Epilogue
"Welcome to the Canterlot sculpture garden!" Cheerilee exclaimed, prompting excited "oohs" and "aaahs" from her students.
Her previous class had enjoyed the trip so much that she decided to make it a tradition of sort, to expose as many of her students to the history and the art of the garden as she could.
Cheerilee and her class made their way through the garden gradually, as she explained the nature of the various statues, and their significance to Equestrian society.
"This statue represents Friendship," she explained, pointing to a statue of three small ponies stacked atop one another with looks of happiness and joy. "And I don't think I need to tell you all why friendship is so important!"
"This one represents Victory," Cheerilee began as they passed another statue, one of a pony holding a flag. "It stands as a symbol to those who fight in the name of peace and harmony."
"What's this one, Miss Cheerilee?" one filly asked, pointing a hoof at a strange statue a fair distance from the path.
"This statue is easily the most mysterious of those in the garden," Cheerilee explained as she trotted over. It depicted a strange humanoid creature, like an upright ape, staring sorrowfully down at the group. "It depicts a mysterious creature that no longer lives in Equestria. Many scholars believe it to be an extinct species from ancient times. It represents Sacrifice."
"If that's true, how did they carve a statue of it?" a small colt asked excitedly, probing the statue with a hoof.
"No one knows the name of the artist who carved the statue. Few are sure how it came to be at all! That's where the mystery comes in," Cheerilee explained with a wink. "And over here, is a statue that represents Discord..."
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Well, that's the end of Day One.
I eagerly await the craziness that will follow. I hope it all played out in a way that people enjoyed
awwww
. David didn't go home, and to make things worse he sacrificed himself, but overall a good story.
Wow. That was... abrupt. Can't say I really like the ending. Great story though.
Let me clarify just a bit. Normally a story follows a version of rising action, climax, falling action, resolution. This ended right dead in the middle of the climax. While I certainly don't agree with forcing a story into a mold or a specific writing pattern, in this case I think it would have helped.
No.
REQUESTED:A Sequel
Suggested Title:Day Two/Dawn of the Second Day
And now for the sequel. Day Two!
We shall eagerly await its arrival.
Great fic, Miniscule! The HiE trope may be extremely drawn out, but the good ones find a way to keep it interesting. Well written and overall a good story.
I just had one problem though. Dash's speech patterns seemed kinda off. I don't know if it's just me, but I can't picture her saying "Yes. They are holding her and a lot of other ponies inside the town hall." It seems a bit too formal to be Dash. I read it as "Yeah. They're holding everypony captive in the town hall." But hey, it's probably just me.
I'm going to be stalking more of your fics in the future. I look forward to this.
Well, that ended abruptly.
Good story overall though. Any plans for eventually writing a Day Two?
That was a poor ending...
I enjoyed the first half of this story, but the plot kinda went downhill for me, along with a few details seeming a bit off to me. I enjoyed reading it over all though so thank you for writing this
........ why am i reminded of the ending to the Sopranos?
good story, but you could have been a bit more clear on why David's a statue, and what happened at the end of the battle?
cave man talk below this sentence
STORY GOOD
THEN CHANGELINGS
STORY BAD
Daaaaaaaaaaamn....
This story is good but It kind of ended abruptly, though I'm not saying it's bad it's just that... eh... the plot just fell there.
I now demand a sequel, about the events following that day!
I demand a sequel!
Shitty ending was shitty
Day Two?
1824183 GNOME SMART! LISTEN TO GNOME! NO LISTEN, ME BASH! ME BASH GOOD!!!
wat
wat
...wat
sequel please
I enjoyed the story, but i think the ending was rather abrupt... Also, while the super-sayian thing just before the end fit the story as a whole, it was kinda over-the-top from the tone.
And who's to say that death isn't unheard of in Equestria? Sombra was killed with the power of love, was he not? exploded like a roman candle...
Reset of the world by sacrifice? And somehow memory of few ponies wasn't alternated. Was there a time glitch of space?
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it must have this song
The story kind of fell apart in the last few chapters.
