Moving On

DarkSnowGaming #1 · January 29th · 2 · ·

It didn’t take long for everyone to notice that Twilight wasn’t performing her royal duties. Her cabinet she had formed helped her keep everything under wraps as long as they could, but word still got out that the Princess was in the hospital. Panic began to spread but was quickly stomped out, news being spread that she just needed a break from her duties due to stress. There were daily reports that she was making great progress and would return to her duties soon. As it was, Twilight felt like she was barely hanging on, worried about who she was going to lose next, and unable to convince any of her friends that visited to even think about her offer. It was killing her slowly. When she was told that Celestia had arrived to see her, she could barely hold it together long enough to tell the guard to send her away. She couldn’t face her old mentor right now.

Here's the thing, while I love immortality and wouldn't hesitate on the chance to become immortal, I wouldn't force the people I care about to become immortal if they don't want to. Dying is a part of life, it's going to happen. But it can get better.

There was a knock at the door. Her guard, Steel Braun. Informing her that…Fluttershy was gone. The mare had passed away in her sleep, with Discord and her animal friends surrounding her. Twilight sat down hard, unable to process the information being given to her. She heard Steel Braun say something, but it didn’t reach her. The door shutting caused her to flinch, and she stood up. Eyes glazed over, she gazed around her room, taking in the pictures of her friends, whom she was losing one by one. A weight settled on her shoulders, heavy and unmoving as she slowly began to unravel. She turned to her balcony, opening the doors and stepping out into the cool evening. The amulet around her neck began to glow and her magic gently reached out, grasping ahold of the celestial bodies in the sky. She slowly lowered the sun, tears falling freely from her eyes as she brought the moon out. She painted the stars in the sky, allowing her pain to flow as she filled the night sky, expressing herself as best as she could. Before she knew it, there were two new constellations in the sky. Two of the Elements of Harmony, shining brightly as they watched over Equestria, her kingdom. Twilight traced the sight of butterflies and three balloons, feeling her heart break as she broke down into sobs that wracked her body. It was a quiet night in Equestria.

Honestly, that's the best way to go.

Twilight jolted awake in the dark, the moonlight streaming in through her window leaving the corners of her room exceptionally shadowed. It couldn’t hide the state of her room though, books strewn across the floor and papers scattered in the moonlight. Candles burned down to the wick strewn around the room, adding to the mess that had been growing in the weeks since the news of Fluttershy's passing. She was unsure of why she was awake, laying in her bed, ears straining to make out whatever it was that her body had deemed important enough to break through the veil of rest. A shuffle, quiet enough that she would have brushed it off if not for the slight creak of a door that followed it. Slowly turning her head, eyes scanning the darkened room, she caught the sight of a low orange glow surrounding a horn. It illuminated a cloaked figure, Twilight unable to make out any details other than it being a pony. The same orange glow surrounded a book and lifted it to the pony, allowing them to briefly scan the title before the figure shook their head, returning the book to the pile before picking another one up. Twilight watched them go through four or five books before she slowly moved, getting out of bed with a grace that defied her stature. She collected herself to her full height and spread her wings, making herself look as imposing as she could before she stepped behind the pony.

Hmm, orange glow? I have a few ideas who this could be unless it's an OC.

The figure froze, their magic cutting out and dropping the book that was in their grasp, landing with a thud on the ground and causing Twilight to wince before she resumed her stern glare. The pony slowly turned around, the hood falling back to reveal a stallion with wide eyes, the moonlight reflecting in them as he took in the sight of the princess. His mouth wordlessly opened and closed, attempting and failing to give Twilight any explanations. Her horn flickered, causing her to wince as a small flash of pain spiked into her head, and the candles in the room lit, giving Twilight a clear view of the stallion currently in her room. Before her stood a deep orange stallion, his olive eyes fluttering as he attempted to adjust to the light suddenly filling the room. His mane and tail were a deep blue, with a streak of neon blue running through both. He was clearly cowering, obviously terrified of the princess standing before him.

Ah, OC.

Good story so far. I am interested in reading more.

Sylpheed Dashstep

Sylpheed Dashstep #2 · January 29th · 2 · ·

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Here's the thing, while I love immortality and wouldn't hesitate on the chance to become immortal, I wouldn't force the people I care about to become immortal if they don't want to. Dying is a part of life, it's going to happen. But it can get better.

In my head I wrote Twilight like this because I can imagine her not handling the fact that she would live far longer than all of her friends very well. I can see both sides of wanting/not wanting to be immortal, but I felt that this was the attitude she would take, worried about what would happen to her once her closest friends were gone. And that's a point of character growth, the realization that just because you lose someone you treasure, that doesn't mean your world has to end. I plan on following this up as I continue, but just my quick take.

Ah, OC.

I'm a sucker for writing oc's lol, can't help it sadly. Here's hoping I don't fuck it all up!

Theone23

Theone23 #3 · January 30th · 1 · ·

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Just tread lightly when involving one or more of your OCs. There’s a reason why readers of this site have become somewhat turned off by them in current times compared to, say, the 2014 era.

Sylpheed Dashstep

Sylpheed Dashstep #4 · January 30th · 1 · ·

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Eh, people can hate my oc’s all they want. I’m writing for myself and the enjoyment of putting my thoughts out there, not because I’m here to please internet folk. If people read it and like it, great! If not, no skin off of my back.

Theone23

Theone23 #5 · January 30th · · ·

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A very fair point!

I just hate that some peeps automatically downvote stories purely because; "Oh, an OC - hate it." While, yes, I do understand WHY, considering most OC owners go on power trips and the like, there have been many good ones, too.

Sylpheed Dashstep

Sylpheed Dashstep #6 · January 30th · 1 · ·

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I can’t be upset at people’s taste, I can only hope I write well enough to change their minds. Here’s hoping I live up to the expectations I set for myself!

Crossover Queen