When Pinkie Pie left home, she promised her parents she'd write home. A few years after the fact, she decides it'd be best to keep them informed of how she's doing.
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Second Place in the EqD Nightmare Night 2012 Fanfic Competition
The Key is in the Subtleties
(Some pieces of subtlety may have been lost between Google Docs and here, but I don't dare touch this after what this version's accomplished.)
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where does the dark come in?
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well for starter's pinkie seems to be trapped in SugarCube corner. and the obsessive focus on Pumpkin being a magic prodigy and needing constant attention and how terrible it is that pinkie would even think for a moment of leaving her all strongly reminded me of 'It's a Good Life'
Eddit: Is there a way to do spoiler tags on these?
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im not sure. but i like this story ,it's good
1543561 Here's what you can do. Type "spoiler" in all caps, then type (color=azure) text (/color)
Replace the parentheses with brackets, then type your spoiler where I typed "text". That will change your text to azure, which is so difficult to see against this page it's darn near invisible. Anyone who wants to read it can highlight the azure text. Go ahead and explain it, because I'm not 100% clear on this fanfic either.
Also what happened to Pound? He got mentioned early on, but then vanished... coupled with the stuff about Pumpkin being alone or lonely makes me think he died.
Did I guess right?
1545271 Well, it does say the previous copies of their book got burned or smashed, so there's a thought.
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1, read the first capitalized letter of each paragraph
2, realize whats happening
3,????
4, cry yourself to sleep while it the fetal position
also to azure-sparks you are a sick bastard and I love you.
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Clever trick the author did
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Similarly, read the first letter of each word in the title.
I'm just on a roll with puzzle-like horror pony fics. NIGEB fucking got me though.
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go check out A FLeat|ng LIght |n thE DArkneS
you'll love it
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Already read it. I read that first and one of the EqD comments suggested that this and NIGEB were similar stories so I checked them out.
Somehow I missed the Nightmare Night story contest on EqD so I'm just kinda going through those stories now.
I read the first-letters-thing. Daaamn
It kind of freaked me out... Reeeaally nice work.
All the first letters of the each paragraph put together
HELP ME I CANT STOP SMILING AND I WANT TO SCREAM
well then. After reading this and a fleeting light in the darkness, im going to get no sleep.
Pretty damn good! My only criticism is that the "key" is really obscure. Like, if I hadn't read the comments, I would have just thought it was a silly story. I wonder how the hell the first person figured it out...
Either way, I really enjoyed it! Now if you'll excuse me, I have to go get my shotgun and kick in the door to Sugarcube Corner.
I don't care how much freaky magic you have, don't NO one make Pinkie Pie sad on MY watch...
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To be fair, I painstakingly lined it up in the Google Docs version so that "First" and "Letters" were both unnecessarily capitalized and directly on top of one another. This was more or less just a direct port from one hosting site to another, but with different font sizes and line lengths... yeah.
Anyway, thank you very much!
(And go easy on 'em. She's just a baby...)
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Yeah, that would do it. Understand, my only concern was that no one would get the "vhat a tvist" moment without spoilers. Any chance we could get the Gdocs link? For real, once I figured it out, this... this was creepy as fuck.
Maybe you're right. The tactical 12-gauge may be a bit... excessive for a toddler. What she REALLY needs is some down-home discipline. Let me put down the Remington and go grab my belt. Better yet, anyone got a switch? I'll show you how we deal with little brats Texas-style.
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hoy2q4hs3d8aiZReOWlUZHXOAu588pG5UXrYYbCbC94/edit
There ya go, the original Google Doc that got submitted to EqD for the contest. And yes, in some weird way I'm glad it was that damn creepy. Means I did my job with this.
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Well... shouldn't you be happy it's creepy? I mean, would you prefer if I found it to be the feel good fic of the year?
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All I'm saying is that while yes, this is creepy and that's its purpose, and yes, I do like that, I wish I could write something that wasn't so dark and/or saddening for once. Like an actual "feel good" story of some sort. That's something I feel I need to work on.
I didn't catch the Subtleties when I originally read this in EqD.
Now it all makes sense. I swear I felt the shiver run straight down my spine.
FOR THOSE THAT WANT TO KNOW THE CREEPY PART WITHOUT MAJOR SPOILERS:
Why are the words in the p.s part capitalized? Is it an error? Or a hint?
I didn't get it originally. Then I saw that the letters at the beginning spell oh, SPOILERS
HELP ME I CANT STOP SMILING AND I WANT TO SCREAM
why is it so creepy? I just want to know.
This... Just looked closely at first letter of each word in title... Um...
Always chaotic...
1543604 SPOILERZ Like that?
Always Chaotic...
OH MY GOD NOW I'M CONFUSED ON THE DIFFERENCE AGAIN.
... *Resumes reading to edit in proper commentary after.*
That... is really subtle. I feel like a lot of it flew over my head, but I'm still kinda squinting like "... Pinkie. What did you do?" Or, rather, what has Pumpkin done? Or... what happened to Pumpkin?
Edit2:
OOOOOO. OKAY. Comments below helped me figure it out a bit more. That's really clever.
I'm so glad I found this again! I remember the first time I read this, I didn't have an account yet, this sent shivers down my spine when I tried that letter thing. Didn't get to say this last time I read it, so I'm saying it now. Good job and you got yourself another follower!
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I don't understand what's going on all I know is it's something creepy can you please help me to understand what is the premise of your story it was a good read though but something just feels oddly off wrong somehow