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If you run out of idea's or are having trouble getting an appropriate ending, put the story on hold until you can, don't end with some half-ass rushed ending. Changing my thumb up to a down after that abomination of a final chapter, and I encourage people to join me if it is not addressed.
You had a solid 98 all story long, then you bombed your final chapters and wound up scraping by with a 72.
MOAR! MOAR NOW!
Abruptness is abrupt
I would recommend taking another look at your ending. You could still keep what you have but add more to the beginning of it to explain what happened when he discovered his powers.
Other than that the story was well written and I really enjoyed it.
That was... sudden.
Terrible ending. You may want to go back and fix the last two chapters.
Wait...what?
This was a very nice story my friend, but you ended it so quick I think I might just have whiplash.
I'm not sure what really happened at the end there, did we win? Is there going to be a "Day 2"?
Whatever did happen, I hope there's more to it then this. No disrespect.
Give us Day Two.
That ending was abrupt. I don't want to sound like a hater, but WHAT THE HELL?
I respect your decision in ending it that way, along with the set up for the sequel (assuming there's going to be one) but, really? That's how you want to end Day One? I thought it was great how you set this all up, and the way you portrayed David as a glitch in the system was genius. I liked how you ended the last chapter, with David stopping himself from destroying the Changelings. I don't think that this ending would fit very well "cannon-ly," Princess Celestia wouldn't put him in stone just because of a show of power.
For the last time, WHY WOULD YOU DO THIS?
Edit:
Reread the last chapter. This is definitely a fast-forward in time from your final statement, "Absolute power corrupts absolutely." I'm assuming that David went on some kind of rampage/adventure (most likely the latter) and when the Princesses realized he had too much power, BOOM, stoned.
But, all of this means that the sequel to this story (make one) won't really be a sequel at all. It'll be a description of the events that occurred from the last chapter to the epilogue. It will also be centered around what Cheerilee said about the statue of David. "It represents Sacrifice." People best not be bitchin' after reading this.
Go on.
Hmm. Nope. This epilogue follows the last chapter horribly. At the end of the last chapter David gained some sort of Deus Ex Machina powers for like two seconds, realized that what he was about to do was wrong because of the same reason he got those powers, collapsed and then the chapter ended. How exactly does he represent sacrifice if he didn't do anything? There wasn't even any implications as to what happened after his two second power trip happened. Another thing is that there was no build up to his little break down to super saiyan at the end. No where in the story did he show signs of "going mad" or coming to the realization that "he was part of the race that created this word." :/
Also, why didn't Cheerilee remember him? I suppose that sort of plays in with the whole "reset" thing and the universe protecting itself?
It seemed like this story never knew where it wanted to go in the first place. It seemed like an interesting tale at the start with him exploring a cartoon world and all the inconstancy that came with it and the lack of explanation of certain aspects about the world i.e. reproduction and the various happenings around town like the funeral. In the middle of that we suddenly have the changelings invading ponyville and then the Deus Ex Machina happens.
I liked the ending in the epilogue. I think it was a rather dark twist and I like it. Problem was that there was a lack of build up to it and it just came out of left field. I think a little more detail at the end of the last chapter would help. Even if it's just enough to imply the events. Sadly though I'm walking away from this disappointed and with the feeling that the changeling invasion and the sudden ending was just because you just didn't know what to do with the story and ran out of ideas. Is it true? I don't know. That's just the impression that I'm walking away with.
That aside, I think the rest of the story was an interesting look into a typical cartoon world and all the unexplained happenings that go on in the background and sometimes the main focus. Buildings suddenly having different appearances between episodes, repeated backgrounds, and in the case of MLPFiM repeated background characters. It was nice to see David interact with all this. I thought the "reset" was clever and the thought of the universe protecting itself was neat.
~Have a good one.
EDIT: Just thought I throw in my two cents to the ending. Cheerilee said he represented sacrifice so my guess is that he used his Deus Ex Machina powers to do a sort of massive reset and he removed himself from the world in doing so. I say this because he was at the end of his rope at what to do, he couldn't kill the changelings because that would go against the nature of the universe, he talked about doing a reset just earlier, and just before his little break down he said that he was tired of feeling like an invader which leads me to believe that from day one (ha) he's always felt like the world didn't want him there and that he was better off leaving the universe out of fear that he would contaminate it.
