Every celebrity has one or two things that ponies will look at and say 'I bet she learned her lesson.' Like partying so hard you cost a hotel a couple thousand bits (*cough, cough, Soarin), or perhaps losing your cool and cursing in front of a group of fillies (cough, rasp, Fleetfoot).
But this mare... she actually means a lot to me.
And I am NOT looking anyponies approval.
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Huh. Never seen this pairing before.
I have never seen this ship before. Will read.
After reading: Seems pretty good. Will follow.
1540860 Yeah I've never seen Spitfire shipped with anyone other than Soarin or Rainbow Dash, I guess Pinkie Pie could work.
This is well written and quite funny. Gonna throw a watch on you.
Before I even read this, there is a glaring error filled sentence in the description that won't leave me alone.
"And I am NOT looking for the you, the paparazzi, or anypony's
approval"
Please, please good sir/madam. Free me from the horrible prison of grave error, so that I may once again roam the free world of Storyland and bring green thumbs and stars to Spitfire x Pinkie Pie ships everywhere.
Consider rephrasing the entire sentence or fixing fragments. "I am not looking for your approval, or the paparazzi's, or anypony's for that matter." would be suffice to save me. Or you could remove "the you" altogether and say "And I am not looking for the paparazzi's, or anypony's approval."
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Finally! Someone actually gives me some criticism! I will fix it when i get home.
Thank you.
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Okay, so now that you've almost fixed the description, I shall now commence reading...
There aren't actually many errors that caught my eyes, and the writing itself is good enough. I don't have any time to go back and show you the errors, but it was really just a few two word sentences that should have been combined with others with commas or semicolons and one or two uncapitalized words.
spitfire x pinkie pie ehhhhhhhh
? i like it. keep it up
!
... We're waiting...
'THIS CHAPTER, I LIKE IT!'
'ANOTHER!'
In all seriousness really good fic, please do continue
The ship is awesome and can't wait for more
ummmm, at first thought i think crocodile, but when i think back i want to say alligator so... crockagator?dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png
EDIT: he is and alligator, google said so
Short sweet good job.
Aye.
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I was about to say alligator, before i read first post and saw that somebody had beaten me to it XD
somehow I remember pinkie calling him an alligator, or possibly twi during the pinkie sense episode
1825441 aaaaand i may have forgotten to comment even slightly on the fic
awesome chapter, nice to have a short one that gets to the point quickly for once XD
can't wait for more, good luck with the writer's block
Wow that was fast, if only shipping worked like that all the time.
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I realize now that this chapter was very fast paced. Anyone got imput?1825350>>1825445>>1825630
1826281 Now breed!
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Oh Sweet Celestia's Tits.....
I love that song and your version of it had be laughing for a good 5 minutes. Well done//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png
1826281 I'd say you're fine.
It is in both these characters nature to be fast, so some of that may apply to pacing.
Though I suggest you try and slow down in some parts to develop the lovey wuvy love between these two.
Such as that sweet flank that you just want to take a bite on, then let the cotton candy melt in your....
Then Spitfire realized with an abrupt shock that her thoughts had taken a turn for the erotic. She blushed as she looked at the sleeping Pinkie Pie, that loveable, wuvy mare whose charismatic charm makes you wanna...
You get the idea.