Always occupied to make graphs and plans for nothing.
Photo Finish holds a contest to find the next filly star to be on magazine's covers. Sweetie Belle want to participate, stating that it may be their cutie mark, Scootaloo refuses. But her loyalty to her friend and some snarky comments from Diamond will make Scootaloo participate to this contest all the same.
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I just read the discription ,and I f***in love this idea.
This is gonna be good...
It's a crying shame that this won't get featured.
Despite some grammar and punctuation errors and the "oh crap" line that shouldn't be in there (Scootaloo's just a filly she shouldn't be repeating such foul lagnuage even if it is from Rainbow Dash or her parents) this was pretty good.
It was great that Diamond Tiara got beaten by one of the Cutie Mark Crusaders, hopefully that'll shut her up for a while.
just finished it..... AND HOLY CRAP, this needs a sequal or another part.
That was nice. Good job!
1512006 Reverse psychology doesn't work either.
I gotta admit, the tensional build-up in this story kept me interested!
Now, it's time for my not-so-famous review!
The premise and plot of this story was great and executed very well, but there was way too many grammatical errors throughout. I'm no "grammar nazi" or anything of the sort, but there were too many times that I had to reread lines that didn't make sense. Either than that, it was a really great story!
Overall Rating: 7.0 out of 10
Just work on your grammar, and you'll go far, mate
Faved but no like do to a lack of proofreading. Very good effort that's let down by lack of polish really.
more!!!
First of all, thanks for reading my story.
Secondly, as you may have noticed, English isn't my first language. So, that's why I've made so much grammatical mistakes. It's the same thing for punctuation. For the proofread, I did it but as seen as the english isn't my first language and no one in my circle of friends didn't speak English well either (and aren't bronies by the way), I'm a little stuck here.
I like it good work.
Put your punctuation inside the quotation marks and a few misspelled words. The other fillies told him to smile. Proofread your own work, maybe put it in Microsoft Word or another spellcheck, or have someone proofread for you.
I would do it.
Photo Finish stories catch my eye. There certainly aren't many. The story concept is sound. As for the execution...well, practice makes perfect.
Cute, but this doesn't feel complete...
1512278 Not to mention the first half of the literature didn't know which point of view to follow. It was Sweetie Belle; it was Scootaloo; it was the author; it was Sweetie Belle; the Author; Scootaloo, Nicolas Cage's...
Writer, pick a side!!!
ze magiks!