After Spike gets his Heart stomped into little pieces will he ever be happy again?
Will another pony fill the hole in his heart?
Can he forget the incident and try another chance at love?
Only time will tell.
Authors note- Spike's future love will be revealed in a couple of chapters
Story will be more comedic later on
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well despite the obvious character flaws in rarity and spike, i'm still gonna follow the story, just to see where ya take it and who spikes future lover is
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thanks for that.
i only really spent an hour on this to relieve the stress of my exam tomorrow.
the next chapter will probably be 2x as long and ill spend a couple hours fixing it up
I'm going to be honest and say that I have no idea if I want to follow this story or not (just to be clear: I hate the label "Favorites" because it's ONLY what stories I want to follow and read more of)
mostly because I HATE cheating in general (ironic because I'm writing a harem story) and because it reminds me of the dark stories about Spike going on killing rampages, especially with my immmediate thought while reading this:
so I will "favorite" only to read how you compose the next chapter
aaaaahh nothing like a good old heart-break and a little character bashing, just wonering what will come next guessing rarity will try to win spike back while spike gets a bit emo for a while before a new love interest appears(only real complaint that i have is you mutalimated Fancy Pant's personality like i mutilated the first spelling of it
) still the storie has a lot of potential
and if i accidently mady you feel bad here is spike with a mustache with rainbowdash loving it. 
eeeeeeyup!
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its ok
constructive critisicm is a way to improve
1444787 yeah. to be honest i never liked those rampage stories too. but i will try and fix it up so it doesn't seem violent.
Errors:
Be careful, dont change the tense.
Also, the whole "element of harmony" part was completely unnecessary, and you even said that it was "another story". Therefore its presence in this story is irrelevant. Also, add more comas and dont rush the story, take your time to expand the story.
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sorry didin't notice the tense.
And i actually plan on integrating the element of harmony story with this one.
thanks for that. ill edit that bit. i would spend more time on the next chapter as i have a week off school. i would probably start on it tomorrow.
so i could probably expand it more
Oh, and before i forget. Try looking around for a pre-reader/editor. It will do you wonders!
1477340 i probably will when im not too busy.
thanks for the advice
moar...
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soon my friend.
still quite busy in school
1526998 me no able to wait...
hurry.....
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i will most likely have it up by tomorrow but i will try my hardest to get it done now.
i'm typing as i read
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ok... so we have Pinkie and Twilight going after Spike... Rarity's regretting her actions and the story is just beginning...
So I just have to ask: who's going to get together with my favorite pony (er... dragon) ?
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I said it would be revealed but not fully obvious.
But i could probably make two chapters. one a Pinkie ending and the second a Twilight ending
and yes this is just the beginning. more and more things are coming
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I know... I'm just impatient... and frustrated I don't have either the time or insperation to write more of my own stories...
DAYUM! DATS SUM BUSTAH ASS SHIT G!!!!!!!
m-m-m-moooooar MOOOOOOAR MOAR moar moar MOOOAR moar. moar moar moar MOOOAR moar. Moar moar MOAR moar...
(say to tune of star wars theme)
When i read the first chapter, I hated this fic. I mean, I'm all for Rarity hating (even though out of of the mane six she is the most relatable), but that first chapter was just mean-spirited. For some reason, i stuck with it and was actually pleasantly surprised and rather enjoyed the rare Spike x Pinky shipping story. It's a ship that doesn't happen as often as you'd think, considering that on the show Pinky spends the most time with Spike outside of Twilight and said "Spikey Wikey" first. Kudos on that regard and aside with my issues with the first chapter and a few spelling and grammar mistakes here and there.
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A few more mistakes here and there. Overall good story.
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Peace Out.
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thanks
i will edit that later after class
"Hey Pinkie remember the time we joined forces and created A cupcake of incredible flavour and happy feeling's?"
Flash back....
"wow Spikey this is a giant Cupcake we made." Pinkie said.
"Yea I know, it's big enough to fit a cyan Pegasus in." Spike nodded.
"The rainbow colored frosting looks yum! Why does it smell like pony?" Pinkie said confused.
"Oh my god where's Rainbow Dash!" Exclaimed Spike.
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hehe i laughed
Raribitch, that's A good one.
How is the hell is Rarity gonna try to get Spike back, "Ummm...Fancy just fell into me while he was hanging a picture."
Pinkie is a much better friend both in this fic and in the canon of the show. Also Pinkie is a master of disguise and can me anyone or anything.
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1619266 thanks
1619370 i often find Pinkie one of my favourite characters. She is funny
I can feel the feels of the next chapter already!
Pls don't make us wait too long.
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i will try
Everything that was necessary for the the plot could have been done without the pointless character bashing and making the Rarity out of character.
Pretty good. I do however have suggestion, use commas! There was not a single comma in this chapter. Besides that, it was entertaining! Good job.
1624092 i will try
you wrote
twice. ANYWAY other than that I really want to see whats going to happen with this
that... was... perfect... i love spipie shipping. can we haz moarz? pleaze?
1625131 oh sorry
1625140 i will try to get it up by tomorrow
So much feels
but one part made me lol.
the part were he sang this part
shouldn't it be that he is the prince?
1625262 guess i forgot that part hehe
1625268It's just imagining Spike sing that he'll be the princess is just so funny HAHAHA.
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true hehehe
I think, Rarity is a bit out of character...
And Pinkie is a bit too, but it can be explained in her situation ( love, inexperience, etc ). But the story is still great and beautiful, and this is the most importent. And i love Pinkie+Spike.
I was thinking that the only one in Ponyville that could probably make a fire ruby besides Spike has to Pinkie because she grew up on a rock farm because apparently in Equestria stones and gems grow like plants (sapphire season) making diamonds and other gems worth no more than a bushel of fresh fruit.
As for the up coming shit storm...Pinkie should go all Broken Pinkie Promise on Rarity.
The feels I can't hold them all.
SOOO MANY FEELS. Can I have a hug?
1626673 sorry about that but i'm still trying to get a feel of writing. Getting out of character helps a bit.
1626911 oh just wait till i publish the next chaper. might be a while though as i have another story i'm gonna upload soon a one shot
Obviously Spike is too much dragon for one mare to handle.
1634916 yup
The ultimate Mare fight (Equestrian version of a catfight), through out the fight I kept going 'OOOOOOHHHHHH! OH SNAP!'. Spike is best dragon.
&
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1635125 yep hehe.
So who else enjoyed the bitch fight?
vs
baby
1635239 That video had me in stitches.
1634916 Agreed!
