BlackSnowyOwl
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D'aww.
Considering that the episode hasn't even aired yet, I thought you did a fair job of describing things. You created a nice atmosphere.
The clop element felt more like an afterthought that was squeezed into the tail end of the story. I did enjoy the "insanely sensitive muscles" line, though. Insane needs to be used as an adjective more.
You did include her mental state in the clop scene, which is something that too many writers gloss over. Kudos for that! What the characters are thinking is much more interesting than what's physically happening to them.
Couldn't have said it any better myself ;3
Good job, Snowy. You still beat me in alternative tentacle fiction.
...more plant tentacles?
'd it! Not supposed to read clop (I've sworn myself off it), but...cheat day? 
Tentacle rape? Oh so this is hentai!
Beautiful. Your articulation and expansive vocabulary is stunning. (No, I don't have one. Just a few big words is all.) Please forgive me for writing this but >rape
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it. Interesting tentacle usage. Not something I expected. Very few can create such a wonderful tale with tentacles as the "male" party. Please continue to write such vivid and lavish works of non-prose fiction. I have a feeling you could be a very accomplished writer with actual published books. Keep entertaining us and thank you for this wonderful masterpiece.
Silly and not as well thought out as your others.
I have no problem with plain porn, but if you are marketing is as character based, about the mare experiencing a salvation of sorts you really need to go way deeper into characterization than this.
Even without the clop and sexy action, I would love to go visit that cave.
I'm not sure if you thought about it much, but the way you were detailing the glowing plants in the dark cave
made me picture a very beautiful scene.
Like... I pictured blue and green glowing vines snaked without pattern along the cave walls.
Glowing green grass speckled across the cave floor.
And I pictured the petals being like multicolored glowing cherry blossoms, flowing around the cave
smoothly and ethereally.
Yeah, very beautiful mental images.
Lol pony sex
If not for plant Sex
one would go there for a good lightshow 