Maybe I haven't read enough entries on this site, but this has to be one of the only stories where pegasi use weather termonology for their swears... and Honestly I think we as readers are missing out!
For a race solely responsible for Equestria's weather it makes sense for them to have terms and sayings oriented around things like precipitation and wind pressure, makes me want to come up with a few of my own.
"I'm not saying She's a sleet, but everypony new exactly who was in trouble last Tuesday from the sound of her screams"
"check out the cumulonimbus over there, somepony should lay off the hayburgers."
"By the strands of the Cirrus Kelvin-Helmholtz! What the BUCK is that!"
11944422 Yeah, I think it makes sense for the culture. If AJ can have countryisms, so can the pegasi. Just like a unicorn saying someone annoying is "hurt in my horn", or something. As long as there's not too many of those, I think they're a nice decoration.
Review of Chapter 2: Flying North Positive: Traveling scenes are sometimes very hard to do. But this chapter was a whole adventure on its own. Reading it feels as a long flight, full of little things that create a long journey.
Rainbow Dash is introduced to tight fit. In more ways than one. I thought that was clever.
Negative:
“The suit was actually kinda smelly—”
Whose fault is that?
“Could you move the wing holes lower? “A tightening across her midsection, and a release of pressure across her back
This makes no sense. It should be in reverse. If you put holes lower, the pressure on the back should increase.
tried to not imagine splitting this nerd into two. Or being split into two herself.
After many rereads, I imagine that RD is both angry and horny. But I’m still not sure that’s the case though. The contrast is too wast to intuitivelly connect the two things into one thought.
I guess never told you
I guess I never told you
“Hey, don’t forget to sleep,” Dash chuckled, and shook her rump.
Why? Is she trying to challenge him as in, “You won’t be able to sleep with my ass in your memory?” Is that how this is supposed to be read? I can’t tell.
“It’s just you that makes them wet!”
“It’s just you who makes them wet!”
“At least you have other hobbies than making wetsuits.”
“At least you have other hobbies besides making wetsuits.”
Maybe I haven't read enough entries on this site, but this has to be one of the only stories where pegasi use weather termonology for their swears... and Honestly I think we as readers are missing out!
For a race solely responsible for Equestria's weather it makes sense for them to have terms and sayings oriented around things like precipitation and wind pressure, makes me want to come up with a few of my own.
"I'm not saying She's a sleet, but everypony new exactly who was in trouble last Tuesday from the sound of her screams"
"check out the cumulonimbus over there, somepony should lay off the hayburgers."
"By the strands of the Cirrus Kelvin-Helmholtz! What the BUCK is that!"
11944422
Yeah, I think it makes sense for the culture. If AJ can have countryisms, so can the pegasi. Just like a unicorn saying someone annoying is "hurt in my horn", or something. As long as there's not too many of those, I think they're a nice decoration.
Review of Chapter 2: Flying North
Positive:
Traveling scenes are sometimes very hard to do. But this chapter was a whole adventure on its own. Reading it feels as a long flight, full of little things that create a long journey.
Rainbow Dash is introduced to tight fit. In more ways than one. I thought that was clever.
Negative:
Whose fault is that?
This makes no sense. It should be in reverse. If you put holes lower, the pressure on the back should increase.
After many rereads, I imagine that RD is both angry and horny. But I’m still not sure that’s the case though. The contrast is too wast to intuitivelly connect the two things into one thought.
I guess I never told you
Why? Is she trying to challenge him as in, “You won’t be able to sleep with my ass in your memory?” Is that how this is supposed to be read? I can’t tell.
“It’s just you who makes them wet!”
“At least you have other hobbies besides making wetsuits.”