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Ossilia


Writer of the PortalSparkle AU and Somepony's Disillusion - also a Portal fan who just likes the colourful ponies :]

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Twilight Sparkle, still getting adjusted to life in Ponyville as of the Summer Sun Celebration, ends up bumping into another mare. Unknown feelings ensue for them both as they realise it's like looking into a mirror.


Welcome to the very first written story of mine set within the PortalSparkle AU!

The PortalSparkle AU is a very self-indulgent New Game+ for the series, focusing on introducing new characters and exploring new stories in Equestria & beyond that occur alongside the main series of events while still respecting the universe, characters & lore setup in the normal Friendship is Magic. Unless stated otherwise, you can expect things to play out much similarly to the normal show.

Egghead Collision Course is a one-shot story that focuses on the primary divergence point for the PortalSparkle AU, set on the first day depicted in the Season 1 Episode Griffon The Brush Off, this fanfiction features the day that Portal Bump and Twilight Sparkle cross paths for the first time.

If you dislike the coloured dialogue or find it difficult to read, there is a completely black & white version of the fanfiction available to read here.

Yes, it's an OC x Canon AU.

Cover is drawn by me.


SPECIAL THANKS TO:
SeleneUnderTheStars / LunarZoe - Creator of Syntax Error
IAmMuToo - Proofreader
Chromafang - Proofreader

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In many ways, the work of a critic is easy. We risk very little, yet enjoy a position over those, who offer up their work and their selves to judgement. We thrive on negative criticism, which is fun to write and to read. But the bitter truth we critics must face, is that in the grand scheme of things, the average piece of junk is probably more meaningful than our criticism designating it so.

But there are times when a critic truly risks something, and that is in the discovery and defense of the self-insert. The world is often unkind to 'cringe', new creations. The weird need friends. Today, I experiencesd something new: and extraordinary fic from a singularly unexpected source. To say both the fic and its OC have challenged my preconceptions about fine writing is a gross understatement. They have rocked me to my core.

In the past, I have made no secret for my disdain for Princess Twilight's famous motto, "Friendship Is Magic". But I realise, only now do I truly understand what she meant. Not everyone is born a great friend - But a great friend can come from anywhere. It is difficult to imagine more humble the origins than those of the pony now writing in ponyville who is, in this critic's opinion, nothing less than the finest writer in Equestria. I will be returning to Bumpy's soon, hungry for more.

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we are now 500 bits richer. of course.

Spike places his hands to the sides of his body, tapping his foot claws against the ground in sequence and raising an eyebrow. “I think you still haven’t fully understood Celestia’s intent about sending you to Ponyville, have you now?"

She's been a shut in for most of her life. It's a miracle she even made 5 friends on the first day of coming to Ponyville, for anyone else if would take an average of a couple days to a few weeks.

Rainbow Dash visibly looks excited about something as she starts to trot through town, having heard some great news - her old friend Gilda is going to come by tomorrow and visit! She can hardly contain herself, remembering those old times back at Junior Speedster flight camp with Gilda, thinking about the flying session she’ll be doing tomorrow morning with her…

Oh... That.

Pleaaaaaase? I promise promise proooomise I’ll let you go if you listen out for my favour! It’ll be totally fun!

Does one of Pinkie's pranks involve Twilight, the romance tag, and the OC? Because I can already imagine what is going to happen.

Huh! That was coooool! I have to tell somepony about how AWESOME that looked!” The party pony giggles, as she starts to skip through town with a smile. “Wonder if I can find another pegasus willing to help me out?

Hmmmm...

Rainbow Dash laughs as she watches Portal Bump begin to scream, the gray & white mare barrelling down towards Ponyville. “Nailed it!” The rainbow pegasus exclaims. “ Looks like I can check using my cloud-busting skills for a prank off my list!

... First off, I was right about a prank happening, just not right about who did the prank. Second, WHAT THE HECK? Is Rainbow Dash not worried about potentially killing someone?

You’re on the ground now.” Twilight bluntly states as she trots over to the pegasus mare, who shakily rolls over. Portal raises her hooves up to her eyes and rubs them, slowly finding the courage to open them again.

And somehow still alive.

A student of the Princess. That’s… not something Portal would have ever expected from such a quaint little town like Ponyville.

In Ponyville, always expect the unexpected.

I know about Twilight Sparkle.

