White Moon comes into ponyville looking for a place to stay, and when he goes missing in the night, he's found in the one place no one wants him. their minds.
great start. two tips though. stopping putting who's going to speak infront of the dialogue, it makes it feel a script. For the thoughts, pick a brighter color, I can barely read it.
4.5 stars, broski.
i am working on chapter 3 dont worry, i already have raritys introduction to White moon done, i just have to get rainbow dash and Applejack
i need to change the description
sorry bout the half of a chapter rarity's intro got lost on my now broke other computer
i like this story please finish
Will get more in after work.
HAHAH ME! Looks like we can't do that! NOW WHAT YOU GONNA DO!?