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...And those hopes have been promptly shattered.
I admire David's nobility, but I agree with pretty much everyone when I say that his fate doesn't make sense. Also, how did Celestia and the other ponies overcome the Changelings?
Ugh. That ending was horrible
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1824051 Can you maybe make a sequel where he breaks out eventually?
See's an update "yesyesyes hopefully it will pick, up realizes it is over.
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but I did like the end, He gave his own life to protect them just great.
However you fucking rushed it, You could of made this in to a real tear jerker!!! 
But over all i really like it made me laugh and go wtf a few times so too sum this up Thank you
Why does it keep happening to me that fans get in uproar because of an ending?
... I have to ask. What was the point of this story? That ending was horrible, and you know it.
It started out well enough, then it started delving into generic HiE "human has to help save the world" substance when the Changelings showed up, and now this. Way too rushed.
Maybe a piece of advice for you in whatever stories you plan to write... outline. Make sure you have an ending that flows with the rest of the story, and make sure the rest of the story flows well in itself.
I get it.
He realized his true power in the world- that of a god- and realized that the only way to fix things was to eliminate his presence in the world. He can't send himself back home, so he reboots the universe,and rewrites the underlying "rules" so that his only presence is as a statue that no one knows the origins of, and therefore can't comprehend the true meaning of, meaning the mess with the changelings never happens.
In other words, the solutions to all of life's problems is the Game Genie.
Okay. That ending was REALLY stupid. Really really stupid. I'm disappointed in you.
My problem is that it's ambiguous. Did David sacrifice himself to stop the changelings and/or stop him from harming the world or go mad from power? That would be awesome. Did Celestia decide she didn't like this violent ape and turn him to stone. I would loathe that.
wut.... what happened? We need details between david stopping himself and well this last bit, such details are needed for a proper conclusion.
1824457 The lack of an explanation as to what David did is astounding. Ya give him the power to write the world for an entire 15 seconds, then drop it and explain nothing. Just that everything is back to normal.
This face doesn't even fully express my feelings.
1824481 I'm glad someone does, and that's a great point, how did time go backwards. Oh I know, the author dropped the ball so hard, it shook Equestria and caused a time paradox that sent it backwards many months, but somehow ponies remember enough to know that David was there at some point....or something.
Boy people sure are mad about this ending. I can deal with it, but probably only because I'm very used to rushed endings. One thing I really can't deal with, however, is the abrupt change in scope of the story. If you look at the first chapter and the last chapter, it's as if they are completely different series. As a lot of people have said, it's probably good to spend time planning out what's going to happen relatively far ahead, so you don't end up writing yourself into a bad spot. If I could revoke my vote I would, but I'm not going to give a thumbs down, because I like the rest of the story. I look forward to your next story, and hope it will be improved over this.
Ok the entire story was very well written and I really liked how there were things that he couldn't do or the world would do a reset.
Although it was a bit abrupt with the changelings I still liked that, but that "ending".
I even put it in brackets because to me that isn't even something you should ever see in a story. What you did was build the story up towards a climax, then you reach the peak of climax and then suddenly there is a 90 degrees cliff that kills the story and leaves us unsatisfied with a lot of questions as well.
Even if this is the end of a chapter there still has to be a bit of an ending, not this sorry excuse for a chapter. Sorry, but you just lost my thumbs up.
And here is doctor zoidberg with his opinion
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a bit abrupt of an ending i have to say
Well... As others have said, the ending was kind of sudden... Its not the worst ending to a story ive seen, but It leaves alot of room for speculation. Did David use his super powers to reboot the world? if so, then say that instead of giving us some statue mumbo jumbo. I still like the story overall and it was a nice thing to read, but the ending going from "I know what I must do" to a big THE END has alittle more to be desired
So... Before he had no control, no power, he was at the mercy of the universe and it's rules... Then suddenly, BAM! He is almighty god with the power of anything and everything, and.... It ends.
Cupcakes and The Rainbow Factory made more sense than this... Wasn't that good of a story to begin with, but still I had hope.
ps. This picture says it all.
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