Mmmm, well that ruins the fun somewhat. But it isn't surprising if you have been paying attention to the going ins of Equestria. Being a student of a princess is a pretty big deal.

Everypony here in Ponyville knows about Twilight Sparkle! Y’know, considering she stopped Nightmare Moon from blanketing Equestria in darkness some time ago?

.... That wasn't the reason I was expecting on how they know Twilight. Especially because in almost every story I come across all the ponies in Ponyville seems to not know or ignore the fact that Twilight along with her friends helped saved half the world from eternal night and stopped and reformed Nightmare Moon.

…Why can’t she stop thinking about Twilight?

Romance.

Gee Twilight, you’ve sure been warming up to the ponies in this town, friendships are literally dropping out of the sky for you!” Spike cackles.

... Literally.

You two are dating now.

Ehhhhh, I don't see this as dating.


Good story, I do hope there will be more.

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> Ehhhhh, I don't see this as dating.
She doesn't either! Syntie is just a bitch <3

The actual start of the relationship is going to take a very, very long time to occur - especially considering how little experience Portal and Twilight have in that field.

Portal Bump is a rather interesting character. I am very intrigued in how this relates to Aperture.

“ How do you organise the books!? Do you have anypony helping you? What’s the oldest book you have in there? Do you have fictional stories in there? Tales of Aperatu— “

Is Aperture a piece of fiction in this universe, or a forgotten piece of history?

Regardless, this is quite the story you have here. I will most certainly be waiting to see whatever you decide to do next.

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Tales of Aperature is indeed a piece of fiction within the universe, I do actually have the whole details worked out, but it's a more fantastical/magical take on Portal that takes aspects from the MLP Universe to make it feel more at home and to make it work as a series of books. As fun as it would be to make it secretly real in the same vein as Daring Do, it just wasn't possible to do so without breaking MLP lore.

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Cute story about cute mares

I love this story! Can’t wait to see more of this AU in future stories! This is going in my favourites and you just earned a follower!

"did someone say CANON X O-- Oh wait this looks good"
Heh In seriousness this looks good

Thank you to everypony who's enjoyed the story! There will be more one-shot stories set in the PortalSparkle AU like this one, not every single one will be focused on the PB x Twi relationship as there's a lot more going on beyond the OC x Canon premise... but I can pretty confidentally say the immediate next fic will continue to be about the ship as I plan to write these chronologically. :twilightblush:

I am going to make everypony suffer through a slow burn that hurts so hard you will be begging for these two to just kiss already. :3

This was adorable!! The silly interactions, the way you formatted dialogue via coloring the text for each character, The cut-off mention of Aperature Science because, well, Portal, and just, everything about this was so fun! Definitely one of my new favorite AUs I've seen as of late. Keep up the good work, and have a fantastic rest of your day/night!

See you next Login!

Now how does a Pegasus get a name like Portal Bump anyway...

Oh, dear sweet Celestia...
I love this already.
I warn you now, I will absolutely be putting far too much thought into this story and analyzing its contents.
Even if my deductions will be practically nonexistent.
Also, small mostly-unrelated question; do you by any chance enjoy Doctor Who?

Fun story, I'm gonna enjoy reading your stuff! Happy Writing!!

“ Get some good sleep, gay gay homosexual gay . ”

Fuckin' gottem. Holy shit, ain't no coming back from that.

I didn't get super far into the story. Text itself isn't bad and I wanted to give it more of a try. But the dialogue being coloured is immensely distracting to my reading to the point where it's hard to focus and properly take it in.

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I’ve recieved a few rare complaints about this, but enough that I’ve decided to look into how I could provide a version of the fic with no coloured text - and continuing this into my future fics.

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Hey! Just letting you know there's a black & white PDF available in the description now :)

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Thank you! I appreciate the added accessibility.

Read this so I could read the sequel and the end has me dying

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Wish even half the fandom saw it this way! This is exactly what I feel everyone missed about Twilight's upbringing and eventual alicornhood! The trials and tribulations, the dive into the nitty-gritty, figuring the ins and outs! :ajsleepy:

Nearly the entire fandom just brushes past that and yells "Mary Sue!!!" :facehoof:

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Late reply but one must always respect a good reference, especially when it goes beyond a simple parody and genuinely leaves a heartwarming response.

while I was reading this I was listning to I'm a girl like you form barbie as the princess and the pauper

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