinks a certain draconequus is involved.*strokes mustache*

HELL FUCKING YES

I don't think even the Doctor will ever get used to Pinkie Pie.

Hmm...
itchy scalp, tingly stomach, cold ears...
I sense a party in the future. The Shrubbery Sense is never wrong!

This may be one of the best stories I've ever read.

I congratulate you, sir. Have a mustache. :moustache:

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I would agree... but the way the figure talks or thinks indicate that the observer is female.
The biggest hint to this effect is the second of our mystery observers sections:

A lone figure watched the brown colt from nearby tree, grinning to itself. "Oh my, this was going even better then expected!" Nibbling on some fresh popcorn, they could only giggle in delight. The transition made the Doctor quite the handsome colt, even if his hide was a little bland.

To start, Discord does NOT giggle, nor do I think he would call anypony handsome. This leads me to comclude the stranger is female.

The first section shows that the observer can use magic which leads me to rule out any Earth Ponies with about 85% and Pegasi with 65% accuracy though I am unable to rule out Unicorns due to Twilight showing that cloud walking spell back in Sonic Rainboom.

My guess however is that it is either one of the princesses or Alicorn Lauren Faust.



Also brillient job on this chapter, can not wait to see what thw next one brings. You get ALL my :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::yay:

325393 Lets hope the observer is some one benevolent like the princesses or Faust. Other wise we may have a problem.:fluttershyouch:

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My my my, we have quite the detective over here! But are you correct, or have I potentially been misleading you on purpose? After all, there is always OC ponies, other species, Eris, etc. etc.

As Pinkie Pie might say... "Don't think inside the chimney!"

Also, as a side note, anyone think I should try to get this on EQD?

Love your story! :heart::heart::heart:

I can't wait to see how this goes!! :pinkiehappy:

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You know I almost mentioned OC's but decided agajnst it last second. But you are absolutly right... Pinkie woild say something like that.:pinkiesmile:

I love the fact that the Doctor is so distracted by Equestria to realize he should probably be looking for the TARDIS, which is conveniently missing... hmm:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:
I honestly can't wait for when he realizes that he completely forgot about it:facehoof::eeyup:

Also now you've got me wondering what Eris would look like in Equestria.:derpytongue2:

You used your instead of you're when Pinkie was addressing him. Other than that I truly enjoy the story. I can't wait to see lyra and him interact more!

Interesting chapter, but I can't be quite as nice this time as I was with my last comment.

This chapter is in serious need of an edit. I'm not a native English speaker, but even to me there's several easily noticed errors where you mix past and present tense. There's probably spelling errors which I missed, but one that I did spot was this: Im the Doctor. Just… dropping in, really.”

The story itself was pretty amusing to read. As for trying to send it to EQD: No. Absolutely not.
Before you even Think of doing that, you need to get an editor. Someone that can find the errors I mentioned above and any other. If you don't, you're going to be rejected quite quickly, and you only have three strikes until you're not allowed to submit the story again. It would be a shame to get rejected for something so easy to correct.

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Ah, I was afraid this would happen. For the last chapter, I had at least 3 guys edit it, not including myself. I wanted it to be perfect. But this time, I was just so eager to get it out to you guys, I thought me editing would suffice.

Thank you for your comment- I think I'm going to take this chapter down for a least a few days while I edit it.

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Don't worry about keeping the chapter on here, you can always edit in fixes afterwards. Unless you're making any changes to the story or events, I don't think you need to remove and re-submit it.

Just avoid sending it to EQD :).

One tip is to get your story looked at by editors on Ponychan and on the various IRC channels. There are usually dedicated rooms for fanfic writing, and a lot of people willing to help you with editing.

You captured the 10th Doctor's persona very well
Can't wait for more.

Will there be an enemy that The Doctor has to fight to save Equestria?
Or just The Doctor's usual shenanigans?

I like this so far, I can't wait till he gets to ponyville lol, I can't wait to see him meet Twilight those are my favorite fics the Doctor and Twilight they both super genius

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Not to be rude, but did it occur to you to check the comments almost directly above your own?

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My phone was messing up and wasn't loading comments. Fimfiction tends to not work that well on my old phone. Now that I can read the comments, it's a moot point.

Bloody fantastic! so awesome i found this. i'm a whovian so it makes it more awesomer!:pinkiecrazy:

Having reviewed this on /fic/, I'm tracking this to see where it goes. Hope you do the most of your potential here, because this could get really awesome if handled right!

you need to write another chapter! you're making me die here!:flutterrage:

Ooooh I wonder who the mystery figure is
Anyway very good chapter cant wait for more
The 10th Doctor is very well represented in this

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Still missed fixing the error I quoted ;).

"Im the Doctor. Just… dropping in, really.”

Might want to change that to "I'm the Doctor."

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I have no idea why but for some reason I'm thinking it's the pony-fied version of River Song

>> ThatFriendlyBronie
so trying not to be impatient/pressure you but when will there be more?

I hope you're planning on posting more, I'm really enjoying this so far. And I'm with MrWhatnow - River Song would be my guess too. :pinkiecrazy: Also, I think 'Slitheen' should be capitalized, it's a family name. (Loved the 'Timelord Tip', by the way.)

I love this. It's bloody brilliant why haven't I read this before?

Is this over or is it just on a 4 month hiatus?

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The later x3

Laziness, School finals, laziness, then vacation, then more laziness.

But, about halfway through chapter three!

I hope my doctor whooves story ends up as good

This is bloody brilliant! Write MOAR!:flutterrage:

Awesome! I never thought of Zecora meeting the Doctor. Zecora is one of my favorites :heart:

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