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After what had seemed like a lifetime of memories, Shining Armor and Princess Cadence had become best friends. But when Shining must leave an entire year for Royal Guard training in the West, he can't help but find a way to tell the filly how he's felt about her for years. How can one approach a topic without jeopardizing a cherished friendship? Can things ever be the same between the two again? But the one true question that wanders his mind: Does Cadence even feel the same way about him?

Inspired by Louis Armstrong's original song, and of course the connection between these two characters that holds their love in an everlasting bind of faithfulness, and passion.

Giving credit to jonhjoseco for the cover art. It was truly the perfect image to promote this story.Go see his deviantart at: http://johnjoseco.deviantart.com/

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Comments ( 14 )

:heart: :twilightsmile:

Ooooh, right in the Feels. Nice job, good sir/ma'am.

Not going to lie, came across a few grammar errors, BUT it's not about that. The emotion was what was important and you got it across quite well. Bravo, sir/ma'am. Bravo. :yay:


Edit: gotta troll :trollestia: First! :rainbowwild:

It's sir and thank you very much. :twilightblush:

I tried to fix as many bugs I could find but I guess you're right. Thanks again! :raritywink:

1455800 Ummm Not that you have to but, I was wondering if you'd be able to tell me where these errors are, because I plan on sending this into Equestria Daily in the next few days and I'll need all the help I can get. Again, you don't have to :twilightsheepish:

1457079

It's no problem. Had a reader do it to my story, so "paying it forward", so to speak :twilightsmile:

It was her one escape from her expectations as a member of royalty. Foalsitting.: I would personally change it to "Foalsitting was her one escape from..."

nothing excited had- exciting...

"Oh My what a day.- lowecase the "M" and add a comma after "my"

gazed the family room, there was nothing left to do except...except.- missing a word at the beginning and is the second "except" necessary?

there was no way she was finished her review.- "finishing"

But she knew looking in the back of the book would not be a luxury to relax herself in a supervised exam where a stunt like that could get her a zero.- Sentence is a little weird, but do you mean into?

it was a loss cause- lost...

walking in from a long night of drill was Shining Armor- "drills" or "drilling"

The stallion jumped at her welcoming, normally- Make "normally" the start of a new sentence.

You looked like you're about to flip this entire table a moment ago."- Instead of "you're", try "you were" OR get rid of "a moment ago".

Shining Armor padded her back-- I think you mean "patted".. :rainbowwild:

your right.- you're

Again, the Princess hit him in on the shoulder. Although this smack being harder than the previous two.- get rid of the period & "although" and add a comma.

Gives them a chance to just themselves, you know?- I feel like you're missing a word here.

Most of them were in the first third of it. And that's all I came across, other than words/letters that need to be lower-case or some commas that are missing.

It's a great story that hits the Feels, so hopefully EqD will feature it. :pinkiehappy:

THATS NOT HOW LOGARITHMS WORK! check wolfram alpha or your textbook. Otherwise, a good fic.

1461793 I just worked them out how I was taught them xD But for argument's sake, I shall. Thanks for the heads-up :derpytongue2:

1461496 Thanks a million! I will get to work on this right away. Now if only I could find a full time proofreader :rainbowwild:

So cute!!!!! :rainbowkiss: :pinkiehappy: :raritystarry: :twilightsmile:

Knowing about the song, I'm now picturing Cadence shot in the dead by pony Blofeld and Shining Armor shocked about it like in On Her Majesty's Secret Service.

1597747 Oh My, this was THE saddest moment in the entire franchise :fluttercry: I can imagine Shining Armor reacting like that as well. Such a powerful scene, thanks for the comment and thanks for enjoying the story. :pinkiesmile:

Comment posted by linkman443 deleted Sep 25th, 2013

A very nicely constructed story. Well put together and well paced. Might of enjoyed a bit more time showing their relationship as friends, or Shining Armour's struggle with his feelings. But well, its only a one-shot. So all in all, I am glad to have read this.


y = log x. y = 10
10 = log x.
Log x would be log base 10 of x, so wouldn't x = 100?
log 100 = 10.
Good one shot otherwise ;)

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