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Great googly moogly

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This story is a sequel to INSANITY


4,356 Years. I counted all of them. Every single year that passed in that garden. I watched them pass by. They looked at me with… pity. Ugh. I did look pathetic, but that was the opposite of what I felt. I felt ready. I knew my time was almost up when the cracks began to form. Looks like your magics weakening, Celestia =)

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I think Twilight will kill herself.

I can see that happening.

Why is there a "=)" in the synopsis?

“I did what was necessary,” Celestia said, her voice steady but devoid of warmth. “Regret won’t bring back the lives she took. Regret won’t undo the damage she caused. And regret won’t keep Equestria safe.”

:facehoof:

“U-uhm… Celestia died a couple weeks ago.”

... Oh. Uhhh... Y'know, honestly probably for the best.

“She was never the true ruler,” he had said, his voice dripping with malice. “Twilight will finish what she started.”

... Well we'll see how this plays out.

“It’s the Manic Phantom…”

... You got to be joking.

I smirked bitterly. “Manic Phantom.” What an interesting title. It seemed I had become a story, a myth, much like Nightmare Moon before me. How quaint. I wondered what tales they told of me, what fears and lies they had spun in my absence.

Certainly interesting. Though there are better names. Nightmare Eclipse sounds good.

She needed a student.

...


Well this will be interesting.


So, I’m doing something I have never done before. I want you to comment below if you would like to see your OC in the story, in the next chapter. In chapter 4: STUDENT OF THE MOON, Your character will be the student of Luna, like Twilight was to Celestia. I will check in on the comments tomorrow afternoon. (Send name and short description of the character you would like to see.)

When you say OC do you mean like a character someone came up with or like there own OC based off there own character?

Never thought about an OC before. In terms of a pony name would it even be "Dark Snow"? Probably not. Yeah I won't worry about that. Maybe in the future I'll have an OC made up. I'd imagine a black coat with black and blue mane and tail and as for the cutie mark, I have no idea, but I am always open to ideas.

Well, sounds interesting.

Here's a character.

Name: Last Page-
Cuite Mark: An open book, the pages entirely black, on top of a wings and horn
Description: Young, but brilliant, to the point he is considered both a prodigy and even a savant. That brilliance however comes at the cost of complete obsession and most of his emotional intelligence and physical health. A form of savant syndrome. Specifically, his speciality is in rune magic and spell creation as well as general magical theory which he uses to supplement his relatively low magic capacity (Famously, he has trouble maintaining even the simplest telekinesis spell for long periods on his magic alone). Lastly, his motivation. He wants to be a god... Or the more realistic equivalent of them, an alicorn. When he was a colt he heard a story about how Twilight rose to power, rising from a unicorn to alicorn (The story was on nightmare night, meant to emphasize the part where Twilight used that power to kill her friends, but that was not the part he focused on). Ever since he has been obssessed with the transformation, and he hopes to eventually be able to recreate it, or even better, to understand the principles behind it. This was also when he got his cutie mark.

I think Twilight will start to hallucinate celestia. Or maybe Celestia is a ghost that will drive Twilight over the edge or maybe…Celestia might not be even dead.

So does the OC have to be a unicorn? I'd hope Luna wouldn't do everything like Celestia does when it comes to students 😁.

Tonight, I prepared a simple stew. The vegetables were fresh, a rare luxury, and the spices I’d salvaged from the pantry added a surprising amount of flavor.

Considering that they have been sitting there for fifteen thousand years, I imagine that they are quite full of flavour. "Spices" just isn't it. Not anymore.

Celestia grows more idiotic the longer she lives. Honestly I hope Luna and cadence takes up twilights side, also it would chaotic if discord joined. Because there is going to be some chaos!

Aw man. I wanted to see a civil war.

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I can see celestia not being dead. The are like ultra old, they have to have some resistance to poison. I mean celestia would have died LONG ago is they could die to poison.

Twilight 2.0 now with ambition!

I have a feeling that he will do something that would be revolting to everypony even twilight, so she would join Luna and blast his ass to the moon.

Twilight is giving of old wizard in the woods mentoring a lost soul and giving out a warning on the power they have vibes.

WHY IS THIS CHAPTER IN THE FUTURE?!?!?? ITS JAN 19 NOT JAN 20 WTH!?!??

