(He/They) Sometimes you just want to hear your favorite story told a little different
Gilda has returned to Ponyville! She says she's here to make good and apologize for being a bully.
Meanwhile Pinkie keeps being mean to her friends and getting in trouble.
What is happening?
Authors note: My grammar is about as good as Pinkie's. You have been Warned! This is also a little sad, but I couldn't but that.
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Both the chapters are really short, sorry. I just didn't know what else to put. I don't know if the other chapters will be that short or not. My gamer is probably terrible, so just bare with me.
Grammer. And i agree it could use some work.
However i do look forward to what you have planned for this.
NEVER MAKE CHAPTERS OF LESS THAN 1000 WORDS
, seriously you won't receive any punishment for making long chapters.
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Except it's "grammar" and not "grammer".
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You can say that again.
One of my stories had a single chapter at 12k words.
Day one it had 3 likes and 5 dislikes.
So I split it into multiple chapters (6 to be exact)
Day two it had 9 likes and 9 dislikes.
And today it have 13 likes and 11 dislikes. (As well as 12 Favourites)
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See? How every you spell it, I really suck.
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I'll try to make the others longer, I promise (I should just combine these two chapters, shouldn't I?)
I Have NEVER Had So Many Views In Such A Short Amount Of Time!
Cool story, let's see where it goes.
real shame that nopony has commented on this story
i enjoy the premise and the execution is well enough, but you should find a proofreader (not an editor, mind you for i only saw a few mistakes) this story is extremely rushed, and certain parts are worded strangely. an example would be when gilda first showed up, some exposition would have been nice, and not having dash immediantly be so cognizant and forgiven could have allowed much more realism into the story. for instance, imagine if you were just jarringly woken up by a former friend that you had bad blood with, and immediantly have them apologizing while you are taking stock of the situation, would you just suddenly understand the situation and forgive someone if they did what gilda did to her and RD's friends? you could have also had a lot more dialouge during the whole meeting her friends scene, like what they said on the way to their houses, and what RD's friends actually said. This is a good story and all, but you really need a proofer, fear not though, as all great writers have had to have some help, fimfiction or otherwise. Sally forth!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Scootaloo_lolface.png
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Thanks for that advice. I did want to put a little more dialogue in but couldn't think of any. Dash forgiving Gila so fast WAS given a lot of thought. I personally think that Dash really didn't want Gilda to be a jerk, she probably had a hard time deciding to abandon her. I think Dash would jump at the chance to right wrongs and such. I am very thankful for the advice though and other people have commented, just on the other page. Thanks though, It is really great to have someone do what you did!
Kinda rushed.
Also, isn't a horse's hoof like super hard? Shouldn't a griffon claw not do anything?
This is very rushed.
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Ya, it sort of just scratched her, enough for her to notice but not for it to hurt. And I'm REALLY sorry it's rushed, I guess I sort of didn't think this part out enough. Grrrrrr. I'll try to do better I promise!
Got a chapter with more then 1000 words!
And I still got to do the cliff hanger I wanted.
Twe....TWENTY PEOPLE HAVE FAVED THIS! AND IT'S ONLY BEEN UP FOR A DAY!
Ermagherd, all the words! And it gets better!
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It's really a thrill the first time you notice one of your fics quickly gets many views. I don't really care how many views my stories gets, I just write them for my own enlightenment on how to be a better author and to get other's opinions to help the progress of said enlightenment.
Thought, if one seeks to attain a high number of views, my tip is; Write clop, it attracts views like moths to a flame.
For example;
Before I uploaded my stories to this site, I was uploading them to an other site.
First, I had two fics which in a month got like 100-150 views each.
Then I upload my first clop-ish fic which breezes through and pass my other fics' view count and gain a whooping 300 views, IN. A. WEEK.
Here on FF, that same fic has an unrivaled viewcount of 729 when my other fics only got like ?<250 views with the exception of one having 490.
One of your earlier comments;
Sorry if I ask, but are you TRYING to get the chapters short? If yes, then DON'T.
When I was writing my first fic that I uploaded to FF, I had a chapter which should focus on my OC and Rarity. Ended up focusing my OC and Lotus for the most part. That whole scene that I at first didn't really want to have there but somehow ended up keeping, was at like 2k words, making the entire chapter at ~3k words.
The whole sauna scene (yes, sauna
) don't actaully contribute THAT much to the story itself (IMO) but I don't think it's wrong to have it there, so I thought, ''Why not''. So I just left it there for shits, kicks and lolz. And nobrony has the very least complained about it. ''Don't fix what ain't broken'', right?
