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LunarShadow


Hope you enjoy some writing.

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Trixie went back to Ponyville for revenge. Her visit was accompanied by a strange event with a mysterious pony. Two months later another mysterious pony drops Trixie a note, telling her to go back to Ponyville once again. This time as a Master Storyteller, but things don't go exactly as planned.

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Here, have the FiMfiction version of this story. No difference from the EqD (as of this comment, not up yet, but on its way.) version except for the EqD one is in gdocs.

Enjoy!:yay:

I LOVE IT! GREAT JOB!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

I see you continued this one, for now everything is in order, im expecting to see the chess game luna is trying to play here...

Also im wondering, why the dark tag?, is it going to get more dangerous or continue to be a bit mild. :raritywink:

Anyway, im eager to read more :scootangel:

Okay, interesting. I've always cottoned to the idea of Luna teaching Trixie, but this is an original spin on it for sure. Trixie and Fluttershy? I like that. :heart:

'To either side of the path was a sparse layer of bushes, no more then a few scraggly, sun-deprived bushes. Beyond the bushes was an eerie darkness that unnerved Trixie.' This part is a bit repetitive in a way that makes it not flow well and would flow better as follows:

'To either side of the path was a sparse layer of bushes, all scraggly and sun-deprived. Beyond them was an eerie darkness that unnerved Trixie.'

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It's probably going to continue to be a bit mild, but I figured it'd be better safe then sorry. :scootangel:

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Thanks! Always learning eh? I'll make sure to remember that for future chapters. :twilightoops:

Ah, and now they meet. :) Although I should point out Pinkie also didn't have any real interaction with Trixie, but Flutters is the better choice out of the two. :twilightblush:

Great post beyond that, though.

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Damn it. :facehoof: I'll be more critical next time I promise! :trixieshiftright:

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