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arandomboi12


Saved the day, the night, and the girl too.

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An intriguing start! I'll look forward to the next installment.

This looks interesting. Can't wait for more

a anonym pony who is not a fucking girl but a dude lets go

(He's not op, so chill out guys -_-)

Tis a sad day indeed
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Hey can you prey tell what are the age of the characters in this story pls

Whaaaaaaat? His first instinct isn’t to name himself Anonymous? Oh the horror!

"Fluttershy," Random repeated, testing the name on his tongue. It was a fitting name, he supposed, for such a timid-looking creature.

Used the name Random to refer to him before he decided to use it.

A pretty interesting start, I'll keep my eye on this.

I've not read past the title and "cover" picture, and my brain instantly assumed it was a Danny Sexbang insert from NSP or Game Grumps. I've not even watched GG in half a decade

A simple but interesting start, lets see how this goes. Good job.

Thanks for the chapter 🙂

Hmm, a new HiE alicorn story?
Let's see how it goes.

He carefully draped the cloak over his back, wincing as the rough fabric scratched against his fur. It didn't completely hide his wings, but it was better than nothing.

Very minor thing, but he doesn't acknowledge having wings prior to deciding to cover them with the cloak.

"Oh, Cuddles, you were so brave!"

Hmm, a bear called Cuddles? I wonder if Cuddles and Harry are friends. (for context, Harry is the name of that bear that Fluttershy often has near her cottage in the show).

An awesome start, I love a good HiE. It's kinda weird that you didn't put the "Human" tag on this story, usually HiEs do that even if the main character is a pony. Also, it was kinda weird how you never adress the MCs reaction to the wings and that their introduction was him hiding them under the conviniently placed cloak. Also also, you start refering to him as "Random" before he introduces himself as "Random", it's just kinda odd. Overall a great start, hope you enjoy writing this story as much as I enjoy reading it! Happy writing!

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Yeah, this was just a test run to see if I still had my writing funk cured. I'll get around fixing and patching up some things.

Is the art if not the story inspired by "Demon Lord Hakuto Kunai" from "Demon Lord, Retry!"? He looks like him if he was a pony right down to the cigarette.

First off, love the picture here.:heart: Second, you need any help? Truth be told, I can't offer money, but I can help you out if you go into Docgoogle.

His gaze drifted downwards, past his chest, past his stomach… and stopped. For the first time since waking up, a flicker of genuine, albeit surprised, interest crossed his face.

Good things.

Our main character wakes up in the forest as an alicorn. He however, hides his real species identity to avoid anything that had to do with the mane 6 and the princesses. However, things never go as planned thanks to his double edge sword luck.

Wise choice of action, because you don’t know where you are now.

Two days on featured page. Congratulations

Aww i liked the previous cover art more

He looked so scrunkly in that one.

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Hmmm... I'll change it back since people love the old skrunkler

It’s an adventure too!!! Oh please tell me there’s gonna be songs they always tie the story together especially when it the cool type

ngl, I was almost hoping when I saw the cover that it was Qrow from RWBY who was just done with his bullshit semblance. XD

Yay! The skrunkly is back!!!
:pinkiehappy: Thank you!!

It's good, so far. There are a couple issues, though.

First, he's referred to by the name 'Random' before he gives it to himself.

Second, his wongs are never mentioned before deciding to cover them (2.5: why even hide them. Why would he think the wings would draw attention when he's a tiny unicorn?).

Third, he just happens to fing a cloak just sitting under a bush right where he was? That's a bit too convenient. Why not just have the cloak covering him instead of a goant leaf when he wakes up?

Fourth and finally, Fluttershy seems a bit out of character with how that line; "Did you see how scared those Timberwolves were?" She's the type to dislike scaring anything, even timberwolves. If anything, she would express that she's just glad they avoided violence.

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Yeah, I'mma edit a whole bunch of stuff, so it can be accurate.

Could use some work here and there, but interesting overall.

Comment posted by Storymaker deleted Last Thursday

Now we play the game of whether or not this story of theirs will reach 10k words! :rainbowlaugh:

Comment posted by Estee deleted March 9th

Starts out fun. I hope to get to see where this goes. :twilightsmile:

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Sim
Eu estava vendo
Ele tem muita história
Mas tão incompletas
Ele nunca termina a história
Tem história que so tem 2 capítulos ;-;

Now... Will you actually continue this or will it be another story for the bin like your other stories?

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