On another note; I gotta go take a shit, later!
1456652 what about all the Fallout story???
i think it will end 2 way's one frd's find out what she doing and say you know what you 2 are even now, or they kick her ass and she go away forever, i want the 1st one becasue i like that idea better
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I'm not trying to make the chapters short, but it's really hard for me not to, and (I feel like an idiot) what exactly is a clop fic?
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You shouldn't feel like an idiot for asking.
''One should not be faluted for being brave enough to question.''
Beisdes, ''One who asks a lot gets to know a lot''
Moving on...
A ''clop fic'' is an MLP:FiM related fiction containing sex scenes, whether it is betwen two (or more
) canon character, two OC's or even if a human is involved. As long as at least one MLP:FiM related character is in that fic, it's a clop. Even if that character is just trembling in a corner while two humans goes at it.
To go deeper (HA, seewhatIdidthere?), the word ''Clop'' comes from the word ''Clopping'' which basically means ''Fapping to MLP related characters''
Another way of specificaly describing a ''Clop Fic'' is an MLP:FiM fiction written to be used as a source of arousal or just rudely ''fap material''.
I've written two stories that can arguably be called ''clop fics''. But my Intentions (HA! I'm scoring high today!) were never for them to arouse others, or myself for that matter. They were solely written to express some sorta depth of the relationship betwen my OC and Derpy.
Gilda: KILL IT WITH FIRE!
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Then I will never write a clop fic! I HATE those sex stories, so no clop fic for me! Those things scare me!
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No killing. I don't like killing ether. So if you wanted something gory, this is not the right story!
it's a good story , i won't go in to detail about the characters personalities, but you none of us are 5 star writers, but still i like a good story from time to time , not a great story but not a bad story. ill keep reading and find out.
with kindness
1463658 Aww...I'm not in the Cupcakes part of Fimfiction...jk
It's a meme.
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Scare you? How? Ok, that the clop fics can get a bit... erm... extreme... if it's written by a good writer.
But scary? Hmm... I feel sumthin' bein' amiss.
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Confession, I'm not an adult.
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Hmm... I see. My bad.
aww i was going to suggest keeping him out of the loop about clop (for a prank or his own good[even though he could have googled it])
well done, not only is this chapter longer, it has an overall better quality and it was unexpected that Gilda's making pinky do it, i expected it to e like a werewolf thing where gilda takes pinky's kindness while pinky takes gilda's bullyness
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putting it lightly <insert if you know what i mean .gif> dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png
1467767 How old are you then?
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I don't want to revile that. Sorry.
1500829 No big deal. If you are younger that is cool. You are a really good writer. Looking forward to where you take this story.
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Thanks!
Longest chapter yet!
You've all been waiting with baited breath for this, or you haven't. I don't know. I just know that a lot of ponies have faved this and were waiting for this next chapter. I'm pretty sure the next chapter will be my last but things may change. Comment, Like, Dislike, do whatever you want. I hope this has been entertaining! It's almost over! 
dude this was starting to get good but you really need to make the chapters longer thn 1k, becuse this is ridiculous, you update like once a week or 2, if you keep making these really short chapters with comparatively snail-paced update times, im gonna have to un-favorite
I like this chapter. But I have one small complaint. Pinkie may be the most random of ponies, and her friends do thimk that she is a little off her rocker, but I cannot see that they would refuse to believe her. Other than that, This is good.
Anypony else up for some fried chicken?
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If someone hurt you, friend or no, then blamed it on someone that from your point of view couldn't have possible done it, would you believe them?
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I'm really sorry I'm late. My computers been down for awhile and I didn't want it to take too long.
1550955 That would depend on the friend. I am just thinking of the episode with the Parasprites. Nobody listened to her, but in the end she was the one who knew exactly what to do. Take my opinion for what it is: My opinion. Regardless of my opinion, I am really looking forward to the rest of this story. Keep up the good work!
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1552680 Nice Discord emote, how do you do that?
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go to the chrome store (not sure how on FF or IE) and download a program named tampermonkey, look up my little pony, and there should be a program that says mlp emotes or something or the other (i did this a long time ago so the details are a tad fuzzy) don't forget to activate it in the programs menu (still in tampermonkey) after you activate it
I'm sorry, but I HATE, I bucking HATE, stories with Gilda as a villain. SO I'm afraid I'm going to have to dislike this story.