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WHY IS THIS CHAPTER IN THE FUTURE?!?!?? ITS JAN 19 NOT JAN 20 WTH!?!??

Time zones I assume

It was called The Manic Alicorn: Nightmare Eclipse.

Oh.

This was only the beginning.

I wonder if I should be concerned.

He barely noticed the landscape changing as he ran, the pristine streets of Canterlot giving way to overgrown paths and gnarled trees. By the time he reached the edge of the Everfree Forest, the sun had dipped below the horizon, casting the world in an eerie twilight.

Wait what? Shouldn't the Everfree forest and Canterlot be tens or hundreds of miles apart?

Maybe, just maybe, this stallion would succeed where I had failed. And maybe, through him, I could find a path to redemption.

Certainly hope so.

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No I just got in contact with Starlight and she helped me with a time spell

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Unfortunately for story purposes, the character had to be a unicorn. You will see why in later chapters (once I write them)

I can't wait to see where this story goes!

I would love to see Twilight protecting Luna

The shadow flickered next to me, an all-too-familiar presence that hissed its observations. “Something is off,” it murmured, its voice like a serpent slithering through my ears.

Well that is interesting.

He thought back to everything Twilight had told him, everything she had taught him. The parallels were striking. Luna was just like Celestia—aloof, powerful, and unwilling to share that power. And he was just like Twilight, the one burdened by manipulation, the one destined to rise above.

Ah... I see where this is going.

“I will do what she couldn’t,” he whispered to himself. His steps quickened, his resolve hardening with each stride. “Luna will fall, and I will rise.”

... Yeah I'm just gonna say, I'm glad my OC is not in here.

He laughed, a twisted, hollow sound that echoed through the chamber. "Twilight? Oh no, Luna, don’t blame her. She only unlocked the potential you were too blind to see. She showed me the truth—the strength I could wield if I stopped holding back."

Atleast he's honest.

Luna let out a shaky breath, her gaze filled with sorrow. "Twilight, he—he drained my magic. He plans to do what you couldn’t, to take everything."

Twilight's plans wasn't to take everything, her plans only involved Celestia. After Twilight killed Celestia who knows what would happen, maybe Twilight would then rule Equestria or start a new life.

Last Page’s grin faltered for a moment. Her calm demeanor, the lack of acknowledgment for his accomplishment, unsettled him. “Twilight… aren’t you proud?” he asked, a trace of desperation in his voice. “I completed your mission! I surpassed you!”

:facehoof:

Twilight’s head tilted slightly, and her frown deepened. “You did not complete my mission,” she replied coldly. “My mission ended the day Celestia died.”

There it is.

Last Page snarled, his teeth clenched in frustration. His mind raced, and then an idea struck him—a cruel, desperate gambit. “Let’s bring some memories from the past, hmm?” he shouted, throwing down six runes at once.

Oh... Well this will be interesting.

The path to redemption would be long, and the shadow of Celestia’s legacy loomed large. But together, they would try to rebuild what had been lost. Together, they would face the future.

I love happy endings. I am not reading the bad ending, I don't think I could handle that.

I enjoyed reading this story.

Flurry Heart.

Oh yeah. We haven't seen her and Cadance at all throughout the story, I forgot they even existed.

As the sun began to set, Twilight stood in her private chambers, gazing at an old, worn photograph she kept on her desk. It was a picture of her and her friends, taken long before everything had gone so wrong. She traced her hoof over the image, her expression unreadable.

How...?


There's not a lot of stories where Twilight who was evil gets redeemed. I like this story. Also sometimes you forget to mark the story as completed once finishing it, it makes it confusing if the story is completed or not especially since last chapter seemed like the final chapter.

Well, not exactly how I would have written Last Page, but very interesting nonetheless. His ambition is there, and that was the core of his character anyway. Still, when will they learn that locking away problems is a horrible idea. It happened with Discord, it happened with Sombra, it happened with Tirek. It even happened with Twilight. The lock won’t hold forever, and when it does the imprisoned will return. I would be very surprised if this is the last we see of Last Page, and next time he will be more experienced, more careful. He won’t make the same mistakes. His character is one where even removing his magic won’t even really help as he is already used to working mostly without it.

Mmmm! Very good! I loved every second of this!

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