I hope all of them, even RD/Rarity, will not abort their foals. I dunno i would like to see all of them a mothers if possible. Especially if their foals father is Twilight.
1481023 These were written a long time ago. I was looking through my folders and found them again, so I fixed up 90% of the spelling and grammar, and changed quite a few of the scenes (entirely removing the chapter where the CMC got involved... That might be a future spin off with Spike as the lucky guy) and started posting.
This chapter was full of 's and 's. I can't even begin to see how much I loved this chapter. Now Twilight is getting BOTH princesses. Please let Spike be in another part of the palace.
This... gets a little preachy. Comes across as kinda anti-gay and a little bit anti-abortion. I don't have a problem with your beliefs (whatever they may be,) but it's kind of a turn-off when it shows up in your writing. (Not that I'm not guilty of the same thing, just saying.)
1544557 actually it aint preachy atleast not for the gay part back in the day of kings and queens such things as same sex marrieges or even being together to be thought of a discusting and well unlike cel luna was gone 1000 years and as such still thinks the people thought back in her day so read between the lines and as for the other thing i got nothing on that never checked about such things when i read up on history but anywho hi
Agreed, pretty preachy vibes, but still overall enjoyable. Besides, I've read fics that stood on soapboxes much more than this one has, so it's not like it's anything new .
As I write this, I know this story is already finished, but all the same, keep on authoring Sir Author .
I loved it all and I hope that the Princess get pregnant too that would be so awesome beyond awesome and I can't wait to see what happens next to them all
Comment posted by JetstreamGW deleted Dec 9th, 2013
Then our sister has shown thee the secret of the potion?” Again Twilight nodded. “But we were most certain thou art a mare. Pray tell, how was it though became a stallion?” Twilight chuckled nervously. “I kinda used the feather of a stallion Pegasai.” Luna looked to be at a loss. “Do tell. The feather, the very final step, used to mix the powder into the brew, was a stallion's feather?” Twilight nodded. “Goodness. We had never thought of such a possibility before.” Luna turned to her sister. “Sister. I demand we find other Unicorns whom we can convert to Alicorn stallions.” Celestia nearly choked on her tea, but quickly recovered. “Luna, sister. We cannot do that. It requires the rarest and most powerful of Unicorn MARES to become Alicorn. The potion has only ever worked on mares before. Any stallion who used it became... Monsters. Like Discord.” “Though art still angry thy coltfriend became the Spirit of Chaos?”
Somehow, something in this passage has pissed me off when it shouldn't have. I enjoy the story. I really do. But this feels all sorts of wrong. It's like the fates that be have decided that just because of something that cannot be done, certain ponies are damned to failure.
Said potion says that it will only take a UNICORN MARE to make the potion work. 100% unicorn mare. It's already strike one because some ponies are not unicorns, not apparently the gender of a pony makes a definite strike two.....It's racism in a strange way. Stallions can't make it work. Why? Because a penis make them dumber? More suspectible to brute strength and labor, but because of it, they are inferior in a more delicate work?
Sorry.....I shouldn't be so emotional about it, but it just ticks me off about it. If the only thing between two identical ponies (just a example) is that one has a penis and the other has a vagina, then everything else should be equal, but it's not.
It's not my problem that I was born with a dick, Celestia!!!!
Edit: that kinda is the same as the why Spike was born a dragon and has to suffer watching his crush go steady steady with some stallion or somemare else, but that's a whole entirely different can of worms, in my opinion. Part of me wants to have a actual sequel, or an epilogue that completely closes this story where Prince Twilight helps Spike with a harem of his own. Obviously, he can't have Rarity or any of the other mare (those are the Prince's official harem; i.e. DO NOT TOUCH ). So I just would like for Spike to have a bit of a happy ending (even the CMCs ****shudders*****---I swear, it's kinda seems that it's fate that he's gonna hook up with on of them to his despair [the "go for the sister" trope])
“Goodness, whatever art thou talking about? Royalty can simply marry whomever they wish, and in some cases, such as Prince Blueblood, have multiple mates. Though we do not agree with him having three husbands... and another five stallion in his harem. As well as an entirely male staff.”
Twilight ignored that fact. Honesty, the only pony she might think would find that funny would be Rarity. “Yes, Celestia told me that... Um, so it can even be a same gender marriage?”
“By today's laws, same gender marriages are just as binding as traditional ones.” Luna frowned. “We do not like it, but it is so. The ponies of Equestria had fought long and hard to earn that right, and it even applies to royalty.”
“So, if I became a mare, I could still ask for my friend's hooves in marriage?” Twilight felt odd about that idea. To her, marriage was about a husband and wife. Not wife and wife... like Lyra and Bon Bon, or husband and husband like... well, she didn't know any ponies like that.
That part in this chapter was looking dangerously close to being anti-gay/gay marriage. It honestly made reading this a little uncomfortable. I won't tell you what you can and can not believe (to each there own even if I don't agree), but be careful about what you put in your fic. Something like that (even if it's not what you were implying) could really upset someone.
The parts about him not wanting to leave his children fatherless and the same sex marriage stuff is rather questionable. Not sure why what's in Twilight's metaphorical pants has to do with him raising children. The marriage bit almost comes across as homophobic even though I really doubt that was your intention.
But I realize this is over a decade old and I was barely a teenager when this story came out so I'm basically shouting into the void. Ignoring this complains this is a really fun story.
