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VashTheStampede


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Octavia and her orchestra have been hired to play for events on the maiden voyage of Royal Equestrian's newest flagship, the ESS Harmonious. Unfortunately, due to some administrative errors, she's rooming with another mare hired for entertainment purposes - one Miss Vinyl Scratch. However, after some initial misunderstandings, the pair seem to be starting off a good friendship.

That changes in a moment when Vinyl wakes up in the middle of the night, the world sideways and water covering the floor.

Author's Notes: Rated Teen for language and sexual themes (NO CLOP). Rating subject to change at a later date. This is my first attempt at a "shipping" fic, so please, constructive criticism is appreciated.

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 67 )

Not saying it's a bad thing, I haven't read it yet.

But hasn't this fic (Same concept, same cover art) been done 5 times within the last 4 days?

1484277 I noticed that too. But... Arent there a million fics of twilight becoming an alicorn?

I will definitely be reading this later. I just happened to come across it. I love me some Vinyl and Octavia, man!

This is the best idea ever. I wish I would have thought of it myself.

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Yes, the idea has been done a few times in the past week or so. I'd like to think I'm doing it a bit differently.

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I can hardly say I'm the source of this idea, my inspiration came from the cover pic and the other fics from it.

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I'm workin' on it, yeesh :P I can't knock out another 4k-5k words in a few hours, lol.

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I have no problem with the same Idea being used in different ways, it's nice to see everyone has their own take on a story.
I just thought it was weird seeing this image on the front page so many times.

1485777 take da time you need, also, it wouldnt hurt if u indented paragraphs.

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... Yeah I probably should do that. I have no idea why I don't. I'll fix that, and do it in later chapters.

EDIT: Indented paragraphs, fixed up a couple other minor formatting errors.

Just a few suggestions. Maybe have a break in the paragraphs every time you switch Times or scenes, like this:


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Also, maybe try to go at a little bit slower pace. The fast pace is fine with me, but some readers may find it a bad thing. Anyway, my nitpicking aside, I am liking this so far. Can't wait to read the next chapter, man!:twilightsmile:

Woohoo, update!

As an avid fan of rich descriptions, I gotta say this story is looking great! It's also pretty nice to see a, say, 'serious' take on the theme (I've seen some other like these around, but I think most were comedy? Can't rightfully remember.).

Regardless, I can't wait to see more!

“It’s ok, Tavi… I won’t let you go. I won’t ever let you go.”

D'AWW

So far this is up the list near the top for Vinyl/Tavi stories that I've read (and I've read ALOT). The depth you put into it; the emotion, the dialogue, their actions. It flows so well and I love it. I hope this one makes it to 100K words or more! :)

Much improved over the first chapter. Your writing ability seems to get better over time... Chapter3 is going to be incredible.

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Thank you. My biggest fear when I was writing this was that I wouldn't be able to get emotion properly. All the fiction I've tried before has either been action or extremely shallow emotion-wise (case in point: the protagonist's relationship with Luna in "A Long Journey Home"). I'm not sure if this will hit the 100k mark, though... that's... that's a LOT of writing. That would be five times the length of my first fic, which at the time was (and currently, still is) the longest thing I'd ever written by nearly 400%.

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Thanks. I dunno, chapter 3 might be kinda short... we'll see.

That last line made me think of this:

This is turning into a really good story. Keep it up!:twilightsmile:

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Well, I've seen it happen a hundred times already if not more, a writer will start off with 5 or 6 amazing chapters at around 4-8K words each and then basically run out of steam. I think if you'd break them down into sections of around 1500 words each and post frequently not only will you get more followers but you'll find yourself able to write more creatively and be able to keep the readers bloodlust for updates sated.

100K sounds like alot but maybe it's a goal to strive for? Just a thought.:twilightsmile:

Oh, out of curiosity, what do y'all think about the title? I originally put it in as a placeholder since I couldn't think of a better one, but I think I've come to kind of like it.

Well, it does say it has shipping:rainbowlaugh:
Srsly great story

wow, i did not expect this when i saw this story. truly great writing

The title is great! Don't change it!

1st:rainbowlaugh: srsly, trolling aside, great story, not too:rainbowwild: but stil enough:heart: too not make it :facehoof: soo, its cool

Cliffhanger!!!! :fluttershbad:

Amazing story.

Yes!!!!




Poor Octavia!:fluttercry:

“They say Luna can see everything that happens under it. And I don’t want her seeing this,” Octavia added with a wink, before disappearing into the cave for the night. That wonderful night, which didn’t end until just before dawn for the two mares.

Dayum.

Bow Chicka wow wow!

Amazing chapter added to an awesome story.

:pinkiecrazy: Art class is the most practical way to save lives, or so I tell my teachers :pinkiecrazy:

AWWWWW YEAH!:rainbowwild:



I love how you brought Vinyl to the "I seem like a total train wreck but still have knowledge buried somewhere" out of her in this time of need.

I literally wanted to cry when I realized Octavia was really hurt. Thank Celestia that Vinyl was able to fix her!

Why you cliffhang? I kid, of course. Much improved over the first chapter, I have to say. Keep up the good work, my man!:twilightsmile:

:) It was bound to happen eventually...

Once again, you don't disapoint with great writing. Good job

Two hours of convincing – and another wash – later, Vinyl and Octavia were both trotting happily through the forest, searching for something to eat (besides each other) for lunch.

I died laughing.

Haha, yeah I was still laughing about that little line as well. Right up until the end where I bawled like a little kid!

This is the most amazing fanfic i have ever seen! It is soo good! It made me smile and giggle, it is just perfect! Keep up the good work!

Comment posted by Coconeru deleted May 13th, 2013

Just gonna leave this here.

That... doesn't sound like they will be in a much better situation soon :pinkiecrazy:
Please be happy & friendly pirates :fluttershysad:

Vinyl Scratch did the only logical thing – she blasted it in the face with magic and ran like hell.

Every line is amazing. But this one specifically.

Update! YES!!! Finally a first on a chapter!


Edit: I can't believe... I just.... Wow...


Please for the love of Celestia tell me that nothing happened to Vinyl. I know it never happened to Octavia so I'm sure she's gonna be a bit traumatized by the ordeal but physically she's okay. You were vague on Vinyl's situation so I'm concerned something may have happened to her.


Go back to the island and hope for the best!

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I will confirm that nothing happened to Vinyl. Octavia and Spyglass showed up moments before anything could happen, so Swashbuckle moved before he started (and was subsequently dealt with). I was originally going to have this chapter end with BOTH Vinyl and Octavia being raped, however... well, I didn't, and I regret that I written that in the first place.

1650377 It's okay, it does add some suspense to the story even though they've already been through a lot. Really it brings them closer together and hopefully will set the stage for when they get home... IF they get home...

Love the suspense
Great story keep it up
and lol quickfix is the commentor :P
HEY BUDDY :D

great chapter as usual, but i think meeting the crew to the end conflict was a little too rushed.

Spyglass…*salute*…I would have done the same thing

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