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When Princess Celestia banished Luna, she expected her to return in a thousand years as a weakened little mare for her to mother and nurture back to health. When Luna tacked on a few extra years and finally returned with just as much snark as she ever had, she's thrown for a loop. And that's not even mentioning that apparently the Multiverse is actually a real thing, someplace called Hogwarts is inviting her people, and the war she didn't know Equestria was fighting!?


First off, this story is an experiment. It's another story in the Gate/OtIoPW/AI/etc vein, though it really only shares the same general idea; I've done numerous little tweaks so it's still a whole new story. And at least part of that is the format: For the most part, the story is presented as a series of journal entries written by the various people. I'm doing my best to keep entries from the same writer consistent in tone/style, but don't expect too much there. There's going to be a few little event scenes slipped in between, whenever I really want to show rather than journal.

While I have structured these entries so they're sorted by character and each chapter group represents one month of entries, meaning that there will be multiple chapter entries that technically happen in parallel, I don't recommend skipping any of them unless you've already read the story. I already have trouble repeating myself between stories- something I'm hoping this format helps me learn to overcome- so repeating myself between characters when multiple characters see the events is simply not happening. Besides, you're not here to read about the same event three times over, you're here to read about something new, aren't you?

While you can probably read the various 'subchapters' in whatever order you wish, I have ordered them the way I have for a reason- in some cases, at least. The ones tagged 'Origin' are the first time a given character has supplied an entry, and may introduce that character.

This thing's been writing itself quite well so far, so I have hope it'll keep going. For as long as it does, expect one chapter- that is to say, one chapter group, comprising one month of entries- per month.


And finally? Tags may be updated as the story progresses. Even though I've never updated them.

And this story was written with the able editing assistance of ... Me, Myself, and I, apparently. It seems I was silent for too long, so they all wandered off.


Cancelled 10/22/24 for the same reason as all the other recent stories. This time, though, I've actually noticed the trend and realized what I need to do to make something longer-lived.

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Well ...
So, as soon as she lowers the moon, and then *raises the sun*, that has to be enough to alert Celestia to "Something is happening", right?

And, how can she be making a night with a sunright?
Time to see chapter two and get my response.

EDIT: Chapter two is not Celestia, I mis-read the chapter titles a few minutes ago.

I… don’t know how to write a journal, actually. One moment while I look it up.

PFFT. Lost it on this one. Well done! <Clap>

When I asked her how big of an array I should make, and for a recommendation for where to put it… she seemed to have forgotten that she’d sent it all in the first place. She’s done that before when I answered days apart, but this was just five minutes!

Luna is mailing letters pretending to be Celestia. How long has she been in hiding and manipulating things?

In this letter, she introduced the mailpony- why Princess Celestia knows the Ponyville postmare so well, I can’t figure out- and specified how big the worldgate array should be.

Yep. That's Luna.

Seriously, does Twilight not get super suspicious by now? From "here are details on a worldgate", to "I don't know what a world gate is" , to "as big as possible, here's a massive land deed".

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Yup. No doubt she does get suspicious, especially since she said even Pinkie thinks it's weird, and it does actually get addressed (albeit not by Twilight) within the next few chapters somewhere.

As for how long, only since after her prophesied return. That takes place a week after the Summer Sun Celebration, you'll notice.

Twilight had to call it The Beaver Dam, because J Edgar Vaccuum Cleaners hadnt been invented yet? :pinkiehappy:

Bon Bon had a blast of inspiration manifest. She treats Pinkie, like Igor. :pinkiecrazy:

Here we go again. With some plan this time, perhaps? :rainbowlaugh:

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Yup, but emphasis on some. The journal format should allow me to simply ignore "the characters wouldn't have done that"-type issues that forced the other stories into dead end routes... as should the dichotomy between two characters that haven't appeared yet, which ought to keep Hailey from breaking character. At the end, though? I'm one of those writers where I'm not the one that actually writes the story, the characters do. So... who knows.

