Applebucking season has come around again this year, and Applejack finds herself struggling with the massive workload yet again. But something else seems to be weighing down on her mind...
My first ever fanfiction, mostly written as an experiment to see wherever or not I can actually write. I wonder if anyone else will read this now. Maybe it'll just get lost in the archives, like the thousands of other stories.
...Hello? Anyone there?
It's cold down here...
(Image source is Feyrah on deviantART)
Chapters (1)
Look, I'll give you my honest opinion right now, before I even take a look. If you're going to tell me it's crap, then it's crap. Don't say it... Ever... The worst that is going to happen is people are going to tell you that they don't like it, but that doesn't mean it's crap. Take it to the Ponychan Training grounds, and have it reviewed. We'll help you. We'll get this to something you will be proud of.
Anything else to say? Nope, I'll take a look because I don't think you're writing is going to be crap. Sure, a little rough maybe, but nothing as bad as to scare me away forever.
You're too hard on yourself. You did a very nice job for a first story! Looking forward to more from you.
Crap? Where? I don't see any crap. All I see is a great story. The only (and I mean ONLY) problem I can see is minor. The "j" in "Applejack" is not capitalized. Coming from most people on this site, five stars desn't mean much, but from me it does. I only give fives for perfection, and you have earned them.
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I agree. This is a well written, heartwarming tale. The writer should be proud.
jeezuz why do the best authors punish themselves so?!
Well written and represented, good setting details and flourish where it counted. realistic and deep characters for a short story.
5-star, hoofs down
You only made one major mistake, and i'll admit its a DOOZY: you used "handed" once in there
For shame!
Aww, thanks everybody! I guess I'm just too harsh on myself... I wanted to make a story that was at least heartwarming, but was afraid that it'd come out... Well, cheesy...
114429 Meh, I guess I'm my own worst critic...
A... A wording error?! OH GOD I'M RUINED! I HAVE SHAMED MY FAMILY AND MUST KILL MYSELF.
Using "hoofed" instead of "handed" has been an issue of slight confusion to me, though. I mean, I know that a pony would definitely use "hoofed", but I think I'm more used to saying "handed" when in the third person. I'll change that, though. Thanks!
Heartwarming and good, dont beat yourself up so much I look forward to seeing more of your work.