What's this? an FOE fic not describing the adventures of a lesbian unicorn mare in the wasteland? A fic that's from the perspective of a Steel Ranger and will be focusing on the exploits of Old world soldiers and the horrors they faced? Sir (or Madam), you win the 'Most Original Fallout Equestria story' award, I am very much looking forward to more of this. That being said, there are somewhat major grammar/word choice mistakes, nothing which truly breaks the story, but enough to break immersion, so I'd recommend doing some editing/corrections, this guide is good for general error correcting as well as for general story advice, also I could do some editing for you if you wish me to Also, you can ignore a couple random downvotes, those are from FO:E haters/trolls who downvote every FO:E story. Finally I'd recommend joining the FO:E Side Stories Compilation document and some of the FO:E groups here on FiMfiction if you haven't already just to get word out about your fic, to find people to pre-read and to bounce ideas off of, it's definitely good enough to belong in these places Welcome to the FO:E herd!
Well its a sir; and thank you. I enjoy the story of the old world in the many FoE story so I wanted to explore the concepts more. Though I need to get my butt back in gear and write again. The other goal of this story is to hopeful improve my spell and grammar so that is my goal. Write a story that tells the events of the war and get better at writing.
What's this? an FOE fic not describing the adventures of a lesbian unicorn mare in the wasteland? A fic that's from the perspective of a Steel Ranger and will be focusing on the exploits of Old world soldiers and the horrors they faced? Sir (or Madam), you win the 'Most Original Fallout Equestria story' award, I am very much looking forward to more of this.
That being said, there are somewhat major grammar/word choice mistakes, nothing which truly breaks the story, but enough to break immersion, so I'd recommend doing some editing/corrections, this guide is good for general error correcting as well as for general story advice, also I could do some editing for you if you wish me to
Also, you can ignore a couple random downvotes, those are from FO:E haters/trolls who downvote every FO:E story.
Finally I'd recommend joining the FO:E Side Stories Compilation document and some of the FO:E groups here on FiMfiction if you haven't already just to get word out about your fic, to find people to pre-read and to bounce ideas off of, it's definitely good enough to belong in these places
Welcome to the FO:E herd!
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Well its a sir; and thank you. I enjoy the story of the old world in the many FoE story so I wanted to explore the concepts more. Though I need to get my butt back in gear and write again. The other goal of this story is to hopeful improve my spell and grammar so that is my goal. Write a story that tells the events of the war and get better at writing.
2273667 well, if you need any help with spelling and grammar, I can at least try to help
Cool story, I like what I've read so far. A few grammatical errors here and there but an interesting read.
I think Bluemoon could have been a bit harsher, he seemed cute and cuddly compared to most D.I.s.