Luna invites Twilight on an outing. She has something she wants to show her. Something no one has seen in a long time.
Written for the No Dialogue Contest! Read the other entries here!
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Good, unfiltered RB_
I like this. It’s clean, and it’s simple in a way that over complicated stories lose sight of. There was one message, one communication to be made here, and it was made perfectly:
Luna’s time on the moon was pure torture.
From Twilight being surprised at the lack of sound, how her wings no longer worked properly, and the unrelenting cold solitude...
This was good.
What’s even better is all the little context clues peppered throughout. This happening a century after Twilight’s ascension, meaning that all her friends from her time in mortality have all but certainly passed, means that she’s probably starting to feel a bit disconnected from others. Luna’s own avoidance of her for some time, leading her to realize how much she’d missed the fellow unaging one’s company.
Luna, I think, was teaching Twilight a lesson about the kind of consequences that immortal mortals can hand down without thinking about them. She’s likely to be a little less willing to go for stoning or extra-equestrial banishments now, at least for a while, with such a stark reminder of what these kind of judgements wreck upon their victims.
This was good. Like all great cakes and onions, it comes in layers.
What exactly is the chapter title suppose to mean?
Dangit. That's quite moving and hits hard with the perspective of time. This is really good stuff.
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gravitational draw of the moon
hue hue RB is a nerd
Glad to see you, RB! I missed you for a second there.
There is no Easter Bunny, there is no Tooth Fairy, and There Is No Air on the Moon
I really like how it's (correctly) implied that the Moon's lower gravity would allow the construction of taller structures with fewer supports that would be impossible on Earth. The lack of atmosphere also means no wind or water to wear away at any such structures, so it's possible there might not even be a need for any mortar to hold the stone blocks together (assuming the Moon is not seismically active, which may or may not be possible for all we know). Pretty much the only natural force that could act against such a structure would be the occasional meteor strike, which could very easily shatter a stone block with no atmosphere to slow down those meteors.
As a space enthusiast, especially when it comes to scientific accuracy, I've got to add this to my favorites list.
And somehow Luna is still sane after a thousand years.
Luna being a painter in her retirement isn't surprising. As the Alicorn of the night she controls the stars right? That includes the constellations? Technically Luna was always an artist, now she is an artist on paper rather than the night sky.
Yeah well, Luna had an entire Millennium. Probably took a couple months or years of boredom to even have the idea to build something like that.
Well it is the moon. If it was built on Equus than yeah, it probably wouldn't be supported stably.
Building such a big structure is probably the only reason why Luna hasn't gone insane after a thousand years. Good story
This is such a good way to do a no dialog story, and such interesting character analysis!! Loved it!!
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Oh yeah, well, uh… you’re a bigger one!
So there!
How do I upvote something twice.
She built a beautiful structure of massive size and beauty to have a window to frame the most beautiful thing she could possibly see. Her Homeworld.
Beautiful...
Just barely too high for what ?
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Hey, thanks for pointing out that detail, as that structural feature is possible because of another interesting fact that I forgot to note in my previous comment. The Moon is tidally locked to the Earth (which is why we always see the same side of the Moon, regardless of its phases), so the Earth's position in the lunar sky would barely move anywhere. As a result, it's realistic to create a window in the structure through which (only from a certain position) you would always see the Earth at all times, changing only through monthly phases.
I think Luna was just thinking to the future, space tourism!
But seriously, stunning visuals back-dropped against complete silence paints a much different picture in the mind than when you just... take air for granted. Well done.
Incredibly beautiful and absolutely terrifying. The structure perfectly reflects the torturous loneliness and the gut-wrenching regret that Luna felt during her millenium-length banishment.
Silence is horrifically deafening.
All right ladies and gents, pack it up. We got a winner. No more. RB is sweeping and there are absolutely no brooms involved. Leave. Begone.
(Yes, this is another RB classic. As I expected. Nice spin on the classic theme of Luna's banishment.)
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The only thing I can think of(which I did) is create a bookshelf that’s dedicated to stories that I wish I could upvote a second time.
I also participated in the contest, but YOU deserve to win with this jewel. ❤️👍
As was already said, it's a simple work for yet a very deep, heart-breaking message: banning someone for a thousand years is a sentence worse than death, and it makes Luna appear as the strongest MLP character by a very large margin, just because she survived this hardship without going insane.
Her backstory has always moved and shaken me to my core, and this artwork is a great addition to her legacy!
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For a normal sized jump or climb, I'd guess.
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One would assume, yes. Doesn't mean that editing the sentence to be more clear would be superfluous. I suspected (and still do) it was a typo.
Damn that was good and sad. Just the thought of Luna being all alone of a thousand years
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And like the thing earlier about the lack of atmosphere, this is something that she was intellectually aware of but hadn't quite thought through to the logical conclusion until just then.
this is a good story, i like it.
For some reason the entire castle being empty reminded me of my Minecraft builds where I built large structures with world edit and made the outside look very pretty, but on the inside, was nothing. I feel as if its fitting for the fic as well.
That was a splendid read, darkly foreboding and great use of no dialogue!
I really enjoyed this story. I felt that the poem inscription wasn't even really necessary - the scale of Luna's creation and the excellent way you described it spoke for itself. Unlike most of the entries to this contest, I felt like this piece had a great flow to it. You weren't fighting the constraints of the contest. It all just fell into place right where it was supposed to be.