Robot Teddy reading a book makes me think of stories like Someday, The Fun They Had, and other Golden Age stories about the expectations of all the automation without consideration of the side efects.:twilightoops:

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You know, if your problem is that Hailey keeps trying to destroy the story because she can, maybe make her less powerful and less active of a character? I mean, sure, female lead is fine, but Harry (canon) was really a wimp until at least after getting some quidditch victories *AND* handling two massive obstacles that grownups kept telling him to not get involved in.

It really was his time turning adventures in book three that made him a hero, my opinion. EDIT: It was "Expecto Patronum" that changed him from "Someone will rescue us" to "I will save the day"

So just tell Hailey, "Act a little more timid, or I'll just rewrite you to be more timid."

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That's... one of the things I'm doing in this story. He doesn't want to stand out, he just wants to disappear. And maybe, just maybe, he'll manage it.

Journaling in your head?

...

The point of journaling, as I understand it, is to get it *out of your head*, so your mind doesn't have to constantly think/remember all that junk.

Well ... this was a different chapter..

So, you have an LLM spell to summarize books / notes, massive amounts of automation and robotic assistants ...

Is this OC something like real world silicon valley guys?

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That's... a very good question, actually. I'm not familiar with the real-world "silicon valley guys", though, so I don't think it's one I can answer.

I do know that he was presented to me as a shy enchanter that's madly in love with Twilight Sparkle, and I kinda just ran with it to generate the character that we have here. This actually isn't the first of my stories that Shooting Star has appeared in- he's also present in Just Like Magic of Old and its rewrite, Starbound Flight... though as an engineer instead of an enchanter, since he- like all the other ponies in those stories- doesn't have magic at the start.

Having noise extraction software that good is going to be so much fun, because the equvalent can be run on streetcams, doorbell cams and TV, and use it to extract and clean up the Ministeries obfuscation workings? In fact, given the timing, Vernon could try running the image software on Google Streetview and see what changes?:trixieshiftright:

I wonder if theres that model of the Goodyear blimp, remote control with a video recordning camer possible for those slow accurate ariel tracking shots? :unsuresweetie:

I like this. It's a very interesting take on Voldy -- he manages to get the whole prophecy, finds out that he's only going to mark someone, and not kill them. He's intelligent enough to understand the difference between an attack on silly wizards vs attacks on muggles, and is having to deal with "incompetent minions".

It reminds me a bit of the Voldy from HP:MoR, where he's just a mask, a role being played by a really good actor of a wizard.

Wait, how many portals do you have besides the one that leads to massive bigotry, refusal to acknowledge magic, magic that is vastly different from what you are used to, etc -- if you have any other valid world to use, why use this one?

The biggest issue with moving the timeline forward is just technology. 1990's, it was possible to talk about magical secrecy -- barely. 30 years later, there's no way. If the magical places share the same planet surface, GPS mapping and satellites will not allow a separate area to exist without being known. Even if you cannot get to a place; even if you have unplottable areas; the fact that there are obvious gaps will be major tells.

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Not really? Sure, technology advanced and you will get more videos and so on, but scepticism advanced, too. If you would film a wizard doing magic nowadays, most people would go photoshop, not magic. Satellites and so on likely won't be a problem either. Not because it wouldn't work, but because the muggle governements likely cover up all hints of magic, simply because the reveal would cause so much chaos. All in all, I would say the most dangerous period for magic users were the early 2000, after that it got better.

Thank you for the chapter. A rather unique version of Petunia Dursley, an almost decent person.

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Not enough, apparently. Though not for lack of trying.

Well ... remove it like a cancer tumor? ...

So was medical science in the early 1980's able to do this? Or would canon Petunia even have been willing to do so?

Harry should be 15 months old now, right? Isn't that old enough to be making word sounds?

So Harry is basically two years old when his scar is removed. ... Will the surgery and the commotion give him some sort of fear of hospitals or doctors?