Shit, son, did you just write a whole bunch of these to release over time, or are you doing nothing but writing?
Commencing read...
At least they gonna use protection. Or will they~
I hope all of them, even RD/Rarity, will not abort their foals. I dunno i would like to see all of them a mothers if possible. Especially if their foals father is Twilight.
You're a machine! Keep being awesome!
XD machine gunning ftw
How do you write so quick?
Its like if My Little Pony was mixed with a pervy hentai manga.
I...I....I love it...
I really hope they all do keep the foals. Surprisingly, I'm actually kind of rooting for Twilight to stay male, now...
1481023 These were written a long time ago. I was looking through my folders and found them again, so I fixed up 90% of the spelling and grammar, and changed quite a few of the scenes (entirely removing the chapter where the CMC got involved... That might be a future spin off with Spike as the lucky guy) and started posting.
1481113 That makes much more sense. Less impressive, but still. Its very enjoyable.
Hohoho, I feel spoiled today!
You spoil us by editing so quickly.
Very nice story indeed. I approve.
1481327 It's the weekend. I don't have anywhere to go at the moment, so I'm having fun being lazy.
celestia and discord, it can make a great story to work.
So they took his unconscious body back into the room...
Well, he DID give them his consent, I suppose.
The end...
Just kidding. Five years later, Twilight has finally escaped those damn... 'NO TWILIGHT!'
Nevermind the escape. The guards locked her/him up for trespassing.
(Too tired to write anything even semi-decent)
Good god, and I fell for it, too! MAGNIFICENT. BASTARD.
This chapter was full of 's and 's. I can't even begin to see how much I loved this chapter. Now Twilight is getting BOTH princesses. Please let Spike be in another part of the palace.
This... gets a little preachy. Comes across as kinda anti-gay and a little bit anti-abortion. I don't have a problem with your beliefs (whatever they may be,) but it's kind of a turn-off when it shows up in your writing. (Not that I'm not guilty of the same thing, just saying.)
1544557 actually it aint preachy atleast not for the gay part back in the day of kings and queens such things as same sex marrieges or even being together to be thought of a discusting and well unlike cel luna was gone 1000 years and as such still thinks the people thought back in her day so read between the lines and as for the other thing i got nothing on that never checked about such things when i read up on history but anywho hi
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Agreed, pretty preachy vibes, but still overall enjoyable. Besides, I've read fics that stood on soapboxes much more than this one has, so it's not like it's anything new .
As I write this, I know this story is already finished, but all the same, keep on authoring Sir Author .
I was rereading this, and the following launched itself into my mind when reading the flying lesson scene:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f1oMhMwUbgc
I loved it all and I hope that the Princess get pregnant too that would be so awesome beyond awesome and I can't wait to see what happens next to them all
Ooof, got some preachy preachness in my clop!
Can't say its out of character for Twilight and Celestia though. Those two more than likely wouldn't care for abortions.
And I saw this coming. This will be fun, figured Celestia is slightly trollish. Who wants to bet Spike is gonna walk in on them? Again?
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tralllalllaa.........
Somehow, something in this passage has pissed me off when it shouldn't have. I enjoy the story. I really do. But this feels all sorts of wrong. It's like the fates that be have decided that just because of something that cannot be done, certain ponies are damned to failure.
Said potion says that it will only take a UNICORN MARE to make the potion work. 100% unicorn mare. It's already strike one because some ponies are not unicorns, not apparently the gender of a pony makes a definite strike two.....It's racism in a strange way. Stallions can't make it work. Why? Because a penis make them dumber? More suspectible to brute strength and labor, but because of it, they are inferior in a more delicate work?
Sorry.....I shouldn't be so emotional about it, but it just ticks me off about it. If the only thing between two identical ponies (just a example) is that one has a penis and the other has a vagina, then everything else should be equal, but it's not.
It's not my problem that I was born with a dick, Celestia!!!!
Edit: that kinda is the same as the why Spike was born a dragon and has to suffer watching his crush go steady steady with some stallion or somemare else, but that's a whole entirely different can of worms, in my opinion. Part of me wants to have a actual sequel, or an epilogue that completely closes this story where Prince Twilight helps Spike with a harem of his own. Obviously, he can't have Rarity or any of the other mare (those are the Prince's official harem; i.e. DO NOT TOUCH ). So I just would like for Spike to have a bit of a happy ending (even the CMCs ****shudders*****---I swear, it's kinda seems that it's fate that he's gonna hook up with on of them to his despair [the "go for the sister" trope])
DAMN you are good at writing clopfics...
Also:
DAMN Prince Blueblood is gay...
That part in this chapter was looking dangerously close to being anti-gay/gay marriage. It honestly made reading this a little uncomfortable. I won't tell you what you can and can not believe (to each there own even if I don't agree), but be careful about what you put in your fic. Something like that (even if it's not what you were implying) could really upset someone.
4792623 Guess that's why he's named 'Prince Blueblood'.
Ohhhh So That's Why Bitchblood Wasn't Intrested In Rarity At The Gala
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Sixty bits says you're right
The parts about him not wanting to leave his children fatherless and the same sex marriage stuff is rather questionable. Not sure why what's in Twilight's metaphorical pants has to do with him raising children. The marriage bit almost comes across as homophobic even though I really doubt that was your intention.
But I realize this is over a decade old and I was barely a teenager when this story came out so I'm basically shouting into the void. Ignoring this complains this is a really fun story.