When Luna and Twilight discover the Forward Unto Dawn, they wonder what this could possibly bring to the peaceful land of Equestria. They have no idea what could possibly be on this odd object racing to the ground.
When Cortana awakens Master Chief from his slumber, she warns that the Dawn is falling to the surface of an unknown planet. Chief must find a way to get to the ground safely and survive in this new, oddly colored place.
This the beginning of my first fanfiction. It will be a continuing story until I decide to stop. I hope everyone will be supportive and encouraging as I write this story for all you guys.
Chapters (14)
Grammar issues, missing words, but the beggining seems pretty solid. You might want to take a look at some top rated fics to see how they format to give your fic style points. And you probably need a new/better proofreader, or even better an editor.
not bad, moar?
mmm
This....I need to see more before I make a final judgement
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mmm you should search another cover image, you are going to get hate from other people
needs to be longer and you need to watch for grammar and in some cases lack of words but not a bad start
1516577 agreed i saw this cover on a different more popular halo crossover
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it's from the haylo series, by marinemarksman, Haylo: a new world
1516596 yea that's the one
1516572 I agree. It's only one chapter and I saw a few grammar errors. But for all I know this will be a very good story considering the beggining. Please, by all means, continue.
1516610I don't want to make a rash decision and thumbs down it(or up) with out a better sample.
Seems interesting. Keep on writing
You should continue, so I can give this a proper rating.
This is very solid writing, you should read some of the higher rated fics on this site to see how most stories are formatted here, it would be much better.
Thanks everybody! All of your input has been very helpful. I had no idea about the picture, so I'll change that right away.
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hey dude, if you want i can give u some pictures for your cover art, here are some:
th06.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2012/247/c/8/halo_4_by_pratt_face-d5dlu1e.jpg
th01.deviantart.net/fs71/200H/i/2012/170/c/6/halo_4__the_fight_begins_again_by_ryomaninja-d541unu.jpg
th06.deviantart.net/fs71/200H/f/2011/157/0/c/halo_4_is_here_by_supermanlovesaspen-d3i8e6y.jpg
th00.deviantart.net/fs70/200H/f/2012/227/4/9/wallpaper_test___halo_4__by_mackaged-d5b88v5.jpg
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1516920 Thanks! I'll be sure to use one of these
1516685 True, I guess we'll just have to wait and see what will happen.
For some reason Twi reciting "Forward Unto Dawn" gave me some awesome goosebumps. Keep at it!
YBG out -
Ok guys, I went back and edited this chapter a little more. Since I'm still going to high school, I'll try my best to update this with new chapters as often as I can.
whoa! spectacular story! i cant wait to hear more :D
You capture twiight's, Spike's, and Luna's personalities great
i was like
when Luna came in
Don't make a master chief a pushover, ok?
Attack then make friends....screw its your story
1518701 Lol don't worry, I won't. One of the biggest reasons I began writing this was because of all of these different fanfictions not being able to show the attitude of Master Chief. They all make him seem cruel, whiny, or really anything other than how he really is. I hope to be able to get his attitude almost exactly as how he is. So, if you guys could tell me how I'm doing, that would be great!
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Hell to the yeah!
1518738 Haha! I just put it up today though! I was actually about to start working on the second chapter.
1518738 Haha! I just put it up today though! I was actually about to start working on the second chapter.
moar
Moar
Moar!
MOAR!
MOOOOOAAAAAARRRRR!!!!!
omg i can see fluttershy coming up to master chief and doing this
chzbronies.files.wordpress.com/2011/08/my-little-pony-friendship-is-magic-brony-dont-make-fluttershy-pull-the-trigger.jpg
1516920>>1517067 i vote for the second picture
1519595 Sadly, I could not find that picture even though it was the one I was going to use
, so I got as close to it as I could.
1519751 aw ish. i like the picture you got but i still think the other one would have been better.
1519764 I totally agree
Okay everybody, I have been working off and on on the second chapter to this series. It is going really well and I hope to be able to publish it tomorrow!
However, I will not be able to work on it monday because I have state marching band all day down in Pueblo, Colorado. I may not work on it tuesday either because of a new video game. But I will try. And you're all going to love it!
Sorry, I'm a bit tired. 
this looks like its going to be good
it seems alot of halo fics have been coming out recently must be because halo 4 is coming out really soon
1521147 More than likely. Although its funny, whenever I think about Halo 4, my hands start getting jittery with excitement lol
MOAR!
please if you want
Ok guys. I am almost finished wih the second chapter but I gotta go Pueblo now. I'm gonna try and see if the hotel I'm staying at has a computer and if not, maybe my friend will let me use his lap top. If that does't work, then you all will just have to wait until Tuesday.
Yes, a update
May i have moar sir?
and i cant wait to see if the ODST pod lands in ponyville 
Sweet I am liking how this is going, unlike other stories involving the Chief and the Mane 6, you're actually taking your time to set up both parties instead of them realizing the ship is landing, meeting each other and becoming friends all with in the same chapter. This looks VERY promising.
There must be PARTY!
Im gonna download this story... I mean, um, if its alright...
1524051 i completely agree
I like this so far, going to like it now.
Like the story, but the parts with Accurate Readings seems to be deus ex machina. Not that it's BAD but it does detract partly from the experience. It's like saying "hey look at this character! Now say goodbye becuase I only made him for this specific purpose." Depending on what your trying to do, it could have been better to use a pony everyone already knows, like Doctor Whooves for example. Of course, if you don't want fanon you could have simply said Luna firgured it out becuase she moves around meteors n' stuff. Don't want any of those falling on someone's head.
Also, in my opinion, while Fluttershy IS timid the part where she asks if it's ok to feel sorry for the timberwolves is a LITTLE over the top.
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http://browse.deviantart.com/?q=halo+4&offset=72#/d541unu
1524729 holy sweet mother of jesus that is awesome!
Thanks for all of your constructive criticism. When I wrote this, I was in a bit of a hurry since I had to leave in five minutes. I'm going to go back through and edit this story.
I mean chapter