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That's... a very good question. I imagine it would be, since it's literally just removing skin against the bone of the skull, but that doesn't necessarily mean anything. As for if canon Petunia would be willing? Absolutely not, she genuinely hates Harry. And her sister.

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... Quite possibly. I guess the full year passage never crossed my mind...

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Maybe? He was probably on anesthetic or something to make him unaware- I doubt a two-year-old would hold still while they cut his forehead open under normal circumstances.

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This is true. My Next Button Enabler malfunctioned these last couple days, but I've finally got it working again. One moment while I activate it for the final chapter of this month...

Wait. Stealing the right foods to have a healthy diet? Why not just feed him proper food?

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Probably the letter from Dumbledore. No doubt they're giving him the right food, but not enough of it... then using that monitor to see what he's stealing so they can supplement any deficiencies later, and also so they can beat a healthy diet into his brain so he goes for a healthy spread on his own.

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They're other stories I've written- Accidental Invasion (AI) was a rewrite of On the Implications of Parallel Worlds (OtIoPW), which was itself a rewrite of The Gate. Technically, A Hogwarts Harmony (AHH)- is a rewrite of AI, and this story (JoH:CaH) is a rewrite-ish of that, but since they're all rewrites on the same thing rather than actual sequels...

That said, for the Gate/OtIoPW/AI/AHH chain, I did manage to tie them together with a few multiverse shenanigans in the various Chapter's Ends and actually canonize them to each other as parallel worlds...

Hooray, more computerneek writing! Can't wait to see where this goes. Even if the entries aren't particularly wordy this time around they've still been quite entertaining. Hope you feel like you can keep going with this one, I was always said when you ended up killing the other stories.

She had introduced herself, after all.

I think you mean "hadn't"

Oh, I noticed the dates.
Why does she say "Fawkes protected", and why is she putting her magic into Harry's wand?

...

I notice I am confused.

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Anime...? No, unfortunately, they're not, they're other stories I've written. I wish I could conjure anime...

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Not even close. While I have seen and do enjoy GATE (wish I could find the novel on Kindle), unfortunately my The Gate has absolutely no connection to it whatsoever.

Except maybe that the ponies came to Hogwarts through a gate between universes, but the location of that gate is a secret rather than known to everyone, and the gate was created by a pony rather than simply appearing on its own.

Helia is more articulate than a robot because unlike GPT etc she has been coded by a vastly more powerful system and in a far more compact and efficint format.

Its amazing how much improvement a system gets by various types of feedback. :trixieshiftright:

This sounds like a fascinating crossover! The concept of Luna returning with her original sass after all those years adds a great twist, and I love the idea of journal entries as a narrative style. It really allows for a personal touch and gives insight into the characters' thoughts. I'm curious to see how the Hogwarts element plays into the story and how the characters from both universes will interact. Can’t wait to read more!

Strange how theres three most magical beings, and Luna is one of them and Hellia is another. A toss up between Celestia and Discord? Or has Rainbow Twilicorn or Guardian Spike overlapped even those?:moustache:

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Celestia is the other. Technically, Discord is the strongest of the three of Celestia, Luna, and Discord, but they don't think he's in their league at all for some reason, or aren't considering him, so he got left out of that assessment. He's also way stronger than Helia, but he's also the only one that can't transit between worlds, thanks to the nature of what I've defined him to be...

When was this cancelled I'm pretty sure it wasn't a day or two ago ugh why the fuck do stories like this always get cancelled it pisses me off because I Iike these concepts and they are not common and the worse part they are just forgotten about not for a chance of being rewritten. Now I have to take it off my bookmark list.

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I'm sorry about that. The good news is this one is planned to be rewritten, and unlike the last, um, nine iterations of this (kind of) story, five of which are on this exact rewrite chain, I've figured out what I need to do to let it go through to completion!

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That's cool sorry for being rude I well when I'm upset I tend to sometimes get angry and frustrated unfortunately through text people assume I'm being a asshole for the sake of it and while I can be one at times more often than not it's unintentional and anyone who knows me knows that very well

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